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Begun 11-12-2004,
20:05 CET.
Ended: 11-12-2004,
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Chapter 14 was very anticipated from most of the readers -- o.k., we are waiting for all of them. But those of us trying to determine who is the wife and who died got some hints within the last few chapters, especially chapter 13, are very aroused when considering what is coming up. The previous chapter ended with a showdown reminding the shooting at the OK corral:

Ok. Maybe not OK corral but the end of this chapter is even to this famous season closing of Dallas when these CBS guys let us wait months after the shots on J.R. In our case it have been only threee weeks.

But chapter 14 is anticipated also because of some other reasons. Coming up is this surprise party for Regan -- will it snow? Will Kendall accompany Gina and Paul to this party? Or will happen the big earthquake, the big Kendall-Gina fight? Or has Nick thought out some other surprises? What about Kendall's phantasy involving a stranger woman having sex with Paul and her? Does Paul getting his fingers into Wren's pants? Or Christie's? (Or both?).

Through the previous chapters, especially 12 and 13, the tension in which the readers have been has grown steadily. Will the tension get relieved or even get higher? If Nick is releasing some more hints, then the fox hunt can begin (before it will become illegal in February 2005 in the UK). Does Nick like it to be our fox? How chapter 14 will be?

It starts with Leah's 16th birthday on which Paul missed to think. Later Paul and Gina are phoning her... This call is getting both hot and so shortly after is following the first sex scene of this chapter — a blow-job as usual. It is her genes.

Later this day is the birthday party for Regan and Paul is calling Kendall, who changed her mind — first indication for a big fight...

"Fine," I said at last, giving up in disgust. "Don't go."
"Do you want to come down here?"
"What for?" I asked incredulously.
"I thought..."
"You thought I wouldn't go? Just because you're not going?"

Kendall really thought Paul would pass the party because she changed her mind. Worser, the call ended abrupt and soon Paul is getting in a contraverse with T.J. — I feel here a overreaction on Paul's side. What did T.J. bad except for a silly mouth? Not only T.J. has to cool it, but also Paul should. Nevertheless Glen has a cool mind and reacts silently.

But poor boy Paul gets from one argument into the next — his call with Gina let him sit between all the chairs. Gina is angry about Kendall and because Paul does so too, without any further hesitation the leave for the party.

Gina said:

(...), Regan told me that Rod's trust fund is worth four million dollars."
"Four million dollars?!"
"That's what I said," Gina agreed. "Regan's got a trust fund from her grandfather, but it's only a million dollars."
"Only," I said sarcastically.

What me came in mind — Gina seems to be a little blended by the money, isn't she? A few lines pass by and something is happen what I never expected to happen in Summer Camp ...

Regan and a guy I could only presume was Rod were on the bed. They were both nude, but that wasn't the shocking part. With her strap-on firmly in place, Regan was on her knees behind Rod. She was fucking him in the ass.

Surprising was also Gina's reaction — why she took Paul's promise never ever anybody to telll about what they saw? But soon Gina gets back to self-consciousness and starts to talk Paul into something, tries to manipulate. Again is here the pathological scheme Kendall spoke of, though with some variations. Paul categorically odmits about a blow-job by a guy but Gina is discussing the theme.

And I did not know that Gina is a hard-core feminist:

Are only girls supposed to put your dick in their mouth? It's not okay for a guy to do it?"
"No!"
"That's a pretty big double standard," she said.

There is a phrase which is coming back since the very first chapters of Summer camp.

"Treacherous organ"

But this time is the first time when Paul is not only thinking this but saying it.

"Treacherous organ," I muttered.

Why? Is Paul emotionally impressed by both what they saw and what about Gina talked with him? Is this a key point in Paul's sexual growing-up? (Though at this moment I am living only a few kilometers of the town in which Sigmund Freud was born I am no expert in these things...)

Following is another blow-job (it seems that not only a Coulter girls have a fixation on cock-sucking but also Nick has a fixation on cuck-sucking sex scenes). After that they return to Rod's. And it is spoken out the sentance that shocks:

"Who needs Kendall?"

Is this the beginning of the end of the G-P-K relationship? Shortly after being introduced to Rod and Neil Paul is deciding that he does not like them. More, he is considcering about the Greeks and is doubting about his decision to go to the party and silently he is giving Kendall for right.

"And this is Regan's big sister," Gina said, "Hayley Devlin."
Hayley's name sounded familiar, but I couldn't place it.

Me too.

I knew where I'd heard Hayley's name before: Kendall.

Yeah! It was in chapter 12:

I also gleaned a little more insight into her hatred of sororities. She wouldn't tell me the whole story, but it had to do with Big Mistake Guy and two girls she'd thought were her friends. To make matters worse, her ex-friends had been in Chi Omega. One of them had graduated, but the other — a girl named Hayley — was still at UT.

BTW. This is happen while Gina and Regan and Hayley and Margot are freshing up make-up. (Did Gina ever wear any make-up through Summer Camp?)

When Gina returned, she had a wild gleam in her eye.

Why that? A blow-job? Or just no job? The party is going wild in the pool and off it. BTW, Gina opinion on the Greeks is not only positive..

"Hayley's such a slut (...) Regan told me that she's done it with most of the Pikes. I don't think a guy can even become a Pike unless he has sex with Hayley."

This was the last strike and she was out (good for Nick he is not using boxing rules — counting to 10 would have be much more work).

On the other side Nick draws Jessica as a positive sorority figure. First she is having a longer talking with Paul and also Gina's statement gives her some credit:

"Why do you think Jess is my big sister? (...) I mean, we're basically the sorority's charity cases. They put the poor girls together."

How did they make it to the sorority? By accident?

"Gina, you're not poor. Trust me."
"I know. But that doesn't mean the other girls don't treat us like we are."

Is Gina such a masochist that she does that from own decision? Why she is not leaving these assholes for themselves?

Paul and Gina went to Regan for saying good-bye — would it not have been bater to have said good bye in French manner? (i.e. gone without good-bye). Again Gina and Regan are freshing up their make-up. And it turns out that Rod really is an asshole:

"Gonna get you some dark meat, huh?" he slurred.
He was a lot drunker than I'd previously thought.
I gave him a hard look.
"Hey, man, I'd do her in a heartbeat. Regan says she's got a hot little half-shaved pussy," he added. Then, "No offense."
"None taken," I grated.
"Oh, yeah," he said, glancing back at the house, " a little blow and they'll go all night."
Did he know what Gina and I had been up to on the boathouse deck?
"I bet Gina's a fuckin' great lay," he continued. "But hey, who'm I to tell you that?"
I didn't trust myself not to say something I'd regret, so I kept my mouth shut. After all, I was pretty sure that if I decked Regan's boyfriend, it'd cause all sorts of problems for Gina.
"I hear she's a total come slut," he continued. "I bet you like that."
And you like getting fucked in the ass, you rich prick, I thought venomously. I flashed him a tight smile, but inside, I couldn't wait for Gina to return so we could leave.

After they left the party — again Gina is horny and again a blow-job is done, though Paul is very tired. Tired from the party, tired from sex or — tired from Gina? ;)

Unfortunately, she was still wide awake. And horny, of course.

Why is Gina so screwed up? Has she taken drugs at the party? Everytime she was "freshen up" her make-up? Did she this already before at the sex-shop? Nothing is proven at the moment.

"And my nose is stuffed up, which is probably obvious."

Many coldings the last time! Still the riddle if Regan and Gina took coke is not solved, though many hints on this have been in the chapter. ("blow" — look — screwed up Gina). I am sure that in the forum will follow a wild discussion about this.

Later, Gina still sleeping, Paul is calling Kendall, still angry about her not going to the party, but surely it was the better decision she made. The make plans for dinner.

Gina was just getting out of the shower when I called her. She wasn't very enthusiastic about meeting Kendall for dinner, but after a little verbal arm-twisting, she agreed.
We ended up eating dinner at a Chinese restaurant near the Strip.
(...)
The girls didn't say ten words to each other. Instead, they ate in tense silence. I tried to start a conversation a couple of times, but finally gave up in frustration.
How had things come to this point? Where did I go wrong? What could I do to fix things?

Many questions. No answers. The main problem is Gina's sorority membership and Kendall's growing antipathy against her.

If they couldn't play nice with each other, then they couldn't play with me.

Paul's statement is fair.

I didn't tell them that, of course, since it would only make the rift worse, but that's how I felt.

But Paul should have. He has to talk about that. Perhaps things would be different if there would been at this point something like The Talk.

Short before the end of the chapter Gina is starting an argument with Paul about Kendall.

"Then tell me why she's been a total bitch to me since we got here."
(...)
"Then why hasn't she called me? Ever. Huh, why?"

I would say, because you are a total bitch, Gina. At least for the last 5 or 6 weeks. (Sorry, Gina fans. I really like her.) OTOH Kendall should know better how to handle Gina. I mean, she wants to be a partnership advisor (or how was is named?). The discussion about the wife got some new stuff. One could say if Kendall splits with Paul the odds for Gina to be the wife have grown — but Paul could be in anger about that that he would end the relationship with Gina. For me Christy is more certainly the wife than Gina.

Still there is enough text for scrolling down and so it is not surprising, that still another sub-plot is getting its place. Ledbetter is critisizing Paul's sketch and talking about — Joska. Though it is said that God is in the details, no further detail is revealed to Paul (and to the reader). Eventually, the midterm results of Joskas class are announced.

And Paul's results aren't as bad as he thought himself, and the chapter is ending with another strong statement in the last paragraph. And again it is in Joska's class.

If you want to be an architect, you'll have to pay attention to details, and you'll have to do better than this. 90, A-.

Will we know about Gina's results in chapter 15?

I did not like this chapter. Perhaps because I had a hard week in R/L, perhaps because there was no Christy / Wren stuff in it (the modelling session was handled in less than one line), but rather because of Gina turning out so bitchy. I hadn't the same fun in writing this thoughts as before. That is your fault, Nick, though you did great work, again.

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