Ch. 5

Ya...whatupwitthat..And only you know of course.But that still leaves it open for discussion.Or maybe it is as simple as I think .Shane was Angel's hero.Then why is Shane going after Jeff.Story line or Offstage.( both).Jeff and Shane have a thing for Angel.Only Jeff knows it, but doesn't want to admit it.

 

Til next Time,

 

Nicole

What do you mean, there's no cliffhanger! EVERYTHING about thisstory is a cliffhanger! But I love it! Can't wait to see the next chapter!

Colleen

 

 

Fallen Angel ch. 1

Grrrr....stupid stupid Unbalanced Boy!

 

i liked how you had JayLynn slowly piecing everything together on her own, without anyone taking her through it in baby steps and then when she came to her [right] conclusion she didn't let anything sway her. When Unbalanced Boy tried to be coy she didn't but into it and she stood her ground when things got bad. That showed some true strength on her part.

 

It seems that one Mr. McMahon needs to get his act together, because he should know, especially with the profession he's in, that lashing out --especially physically-- accomplishes nothing but causing more problems.

 

*hmph* And he'd *SO* better get his in the upcoming chapters. i don't care if it's JayLynn, Jeff, Helms, CharLee, Steph, Vince, Shannon, Kali...someon's gotta teach Unbalanced Boy a lesson. *Especially* since this isn't a "one-time" incident!

 

`Take Care`

-Tasha-

 

Ch. 2

Awww...poor poor JayLynn. She's been through *way* too much with/because of Unbalanced Boy and it's time she found someone to help her. A scared, disturbed and upset person is no match for a raging, calculating near-psychopath. Even if he's drunk. Or since he wasn't slurring words i'd say he was only a bit tipsy.

 

OoOoO....but if it's Kali that she runs into first, can she at least land one good one Shane? Pretty please? *puppy dog eyes* Heck, doesn't matter *who* JayLynn finds, just let them level Shane out...c'mon...you know you wanna do it!!

 

It was seriously smart of JayLynn to call Stephanie and have her take control over her character and all her upcoming storylines. By donig that JayLynn's eliminated what Shane sees as his biggest advantage. Granted it makes him angry and then leads to JayLynn having to fend him off, it was still a smart move.

 

i'm still surprised at how violent McMahon's character has gotten...though it's a good twist to the story and makes things a lot more vivid and a lot more real. The way you've built the chapter you really get a feel for just how cold Shane is and just how strong JayLynn's trying to be. It gives a really good glimpse into the "skeletons in their closets" so to speak and adds a whole new dimension to the story.

 

Very nice Jami...very, very nice.

 

`Take Care`

-Tasha-

 

ch. 7

Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh.... i was genuinely crying then, that was so good!

*sniffle* Poor Jaylynn! That was so awful when she thought Shane H was

going to hit her... *cry* Poor ickle girl.

 

That was really really ace Jami! Holy crap, my heart was in my throat half

the time... gotta got get some coffee and calm down now. *G* Ohhh, the

tension between Jaylynn and good Shane... And poor little Jaylynn still

being in love with evil Shane. And that last line - oi, what's that

referring to?? *grr* I really hope Jaylynn's going to be okay, and that

she gets with good Shane. Oh c'mon, i've been wishing it to happen for

about fifty chapters now, can it please happen soon?? *g* That was such a

good chapter Jami - more soon please! *G*

 

Rakie

Even Angels Fall

 

Ch. 24

NOOOOOOO!!!! Don't trust him!! He's evil!! EVIL!!! I think....

 

Oh no, now everyone's going to be thinking that Jaylynn's going nuts... this

is going from bad to worse... Can't... take... pressure....

 

C'mon, you have to let us down from Mt Everest soon! I'm getting vertigo up

here... and it's cold. *G* Please give my nerves a break! I promise i'll

stop writing my own cliffhangers if you do... *G*

~Rakie

 

ch. 28

Holy crap that was intense! I just about fell off my seat when Jeff came

out with that chair... what a totally evil thing to do! Dear God, what

would we do if Jeff really did something like that?? *passes out from the

thought of such an evil Jeff*

 

That was a really great chapter Jami! Are we going to get more today? I

only ask because i'm sure i heard SOMEONE mention two chapters... *drums her

fingers on the table impatiently* I really REALLY want to know what's going

to happen! Especially when Angel confronts Shannon, that's going to be ace.

*bounces up and down expectantly*

 

Rakie

 

ch. 29

I think Jaylynn is feeling the same way as me right now... i know there's

something wrong with the other night, but for the life of me i can't suss

out what it is... *G*

 

Good chapter Jami! Can i place a bet? I predict that Angel is going to go

EVIL and screw Sinful out of the title. Okay, it's not really a prediction,

more of a vague hope, but i'd really like to see it happen! *G* And thank

you for not giving us a huge cliffhanger before the weekend, i definitely

appreciate that! *goes home happy*

 

Rakie

 

Ch. 31

Dude, that was an awesome chapter and i liked 30 too. It was more show stuff than related to stalker, but it was still cool and set up a nice twist for this chapter. i liked how JayLynn had that piece of the puzzle falling into place and Kali showed support for her while still kinda havin' doubts that most people would have.

 

And the meeting JayLynn had with Shane Helms was kewl. Stupid Brock though....stupid, stupid Brock. Damn that man is stupid. Have i mentioned he's stupid? 'Cause he is. And Shane was actuallly pretty amusing.

 

i hope that you reveal the stalker soon into the sequel before Rakie goes psycho. Hell, before *I* go psycho, 'cause if i'm right i want some justification in my psycho theories soon!

`Take Care`

-Tasha-

 

 

The Flash Series

 

2/3

*cry* I'm sure i told people not to send out sad stories this week...

ohhhhhhhhhhhh, this is so sad, i'm crying like a big baby right now... how

embarrassing. I'm going to have to start reading these at home.

 

This series is really good, i love the way it's written. The two different

viewpoints thing is great. Going to go find some tissue before i read the

next chapter though... *g*

 

Rakie

 

3/3

Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh... *burst into tears*

 

I knew i was going to do that... *sniffle* Ew, now i'm all mucusy...

 

That was such a cool series! I really liked it, even if i have been sitting

crying over it for the last ten minutes in the middle of my office. I loved

the way you tackled it though Jami - i can never write about serious stuff,

because it always comes out sounding stupid when i do it. Definitely

impressed. *gives Jami a round of applause*

 

Now if you'll excuse me, i'm going home to hug Tasha's Brian Kendrick and

make myself feel better. *G*

 

Rakie

 

I'm a blubbering idiot today. That was soooooo sad. My mom was here looking at me funny the whole time she saw tears go down my cheeks. This was awesome Jami.

 

Colleen

 

 

Married with children

 

Holy f'in crap... that was so good... i dont even know what to say now.

That was incredible, it was so powerful and scary... ohmigod, i don't even

know how you can write stuff like that, i know i never could. Wow. Okay,

i'm going to go sit in the corner for a bit now...

 

Rakie

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