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First draft: 

Gang Violence

Gang is a group of individuals who share a common identity and engage in illegal activities. Their main society functions are simply carry out armed robbery, extortion, drug sales, burglaries, car theft, and open fight between factions for turf.

Why does social problem might exist? Functionalist viewpoint would best fit because of gangs it based on the society structure and live environment. Most gangs tend to be composed of young people, mainly male, with similar ethnic and racial backgrounds.

Most gang members show their membership by distinctive dress and behaviors, including handkerchiefs and shoelaces of specific colors, jewelry, tattoos, jargon, and hand gestures. They mark their territory and challenge other gangs with spray-painted graffiti or gang symbols.

Gang membership offers kids status, acceptance, and self-esteem they haven't found elsewhere. In poorer communities, a breakdown of family and community structures may leave kids more receptive to gang recruitment. However, gangs can also form in affluent areas among kids who feel alienated from friends and families.

Financial gain is a powerful motive for gang involvement, especially for impoverished youths with poor education and lack of access to decent jobs. The vast sums of money available through the drug trade have increased the size of gangs, both by recruitment and by longer retention of members. Usually only a few adult gang members make large sums of money. Aware that courts treat juveniles far more leniently than adults, they shield themselves by using juvenile gang members as everything from lookouts to gang hit men . Drug trafficking makes traditional turf battles bloodier by providing the money for sophisticated weaponry, and it creates new sources of conflict as rival gangs fight over lucrative drug territories…

 Second draft: (自己修该从上稿)

Gang Violence

Why does social problem of gang violence might exist? Functionalist viewpoint would best fit because of gangs it based on the society structure, live environment, and ethnic groups. Most gangs tend to be composed of young people, with similar ethnic and racial backgrounds.

For example, Most of the youth that join gangs have a background, which there were no parental advisors, so the gang becomes the role models and starts to act like a family. Gang membership offers kids status, acceptance, and self-esteem they haven't found elsewhere. In poorer communities, a breakdown of family and community structures may leave kids more receptive to gang recruitment. However, gangs can also form in affluent areas among kids who feel alienated from friends and families. Financial gain is a powerful motive for impoverished youths with poor education and lack of access to decent jobs. The vast sums of money available through the drug trade have increased the size of gangs by recruitment and longer retention of members.

Race plays a huge role in the gang. Asian, black, Hispanic, white and interracial gangs exist. There is a certain requirement as in race or ethnicity to be apart of the gang. Chinese and Vietnamese gangs appear to be oriented primarily toward economic crimes, such as gambling, extortion, drug smuggling, and drug distribution. Black gangs tend to murder, rape, Robbery, assault, car theft. Hispanic more likely to hates crimes and car theft.

To reduce gang violence, family, school, and community should work together to prevent kids join gangs.  Parents and school advisors alike are able to help discourage gang entry, and find a way to bring those kids who have joined gangs back into the society. Government should more effective crackdown on adult gangs including ethnic groups crime. Someday gang violence may be obsolete

Third draft: (我丈夫修改从上稿，上稿蓝色是被删除的句子）

Gang Violence

Why does the social problem of gang violence exist? The Functionalist viewpoint best fits the problem of gang violence because gangs are based on social structure and ethnic groups. Most gangs tend to be composed of young people, with similar ethnic and racial backgrounds.

For example, many youths who join gangs come from a background where there were no parental advisors. The gang becomes the role model and acts like a family. Gang membership offers adolescents status, acceptance, and self-esteem that they could not find elsewhere. Breakdown of family and community structures can leave children more receptive to gang recruitment. Without access to decent jobs and/or a poor education, the financial gains that gangs offer are a powerful motive for membership. The vast sums of money available through drug trade have increased gang size by further recruitments and the retention of existing members well into adulthood.

Race also plays a huge role in gang composition and direction. Asian, Black, Hispanic, and White gangs all exist. Gangs hold definite requirement for race and/or ethnicity to be a member. Chinese and Vietnamese gangs appear to be oriented primarily toward economic crimes, such as gambling, smuggling, and drug trafficking. Black gangs tend more to murder, robbery, and prostitution. Hispanic gangs are more likely to be involved in hates-crimes, forgery, and illegal immigration.

To help reduce gang violence, family, schools, and the local community must focus on encouraging children to renounce gangs. Parents and school can help discourage gang entry by presenting adolescents with more attractive options. Former gang members should be welcomed back into society without recourse. Additionally, Government should crackdown more effectively on gang related crimes. With work, gang violence will become obsolete.

Final draft:（最后稿由写作实验室里的责任老师作了一些修改后，作为我定稿）
　

Gang Violence

Why does the social problem of gang violence exist? The Functionalist viewpoint best fits the problem of gang violence because gangs are based on social structure and ethnic groups. Most gangs tend to be composed of young people, with similar ethnic and racial backgrounds.

For example, many youths who join gangs come from a background where there were no parental advisors. The gang becomes the role model and acts like a family. Gang membership offers adolescents status, acceptance, and self-esteem that they could not find elsewhere. The breakdown of family and community structures can leave children more receptive to gang recruitment. Without access to decent jobs and/or a poor education, the financial gains that gangs offer are a powerful motive for membership. The vast sums of money available through the drug trade have increased gang size by adding more recruits and the retaining of existing members well into adulthood.

Race also plays a huge role in gang composition and direction. Asian, Black, Hispanic, and White gangs (all) exist. Gang members must be a certain for race and/or ethnicity to be in the gang. Chinese and Vietnamese gangs appear to be oriented primarily toward economic crimes, such as gambling, smuggling, and drug trafficking. Black gangs commit more murder, robbery, and prostitution. Hispanic gangs are more likely to be involved in hates-crimes, forgery, and illegal immigration.

To help reduce gang violence, families, schools, and the local community must focus on encouraging children to renounce gangs. Parents and school can help discourage gang entry by presenting adolescents with more attractive options. Former gang members should be welcomed back into society without recourse. Additionally, the government should crackdown more effectively on gang related crimes. With works, gang violence will become obsolete.

(Teacher's comment: Great! 25/25. 因为这是考试的一部分，所以占25%)

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