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by Aaron
SF/PG/S
http://minkland.dreamhost.com/aaron4.html
SYNOPSIS:
| The Ronin boys become rather nostalgic as they go their separate ways. |
MISH:
|
This fic presents a challenge for me. I don�t know by what standards to begin reviewing a songfic; they�re written so radically different from regular fanfics. Nevertheless, I�ll give it a try...
To begin, I must say, Eagle Eye Cherry never made me this emotional. Were I more of an emotional person, this fic could have easily been a tearjerker. It just has that much sap. |
MAKO:
|
Unfortunately, I'm a sucker for sap. *sniff* This fic
is so heart wrenchingly
sweet, I don't know where to begin... not bad for such
a short fic, either.
I usually see if the fic suits the song, and in this
case, Aaron did a
FANTASTIC job. I mean, look at this;
the detail is so
vivid, I can easily picture the song playing in the
background.
|
MISH:
| The fic uses a screenplay style, almost as though Aaron was trying to direct the song�s music video. |
MAKO:
| Yeah, Aaron should direct videos for MTV. Lord knows they need all the help they can get lately. |
MISH:
| It�s an unconventional way to write fiction, but it works as a technique to keep the reader�s attention focused on specific objects the writer wants to highlight. |
MAKO:
| The video style in the fic really adds to the emotion Aaron is trying to portray. The "videoness" of the fic helps to blend the scenes so as not to confuse the reader with all the different elements he crammed into a relatively short piece. |
MISH:
|
In this fic, however, Aaron also uses it to denote the passage of time, which is unnecessary in fiction (but not in music videos).
excerpt: The screen lingers a second on the couple then makes it way to a nearby window. Creeping outside, the screen pans to the top of the house. Time passes and with it the sun rises signaling the beginnings of a new day. |
MISH:
| There is one thing in particular that I feel I need to point out in this fic: the tensing. Aaron did an exceptional job of keeping the entire fic in the present tense. |
MAKO:
| One of the things I see in a lot of fics -- and I'm guilty of it, too -- is the jumping of tenses. It is hard for the novice writer, (and Mish will vouch for me on this one)... |
MISH:
| *nodding head* |
MAKO:
| ... to keep their story in one tense, especially if the author starts off in the present. |
MISH:
| Writers who switch tenses sporadically really grate my nerves, and that only seems to happen when writers write in the present tense but lapse into the more commonly used past tense. Aaron manages to stay in the present tense which is something I really appreciate. |
MISH:
| I would have given this fic a 7, but for fitting all of the Ronins equally into a really short fic, I�ll give it an extra point. 8/10. |
MAKO:
|
9 out of 10, easy! Aaron did such a wonderful
job at keeping my
attention focused on what he wanted to say.
Fic reviewed on April 11, 2000 |