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| Chapter Eleven Part I roswellachick 2003-10-16 "All she wanted to do was go have a truly spectacular fit of crying like she used to as a child and let someone else deal with everything." --awwe if only..."Almost everyone else in this room was more qualified to lead than her anyways."--soo not true..."She was the Princess on the Moon kingdom, daughter of Queen Serenity and Sailor Moon, defender of love and justice and she would be damned if she was going to let others do things because she was too scared."--now thats sounds better^__^ "I'm just a little older than you thought."--LOL i just realized how true that is "Well, being attacked my monsters and rescued by two gorgeous guys tends to have detrimental effects on one's memory." Zoicite said, earning him a swat upside the head from Ami, "A several beautiful women!"--jejeje "There was something about her, a sort of quiet acceptance of those around her..."--yup sounds like sere...thats y we luv her...dude not a borin chap--trust me i would tell ya Terenity Rose 2003-10-10 I love the story, I can't wait until the next chapter. kalinda 2003-10-10 great chapter cant wait for the next one to come out Lil-PrincessK 2003-10-05 Ack! I didn't check back in time to read and review chapter 26! Oh well. So, yea, I'll agree, nothing too exciting in this chapter, but well written anyways! Keeping up the self esteem is one thing I do! So update ASAP! Oh yea... That was a really quick entrance for Nephrite. Where did he come from, like, was he a regular at Lita's pub? That's all for now! Warube 2003-09-29 Hello. I want to say that I was intially very leary about reading this story. Mainly because I don't often read stories that use the NA dub names. At any rate, I figured any story with as many reviews as you have is worth a look. To say I was amazed is a bit of an understatement. I was completely impressed. Although, with the way you write Rei and Ami's names, I keep thinking of the original. This story has kept me very interested and I will now wait patiently for the next chapter. After all, rushing an author only produces terrible stories (well usually it does). Now I'll give a bit of a review on the grammar/sentence structure/spelling/etc. Other than a few mistakes I really didn't see anything. Just little things here and there. Thankfully there weren't enough little things to turn me off the story. I'd say that spelling and grammar are my two biggest pet peeves in reading. However, like I said there weren't enough to make me just click the back button while cringing. As for a favorite part, right now I can't say. I haven't read the entire story. There's still the chapters you have yet to write. After that I might be able to...yeah right. Choosing a favorite part of a story is just wrong on so many levels. At least to me it is. I do think you have done a wonderful job of keeping the characters as themselves. The only things I have wondered about are where Mina got the experience necessary for running a modeling agency at just what, 22 years old? Also, where did Lita get the experience for running her bar? I'm pretty sure you put in there that Serena had finished High School four years ago, and since the other inner scouts are the same age as her, that make them having graduated four years ago also. Except Ami, which you covered. I'd also like to congratulate you on weaving the generals into this fic. They are seen every once in a while in a fic, but not often. Yet you seem to be weaving them in very well. It will definitely be interesting to see Zoicite's reaction when Malachite shows up. Especially since they were lovers in both the anime and manga (even in the dub, though they did make Zoi a female there...v_v). It'll also be interesting to see whether Rei kills Jadite or not. Also the way you handled Serena was very classy. I easily believed that she would have kept at least Darien away for the simple fact that she wouldn't want to be hurt again. Oh, and I don't think she rewound time with her wish, she simply locked away the scout memories from the girls and Darien. The girls remember the things happening, but from just another bystanders point of view. Anyways, I guess I should start to wrap this up. I'm running out of things to say. I hope to see another chapter soon, but I can wait as patiently as some others. Keep up your wonderful writing. :) Sailor Momoiro Hoshi 2003-09-29 Hi again! A great chapter. I would do ANYTHING to make sure that you don't forget to update this great story! But you really SHOULD study...I don't want to see you lose money and have to give up the internet! T-T Nobody really wants that...Well, keep updating! I might change the flavor of the cookies! What's your favorite?? Kail Ceannai 2003-09-29 Less responses to reviewers! More writing! Longer updates! And more frequent updates! Ok - so this is the first time I've read your story, but however often you update it isn't frequently enough! Your plot is incredibly unique! Miko633 2003-09-29 I think i've decided to review all of the odd chapters. It's just the way it's been going and that way I'll have more to comment on. Nice job with Lita battleing Rubeus, you did a good job keeping her in character. Also Nephrite found her? That's different, what's going on there? How did he make it there to save her? So is Esmeraurde next in the line of enemies? How is Serena going to tell her parents? How is Rei going to deal with jeadite when he comes back if she can't handle the other generals now? Can't wait to see post more soon! ~Miko~ Silver Dragonfly 2003-09-29 Oh I didn't think that was all that boring. A crucial part of the story and key in settin gup further events. ^.^ BenRG 2003-09-29 *Reads reply to last review* Aw! I'm sorry if I am a source of confusion! :-p Nephrite, of course, has one other major problem that he has to deal with: Molly. I really think that he loved her, but Lita is his destined, and I don't think that he will be able to avoid it... Hey! He's gone for a walk! What if he sees Molly...? Waiting for Lita to accept her powers and for the reaction of the Tsukinos to finding out that their daughter is Sailor Moon! BenRG's Rating: 7/10 Shimmering Angel 2003-09-29 Thanks for the advice. It's really helpful. *Sigh* Finally, I found a way to like writing and not stuck on writer's block at the same time! Thanks!! (I know, I must seem like a total dunce for not figuring out before) Phoeaix 2003-09-28 Wohoo I have brownie points! Now i wonder what i can get from them tee hee hee, don't mind me i'm slightly hyper at the moment. Hmm the chapter seemed a little short - for my liking anyway lol - but yay for Lita knowing she's jupiter now and yay that Lass wasn't hurt badly - doggies i like lol I guess you can tell i liked the chapter so please another one soon? later Jabba1 2003-09-28 another great chapter, and yeah for lass being ok. i am getting excited about how this fic is moving along. i hope we get to see the villian's master plan and more of them, but i guess that will happen all in good time, no rushing these things right? keep up the good work. abby Adyen 2003-09-28 No comments, other than the fact that I'm curious as to what happened to the future... happygolucky111 2003-09-28 AWESOME chappie! i know that theyl come to the "good side" os to speak. anywho, keep writing! i cant wait for the next chappie! Usako4life 2003-09-28 Ahh yaya this was awesome. NEPHLITE!! Woot woot I feel so smart. Lol Raye probably wants to burn him. Ahh nice fluff with Sam and Serena. Hurry and update! Lol I'm sure all the Mountain Dew yur drinking makes the next chappie even better...*if possible.* Lol hurry. Great chappie! ~Belle~ missaw 2003-09-28 *drools* Mt Dew... cookies... *drools more*... lol. Great chappy! MissaW loved it... ^_^;; heh... awesome job update soon onegai!! JerseyGirl03 2003-09-28 True. This was great. I now have a question. What is your favorite color? Guardian Dimension 2003-09-28 that was great! now, the question... will lita accept the responsibilities, and become sailor jupiter, once more? and, i cant remember, has the outer scouts come into it, besides pluto? or arent they coming into it. oh yeah, thats right, silly me. its only after the first battle, but still. and what about all the other fights they have had? did serena do them alone, or did they not happen? oh well, ja ne. firelightz 2003-09-27 well, the group is almost back together. I like how the story is progressing and can't wait to see what kind of decisions are made. Part II Lil-PrincessK 2003-10-17 For the LONGEST TIME, I thought I'd read this chapter already! Then I started the latest and got so confused it wasn't even funny. Haha, k, so it sorta was... roswellachick 2003-10-16 hm faith or insanity...somtimes they're the same "...deliciously low chuckle..."--m i wanna hear one *ponder*...*blink blink* "And every time one of them would finally start to regain their composure, the other one would just look at them and they would start laughing all over again."--regain composure, bah who needs that?? yea duude poor molly *sniffle* *sniffle* last updated chapie...*sigh* & i was so gettin use 2 havin so many chaps *stares @ screen w/puppy dog eye*...maybe, u could...ya know update soon pwez...i'd luv u 4ever *pout* happygolucky111 2003-10-16 yay! lita has been getting SO much attention in these here chapters! its rockin! plus with nephlite too, but i hope malachite and jedite come into the picture soon tho. its not the same without all of them. keep writing! ^^ Bunny Moon 2003-10-16 So Good please review soon, I would love to see what happens when Serena has to meet her parents again. And also Lita's reaction toward Nephlite when she gets her memory back. Keep p the great work! ~Bunny Moon lazzykane 2003-10-14 i know it's been awhile so i tell you this is great and i can't wit for more but now the big question is are the outers coming too? Kail Ceannai 2003-10-13 More updates, more updates! You're story and writing are wonderful! JerseyGirl03 2003-10-13 I could? Gee, I never would have guessed. Ah well. This was great. Who's gonna be the next general Usako4life 2003-10-13 Hey I loved this chappie although it was somewhat short. Ahh romance with Lita and Nephlite.. WOOT WOOT! I had completely forgotten about Nephlite and Molly.. AHH! I hope Serena tells her parents.. that would be an awesome chapter!! Keep it up!! Update soon. ~Belle~ etj4Eagle 2003-10-13 Great story, have been enjoying it quite a bit and eagerly look forward to the new chapters. Bluejello 2003-10-13 Great. And I can't wait to see how it goes with Serena's parents! BenRG 2003-10-13 So... I did it again? OOps! Heheh! *Rubs back of head nervously* Sorry about that! I loved your little trip into Lita's mind. I think that you've caught the essense of the character pretty well - First, rush in and deal with the consequences later. Second, duty is everything; There is no running away from a fight. BenRG's Rating: 7/10 tiredofitall 2003-10-13 nice story but to many people in it , I hate the generals every story they are in turns into the dating game. Ocianne 2003-10-12 Oh... I absolutely love this story, even though I only found it just now. It's wonderfully original, and very well-written. Good Job. :D So, because I want the brownie points... Glas Laoch means "Green Warrior." Can I trade those in for a return review on my own stories? :) Please update again soon; this story is now officially bookmarked on my computer. And I check for updates daily. ;) ~Ocianne Kitsune Moonstar 2003-10-12 I love your story. I'm a big fan of senshi/general romances, and yours is one of the best I've read. I especailly like how much detail you take with all of the different sub stories. Keep up the great work, and definately don't give up on this story. Kit Mercurial1 2003-10-12 YAY! Lita's here! I'm SO happie! Good job! Update soon! Jabba1 2003-10-12 ahh, so good, too bad with the x-men fic taking over like that. i hate it when that happens. i hope that things work out with lita and i can't wait to see what will happen when they meet up with the other guys. tehe. i am also getting exdited about the back story on the villins too. i am just a ball full on nervous energy when it comes to some stories. and luck for you yours is one of them. wahoo!! well yeah, anyway keep up the good work and i hope to see some more soon. abby chris 2003-10-12 great story! keep it up! please write more soon... its like oxygen or something.. need... more... now... Sailor Momoiro Hoshi 2003-10-12 OOh! I liked this chapter. You could really feel the conversation between Lita and Nephlite. For this, I have brought a pack of mint oreos, sugar cookies in the shape of hearts, and peanut butter cookies! We! Transcendant Pig 2003-10-12 this is a really good story, please continue... X5-452Star 2003-10-12 So far I'm loving it. It's a new idea that I haven't seen for any SM story. I had started reading this before but with working night shifts ( 11pm to 7am or 12am to 8am) and reading after I get off work doesn't always agree with me. And chapter 27 Dealing was not boring. I like how you had all the scouts out doing what they really wanted to do (Ami in Germany). And you're allowed to us the NA names cause for some it's easier when you do it that way. I like how your using the conflicting emotions. Everyone usually just has it that it's they remember and all is forgiven. You're taking a realistic approach and it's working great. And I don't like cross-overs either. =) I hope your X-Men fic turns out as good as this story is turning out. Keep up the good writing. =) DOoDles 2003-10-11 plz plz update soon! it's getting soo interesting. i bet the next chapter would be great! *thumbs up* Prophetess Of Hearts 2003-10-11 *taps foot* I've been reading this story for an hour or two at least and you just leave it here!?!?!?! Where is your sense of decency? I WANT TO READ MORE! ... and could ya tell me when more chapters are out? missaw 2003-10-11 true, true... anyways, awesomely chappy dude. i loved it. lots. and lots... update soon onegai Silver Dragonfly 2003-10-11 ^.^ short but sweet lil interlude. However things are going to fly in the next part(s) thats for sure. Between Lita/Neph regaining memories of both joy and pain, and then Sere facing her parents and coming clean with her story... Lady of Pluto 2003-10-11 i really really really like this story. It realistically tells an alternate universe of the Sailor Moon world, without making too much of unrealistic and dumb things for the characters to do. I really enjoy this, so keep on writing!! Part III kalinda 2003-10-21 interesting devolpements its oh so sweet cant wait till raye and mina find there loves rayes should be funny love kali firelightz 2003-10-20 wow, intense. I love how it touches me, and how real it could be. You do a fantastic job of mixing the real with the imaginary and making it all mesh. I can't wait to see the next chapter, happy or not roswellachick 2003-10-20 *celebration*--yay another chappie (this makes me a happy cmaper...if i was a camper) "...positions in the girls apartment ..."...hmm do u mean '...the girl's..."? "She could feel the solid presence of Nephlite at her back, following her."thats always nice 2 have...duude i would pay 2 c nephlite give a sheepish grin "...drew his eyes back to the pair in front of him, now dressed in black armor."--jeje i love a man in uniform "And this man that she had never even seen before yesterday was suddenly causing her to feel more things than she even had words to describe."--wow *sniffle* this is beau line..."Anger. Hate. Love. Pain. Joy. Loss. Jealousy." "...in the matter of minutes from a new acquaintance to someone that he knew he could not live without."-dude thats tough..."The pain that pair of emerald eyes was inflicting by merely looking at him was worse than that of any physical wound he had ever had." *sniffle* "Mina looked up at her and gave a watery smile, "Sorry. Memories. You know?" "Yeah. I know. Are you okay?" Serena asked. "No." Mina said with a forced laugh, "I miss Malachite."-*sniffle*...i'm gonna start cryin if u don't stop this...Sanity and logic has nothing to do with love." Serena said."--wiser words have never been spoken...jeje i like the ice cream thing ugh u & u're cliff hanger--grr do u like makin me suffer i'm left w/buttrflys in my tummy...so i demand more...pwez *batts eyelashes* awwe *sniffle* thanx 4 the AN ^__^ i'm so glad u gave us (but me mostly jeje *wink*) another chappie-yay!! thankie *smile* & i did rd it ^_^ Snowgrl 2003-10-19 Great Chapter! I hope Mina decides to look for Malachite.UPDATE SOON! missaw 2003-10-19 great chappy! i can't wait to read what happens next when Serena meets her parents again. >_< mean parentals. lol anyways, awesome job, update soon onegai. Ellen 2003-10-18 Hey! I want to get something straight. *ahem* I ABSOLUTELY LOVE YOUR FIC! Thank you. *grins* I'd really love to review on allyour chappters and coment on all the stuff that I like (which is a lot) but, I'm way too lazy. ^_^ To put it simply there is tons of stuff that I agree with you about (ex. evil guys just attacking in one place) and I can't wait 'till you update again! Good luck writing the chapters! (and not getting fat from cookies) P.S. I think your reviewer responds are gonna eventually take over most of each chapter. Not that I don't like it or anything. Just warnin ya! bob 2003-10-18 great story please post more soon Redroses 2003-10-18 Hello there. I am new reader of your story. I think you are doing a good job. The story is very enjoyable. The upcoming chapters should be really interesting and how you tie them all together should be worth the wait. I found a few type o's but for the most part your story runs together smoothly. Keep writing and can't wait to see what happens Mercurial1 2003-10-18 aw..man...I'd kinda forgot about the whole molly thing...hm...this is going to get good! BTW! What's the deal with serena and the parents? are they going to believe and welcome them back with open arms? Ocianne 2003-10-17 Update!! Updateupdateupdate! Yes! More Lita and Nephrite goodness. :D Even though Ami and Zoicite or my favorite couple, I love Lita and Neph too. (There aren't enough stories with them as a couple in them, alas.) I was reading through Ch. 28 as a review for 29, and notices that you used the word "defiantly" instead of "definitely" when Neph says he'll go to the Glas Laoch. Just though you might want to fix that. (I, personally, hate it when typos sneak in.) I can't believe I was the only one to get the Glas Laoch's translation! *cheers* And thanks for reviewing my story. Just for you, I reuploaded the first chapter (with a second scene) and the second chapter will appear by Sunday. :D ~Ocianne (Oh, and update again soon! I'm addicted to this story... It's been a long time since I've read a _good_ SM fanfic that's not AU and actually has the Generals/Senshi pairing.) happygolucky111 2003-10-17 awesome man! and what do u mean, "that I'm trying to make these chapters fairly decent for all her fans"? FAIRLY DECENT?!?! MAN, THESE PAST CHAPTERS HAVE ROCKED! keep on writing, i know yull do great w/the notsohappy family reunion! Miko633 2003-10-17 Excelent job on Lita and Nephlite! Keeping them in character when they were confused and worried and then doing a wonderful job of reflecting how they would feel when this happened to them. Reliving the past all in a few moments, that must have been really hard to take and you captured it perfectly! I can never get enough of this story and I can't wait to see what my ramblings have given you an idea for. Try to include a little scene from the enemies if it'll fit, in next chapter. We haven't heard from them in a while. I hope Serena does a nice job w/ her parents and Sam better stick up for her! Till next time! ~Miko~ Usako4life 2003-10-17 Yay! New chappie. I wasn't expecting one for a LONG TIME!! But woo hoo! This was great!! Lol, I'm glad they could laugh about the situation, and that there is an "us" for them. Oh my God!! Is Serena going to tell them that she's sailor moon?? Her parents would freak out! Oh and that line you put, There is not sanity and logic in love. I put that as my AWAY MESSAGE!! I think it's awesome!! Lol.. I was like HEY I WANT THAT. Hurry and Update!! Keep it up! ~Belle~ Prophetess Of Hearts 2003-10-17 Okay, now that you've done that... how about getting around to how Sere's parents are gunna feel when a)they find out who 'S' is b)They decided if they want to listen to Sere's explaination for herself and c)Their reactions to the truth. Sailor Momoiro Hoshi 2003-10-17 Nice! I almost forgot about the initation between Darien and his knights...Very creative! Today, I bring you...hmm...-rummages through box of *slightly* fattening cookies- Here we go! A sugar cookie in the shape of a watermelon!...o.O When did I make THAT? Kitsune Moonstar 2003-10-17 Great chapter, especailly the lines about ice cream and sanity. Ohh and please bring Jedite back next. It would make for an interetsting confronation. I can't wait for the scene with Serena's parents; it doesn't sound pretty, but it does sound like it's gooing to be interesting. To live one must suffer pain as well as joy, right? Anyway, your work is wonderful as always. Kit Transcendant Pig 2003-10-17 its no problem. im still reading, and i understnad about updates. at the moment, i am in my own slur. i cant really write and when i do, it turns morbid, which isnt really what my stories are like. in fact, if you read my stories, you would see how wrong morbid would look on them since there is virtually nothing serious in it at all. in fact, its just silly. i dobnt even know how i could come up with stories like that, but since i cant continue at the moment, i will just think my morbid thoughts and reread my stories trying top figure out what will happen next. another problem is that i dont want my stories to end and i keep delaying. maybe that is why i am using my morbid thoughts as an excuse. im a terrible person. Lil-PrincessK 2003-10-17 Oh, I LOVED that chapter! I'm a bit lost still on the whole Molly thing though. I get that apparently Nephlite had some sort of relationship w/ her and because of her he was broken from Beryl's 'spell' (did I get that right?!?!) but I'm still a bit confused... Could you explain? Natalie 2003-10-17 Great Story!! I can't wait for the next chapter. BenRG 2003-10-17 Whee! Sailor Jupiter is back! So, now the Inner Senshi are reunited. Now is the time for Pluto to make her appearance (as she has been interfering for several chapters now ;-) ). And don't worry about making Serena's homecoming happy. I would be satisfied with: "You don't know /anything/ about me! Moon Crystal Power... MAKE UP!" and jaws hitting the floor all round. :-p Good way of getting Molly out of the picture nice and quick, BTW. ;-) I loved the Lita introspection. You seem to have a real talent for getting inside the characters' heads. Long may you continue (with other stories, if not this one). BenRG's Rating: 7/10 Jabba1 2003-10-17 ahh another great chapter, i am happy to see that lita and neph are talking things out and being rational about everything. nice coment about molly. i think that you should have malachite found next and then jadeite, so then you can have a great battle with rei. i think that at first she would be so mad at him and then at the end she would just drop everything and start making out with him. but you have to have some sorta yelling, and of course some throwing things, make it all dramatic. lol. anyway i can't wait to see how things go with serena's parents, i hope you get the new chapter up soon. keep up the good work. abby X5-452Star 2003-10-17 =) GREAT chapter! I like the arguement/discussion that Nephlite and Lita have. It fits their personalities SO well. Does this mean we get to see Mina and Malachite together soon, cause that would just rock. Good to hear you're X-Men story is going good. Keep up the good work. JerseyGirl03 2003-10-17 Sorry. Could you please restate that question? I was in a weird moment. I think it should be Malachite. Because when Jeadite comes it might get to be a little um... what's that word, interesting. |