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| Chapter Five Venus Smurf 2003-01-30 10Signed Truly superb. I loved the way you wove the characters back into Serena's life, making their transition back into the senshi's world more believable. Hmmm. This was certainly a plot twister. Ami already has Zoicite (thank you for that, by the way. I love the generals!), and that's going to screw up Serena's plans considerably. I look forward to seeing how she handles this. I'm glad she found Ami, though. No team could be truly complete without 'the smart one'. They need Ami's brain, if nothing else. I can't wait to see where the next chapter takes this story. You're amazing, my friend! Random Reader 2003-01-25 10 Anonymous I'm so glad to see that you have updated. I probably would have read it the second that it was posted, but I am back at school. I blame the university for the lateness of my review. I hope that you will have the opportunity to continue soon because fanfiction is so much more enjoyable to read than chapters upon chapters of the History of the English Language - despite the fact that the course is fascinating. Happy writing! Random Reader S. L. Butterworth 2003-01-25 10Signed Well, I really like the way in which you are bringing the generals into this. I don't normally like generals/scouts romances, but it seems this one is going well. Now that Mercury is practically back, where is Lita?? The suspence is killing me, update soon!! Lil-PrincessK 2003-01-24 10Signed This is truly a great story! I luv how u portray Serena as an independant person and not the total ditz others do sumtimes! Keep writing! Bluejello 2003-01-24 10Signed Ah, and Ami has entered the plot. Yay! I love the touch with the Generals. Could definately complicate things for poor Serena. And will there be a reunion between her and her family?? lazzykane 2003-01-24 10Signed glad to see that you're still alive beginning to wonder....but i like the way you slipped zoisite in there though..now i'm wondering how the rest of them are going to fall in line..please continue because i'm still here and waiting MoonWonderer 2003-01-23 10Signed Oh wow, the generals are alive!?!? I never thought of that happening! That changes everything! :) Fabulous twist! Please continue! :) Kaji 2003-01-23 10Signed OK u are far too good a writer...HOW DO U DO IT????? lol ^^ I loved this chapter...ps...IT IS SO ALLAN AND ANN and some mystery scary guy....thanks for responding to me^^ it kinda makes ya feel special...ya know??? *blushes* teehee....please continue u'r amazing story^^ Ypurs with ultimate respect Kaj. xx Adyen 2003-01-23 10 Anonymous *Thumbs up* Nice... I hope the next chapter will be up soon. PrInCeSsDrEaMyDrEaMs4eVeR4U 2003-01-23 10Signed lol yepthis is getting more better well email me anytime u update okay thanx. oh yea and could you read my new story about "Child's Toy" the first one 'Am I in Love With My Best Friend's Boyfriend". Shinigami 2003-01-23 10 Anonymous *winces* Ouch! Now that's a problem! Cuz I SO want Ami and Zoi to stay together! Hey! I just thought of something, is the Zoisite that died a clone by any chance? Cuz I heard a rumor about the Generals bleeding green, when they died somewhere...*ponders* Who is the new enemy? DOes they have a name? And I strongly doubt they are the same enemy Serena faced before... Cuz I don't remember a black stone from the manga... BenRG 2003-01-23 10Signed Poor Serena! She will never be a natural linguist, will she? Still, she knows more German than I do! ^_^ They really should have sent Mina or Darien as back-up though. Hmm! So, have the Generals been reborn? And, more importantly, are they /good/ guys this time? And what of the lurkers in the shadows? Could the Enemy be about to show its' face in all its' ugly glory? Well, you've got me panting for the next part! BenRG's Rating: 7/10 Chapter Five: Section Two princessserena66 ([email protected]) 2003-02-24 11 Anonymous sorry i forgot the new chap is good email me when u do the next.k happygolucky111 2003-02-16 11Signedhey its good so far but i hope u awaken ami and lita soon. litas the coolest of the scouts so... please hurry up! Venus Smurf 2003-02-11 11Signed Just to let you know, I don't think you copied any of my ideas. As far as I can tell, everything in your latest chapter was uniquely your own (not to mention uniquely wonderful). Even if you had, though, I think I'd be more honored than offended. Your story is too amazing to quibble over little things, and I'm just glad you updated. If it'll get more chapters out of you, you can feel free to steal my stuff anytime! Seriously, though, I'm completely grateful that you updated. That bit with Zoicite was absolutely adorable, and I was practically drooling over him myself. I can certainly sympathize with Amy's reaction! Your characterization of Zoicite was perfect (and funny, and sweet, and heart meltingly romantic), and I couldn't have asked for more than the way you described their first meeting. Does Zoi remember his past with Amy? I think he must, but I can't really tell. He might just be attracted without knowing WHY he's attracted to her. If he does remember, it'll complicate her reabsorbtion into the senshi. I don't think he'd want Amy to go back to all of the fighting, and it'll certainly make her acceptance of him a little rocky when she remembers everything herself. Still, I guess it would be even more complicated if he didn't know and she was suddenly sucked back into the fighting anyway. Poor Zoicite! Either way, he's in trouble! I look forward to seeing that trouble, though, and I REALLY want to see who this new enemy is. The guy's (bad guy, that is) freaky. The thing with the body in the alleyway gave me the shivers and everything! MoonWonderer 2003-02-07 11Signed Keep Zoicite good. I like him. But, the real problem will come when Ami gets her memories back and remembers that he was the enemy at one time. Will that change how she feels about their current relationship? Hmm....? Good chapter! :) Please continue! Bluejello 2003-02-07 11Signed Ah, a mysterious fanged figure. Whoever could it be??! Deny ([email protected]) 2003-02-07 11 Anonymous Hey, I've been planning to read your fic for a long time. I am so glad that I finally got the chance to read it. once I started I couldn't stop. It is really one better fics that I have read. I really did enjoy read I hope you update soon. I cann't wait to see what happens next and I am so waiting for the big battle. see ya soon I hope PrInCeSsDrEaMyDrEaMs4eVeR4U 2003-02-07 11Signed hehe thanks for ur review and yea i don't no this fi either buta friend told me and i read about it in computer and became interested because it's almost like cardcaptor so tat's why anyways good chapter and could u like give ideas about how to start the next chapter even though i am good in english i still am not that good so anyways please if u have time and thanx Alcandre 2003-02-06 11Signed YES!!! This is wonderful! I feel so sorry for Serena. She is so confused! OMG I love this! The description is wonderful and the emotions are sooo strong! I can't wait for the rest! Random Reader 2003-02-06 11 Anonymous Yay for updates!!! My only "complaint" is that there needs to be more! But I guess keeping us wanting more the way you do is a good thing. Don't want to give us everything we want all at once. :-P Well, in any case, please write again soon!! Happy writing! Random Reader Freakiedgrl 2003-02-06 11Signed Yay! What a great chapter. I like your orignal idea. It's cool how you put the Generals in it. I would have never thought of Ami being Germany! Lol, I was like "Oh yeah, I remember that now..." and that whole thing with Zoicite, whoo. I'm eagerly waiting for more. ^_^ The Misfit Dragon 2003-02-05 11 Anonymous No! Ami and Zoi are great! Keep going with that. SJ 2003-02-05 11 Anonymous amazing story!!!!!!!!!!! pleasepleasepelasepleasepleasepleasepleasepleaseplease update soon!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Megolas ([email protected]) 2003-02-05 11 Anonymous I really like your story. The idea is creative and your plot is also very good. Unlike some writers on fanfiction.net, I think that your story follows the characters of Sailor Moon well. Just a question...are the generals going to be good, or bad? If they're good, will all the scouts end up with their general? I have a soft spot for the scouts/generals romances. Please keep writing, and I can't wait to read more. lazzykane 2003-02-05 11 Signed glad to see you're alive and kicking.well i see serina has a small delima but i have trust it will be overcomed..so how are you going to get lita in i wonder(he-he)but i will go with the clone theary on the generals because i never thought they would go against darien in the first place...and as always i'll be waiting Marni ([email protected]) 2003-02-05 11 AnonymousI like where you are taking this story! It will be interesting to see the reactions of the others. Marni ([email protected]) 2003-02-05 11 Anonymous I like where you are taking this story! It will be interesting to see the reactions of the others. BenRG 2003-02-05 11Signed Dead body + white fangs = vamp-boy? Why not? They are, after all, the standard dark forces villains. ;-) Why did Serena back off, though? I would have thought that seeing Amy with Zoicite would make restoring her memories all the more urgent. Maybe he is a good guy, maybe he isn't. I'll shut up now. This is a good story, and I am waiting for the next part. BenRG's Rating: 7/10 Adyen 2003-02-05 11 Anonymous Well, it seems that Serena won't have any choice left soon... Chapter Five: Section Three princessserena66 ([email protected]) 2003-02-24 12 Anonymous thanx. i ho-pe ur rit and if u want its up to u i got the second chap. Kaji 2003-02-23 12Signed hey sorry i didn't review to u'r last chapter, i did like it it's just that i only just read it ^^ ok.i may need to readjust my thinking of the evil dudies.red-haired? sounds like Rubius. but maybe not.ps.i think that Darien and Serena are so cute to each other.teehee^^ and i love it.they are so cutsey! lol oh well.later.Kaj. RKRBirdgirl 2003-02-23 12Signed keep it up i love it! happygolucky111 2003-02-21 12Signed hey i cant wait for the next part of the story! and thankx for the drop note on your chapter. it totally cheered me up! just so you know, your story is on my fav. list. and i really want to see what happens next in your story! Silver Dragonfly 2003-02-21 12Signed Lots of interesting little tid bits. Poor Sere she's really dealing with a lot of stuff, and still relearing that she doesnt' have to face it all on her own. SJ 2003-02-20 12 Anonymous i'll be checking back again for the next chapter Codie 2003-02-20 12Signed stupid computer, I've been trying to read your updates for a bit now, but my computer hasnt been cooperating. Anyway, its awesome, cant wait till the next chapter. Plz update soon. Bluejello 2003-02-19 12Signed Arg, these little "whose the enemy?" teasers are gonna be the death of me!! Oh well, it is another chapter, so I suppose I shouldn't be complaining, eh? MoonWonderer 2003-02-18 12Signed Hm.demon and master.hm. Good chapter, as always! :) Venus Smurf 2003-02-18 12Signed We get complications? Great! *cheers loudly* I love complications! Wonderful chapter. I loved the dialogue, and I can't wait for more! Random Reader 2003-02-17 12 Anonymous Professors are over-rated. They're even worse when they think you can do three things at once. I hate it when they pull that. Heck, I'm just glad you actually update. I am interested to see where you take this next but I know that sometimes we just *have* to focus on school.something about failing something something waste of parents' money blah blah blah.over-rated. Right.back to that bio test. Stupid gen eds. Best wishes in school and I hope that you get to update somewhere between classes and having a life! ;-P I gotta tell you, I love your fic!! Happy writing, Random Reader BenRG 2003-02-17 12Signed Well, that promises to be an interesting Senshi meeting. Mina getting all romantic about Ami in love while Rei insists that they kill Zoicite /now/. :-D I assume that they all /individually/ know Sailor Teleport, given the distances involved. And no, you aren't evil. You know how to keep your readers interested. That doesn't decrease our stress level any but. I think Ami won't have any choice about reclaiming her place as Sailor Mercury, with the monsters/youma closing in. She might even spontaneously regain her memories if attacked. Looking forward to the next part. BenRG's Rating: 7/10 Ginny_Star 2003-02-17 12 Anonymous Good story, I like! The storyline really interesting and I loved the way you portrayed the cats 'cause not many stories have scenes like yours! Please update very, very, very soon! Chapter Five: Section Four PrInCeSsDrEaMyDrEaMs4eVeR4U 2003-04-11 13Signed happy now i reviewd it and ino wut happened when i review tis chapter the whole computer or was internet shut off on me so bye the time i did it again the school bell rang and i had to run to put my sweater in locker anywys i love the part with serena and darien sitting blah blah the way they are itz zo szweet and cutie. well g2g bye make more moments like these itz really cute. Kaji 2003-03-27 13Signed hey! I GOT A COOKIE! HEHEHEHE...ok... so when did u say u were going to write the "villians chapter"? huhn? oh well... just keep writing...i love this stuf...ps...i love the Darien/Serena mushy moments u've got going on...THEY'RE SO CUTE! ^^...well not much else to say...oh wait...do u usually send out e-mails telling when the next chapter is up? because if u did i would love to get one, cause i'm a big loser and I always forget to check...^^...Lotz Luv, Kaj. Gizelle 2003-03-19 13Signed Good stuff! I wish you would update sooner though :) When are the rest of the generals coming? happygolucky111 2003-03-12 13Signed i thought the chapter was fine in length, cause my stories are pretty short too. i cant wait for lita to come in! im totally psyched! please write a chapter about her soon, and make it really awesome! after all, the only story that ive wrote is about lita. ^_^ keep writing, so i can keep reading! Bluejello 2003-03-06 13Signed Well, I honestly don't have a clue as to who your villians are. But I really wanna know!! Gah, how can you be so evil as to keep me in the dark??! And Oreos? Oh! Me want! Er. I mean, yes, please, I'd like some Oreos. Random Reader 2003-03-05 13 Anonymous I must apologize if I seem like the demanding type. If it's any consolation, it must indicate that your story is well written and well received. ;-P Ah, midterms; that time for you too? I just keep telling myself that if I can get through this week, it'll all be all right. I have to tell you, seeing that you posted a new chapter definitely helped keep me from going insane! I thank you most graciously for that! Best of luck with your own midterms and I hope you have the opportunity to post again soon! Happy writing, Random Reader Salestine 2003-03-05 13Signed i really like your writing style.you get straight to the point :) i can't wait to read what happens next MoonWonderer 2003-03-04 13Signed Good chapter! (As always!) :) Please continue! Is it Villian Time now? Heh heh heh [evil laugh]. :) lill_one 2003-03-04 13 Anonymous I'm new to your story adn i just read cahhpies 1 through 13, and i want more! Still please ruchie and get out your new chapie (ha, i shouldn't even attempt to rhyme) Mercurial 2003-03-04 13Signed OH! This is so good! you have to continue it! Update Soon! Sele 2003-03-04 13Signed I love the fic. Please try to make the chapters longer cause they are really good. When are you going to bring up Jupiter? Are the outer scouts in this fic? neoqueen 2003-03-04 13Signed YAY! u updated of course u uploaded like 5 chaps since the last time i read it but uh yea write more soon Codie 2003-03-04 13Signed Yah! Updated! fun, hehe. Sorry, I just finished a strawberry fruizle. hm, really good. Anywayz, good chapter, cant wait to see what happens next. lazzykane 2003-03-04 13Signed well hello again nice to hear from you.it has been awhile but as i said some things are worth the wait and this is. thank you..but please put lita in soon ok ! Adyen 2003-03-04 13 Anonymous I'm still reading, and I'm wondering how you'll resolve this. Will only a few of the Generals be alive, or are they all alive, or did something else happen? Venus Smurf 2003-03-04 13Signed Hey, I completely forgive you for not reviewing my stuff.especially if your not reviewing means that we get more chapters from YOU! Beautifully done, as always. I love the fact that you jump from funny to emotional. It takes great skill to change the mood of the story that quickly, and I think you did an amazing job with it. As for the complications.bring on the villains! I'm perfectly okay with it.overjoyed, in fact. Frankly, I think the bad guys are almost as interesting as the good guys, especially if the good guys get to beat up the bad guys. I'll be waiting anxiously until the promised chapter is up! Ginny_Star 2003-03-04 13 Anonymous Hmm. I love Sailor Moon and all, but I don't know much about the generals. My focus has really been on the last series- SailorStars. I do have a rough idea on the plots of each series though (Thank God for the internet!). Yeah, a chapter on the generals might help me. Great story, please update soon! Glueing myself in front of the computer, Ginny_Star (^-^)/ Silver Dragonfly 2003-03-04 13Signed Torn Hearts slashed anew, now they have to decide how to try and bandage them up and keep them from getting shredded yet again. BenRG 2003-03-04 13Signed Well, although this chapter was short, I enjoyed it. I think that you've /definately/ got Mina in-character. She is sort of a locallised vortex of chaotic energy, isn't she. I especially liked Rei's reaction to hearing that the Generals might be back. After all, she was pretty close to Jadeite and, in the Manga at least, she had to kill him herself. BTW - You misunderstand me. I didn't mind about the individual teleports, it was just an observation, that's all. :-) Well, I'll wait to see what happens next. BenRG's Rating: 8/10 Marni ([email protected]) 2003-03-04 13 Anonymous I am looking forward to reading about the villans. It will also be interesting to read how the Generals were reborn, and if they know who they are. |
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