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by Setzer
NC-17
http://minkland.dreamhost.com/setzer201.htm
SYNOPSIS:
| Sai is lured into a trap by the warlords, and the after effects have left him doubting his trust. |
MISH:
| My job was easy with this fic. When I finally got serious about reading it, I read it straight through, all 31 pages. Looking back on my notes, there were only two grammatical typos I corrected in all of those 31 pages. |
MAKO:
| Well, while Mish had the easy part, I got to look for the "artistic" quality of things. I wasn't disappointed! *cranks on ice-cold shower FULL-BLAST* Setzer left nothing to my corrupted imagination. I was very sated...PLEASED! I was very pleased! |
MISH:
|
Now, this fic is a sequel to "Torrent of Tears," also by Setzer, but you don't have to have read that one before reading this. I didn't, and I still understood quite clearly what was going on because Setzer does a great job of explaining past events, and she even does it quite cleverly.
excerpt: Knowing he�d only have to live through hell just once made it easier for Sai to comply with his leader�s demands. He told of how the barrier seemed to not hurt him as much, that he thought it had to have some component of water in it. He told of how he came back and tempted the barrier again. He told of how he knew he was in trouble when he saw the three warlords there in the submarine. And how he fought�and lost�and what they did� |
MISH:
| My only nit pick with this fic is the reference to weapons. I�m not going to harp on it a whole lot, because I don�t know about weapons that much myself, but I still find some of the names used to describe the weapons hilarious, such as Kento�s "multi-staff" and Dais� "spiderclaws." |
MAKO:
| I collect ancient weapons, and though the names Setzer comes up with for some of them are a little out there, they do work. Besides, I've seen a lot worse descriptions for the boys� "toys" while reading fics. For someone who may not have the weapons fetish that I do, Setzer does a remarkably good job. |
MISH:
|
I�ve seen the weapons referred to as many things by those of us who don�t know what their real names are, but I�ve never seen them called "toys." That name is usually reserved for something else in yaoi fics.
excerpt: Dais wiped blood from his spiderclaws on the grass. "That was an amusing diversion." "Yes, I find it quite humorous that some people waste themselves when they know they can�t win." "Well, shall we get back to work with the archer?" "Yes, why don�t we do just that?" |
MISH:
| I find this funny as well. I never imagined the warlords as cordial, especially in the middle of a battle. I know Setzer didn�t mean for this dialogue to come off that way, but to me, it really sounds like the warlords just came from a tea break. |
MAKO:
| "Dais dear, would you pass the sugar please?" Heh, actually she isn't too far off in my opinion. The warlords are supposed to be something like 400 years old, right? |
MISH:
| Sure... |
MAKO:
| And in medieval Japan, that's how they would have acted in the middle of battle: reducing their victims to a bloody pulp and talking to each other in the most courteous manner at the same time. |
MISH:
|
Well, I know nothing of Japan, but I know what I like. =p
excerpt: "I know he�s hurt all of you through me. He thought to break all of us through me. But I understand the nature of my abilities and myself. If we break at one, we have to heal together. And I trust all of you. That�s why I�m asking you this. Because it will be unfair to have one link healed when the others aren�t. They were all broken at the same time, so everyone has to help heal it in me and in each other. Or it won�t quite be the same." |
MISH:
| Two words: Orgy Justification. There isn�t an unoriginal way to come up with a reason for an orgy in fanfic. |
MAKO:
| *chanting* Orgy, Orgy, Orgy! Ah, the one thing I love about our job is looking for good stuff, like a really good orgy scene. At the rate we're going, Mish'll be a superior hentai in no time. |
MISH:
| Because of this paragraph, I�m *this* close to putting "link" in the euphemism hall of fame. Unfortunately, it doesn�t really apply. |
MAKO:
| Speaking of which, I wonder how well their "links" were healed? Okay I'm being bad now, I'm off to Antarctica to cool off. That or melt the polar ice-caps, that's how good this fic is. |
MISH:
| 9/10. Fics like these make editing seem simple. |
MAKO:
|
I give this fic a 10, simply because of how
well Setzer has
written it. She gives the "how's" and "why's'" and
blends them perfectly.
Fic reviewed on May 18, 2000 |