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by dena
NC-17
http://members.nbci.com/riouka/hunt.html
SYNOPSIS:
| The good Doctors feel that the boys need to bone up on their tracking skills. Duo is chosen as bait, but he's not going to be taken that easily. ^^ |
MISH:
| I can�t believe it. Yet another story that claims, in the very first sentence on the page, that it is a PWP. But what do I find mere paragraphs later? |
MAKO:
|
Plot or not, this is one fic I will admit I liked.
This is quite possibly
the first fic that we totally disagree on! Pilot shag,
purrrr!
excerpt: "Dr. J has determined that we should use our down time to hone our skills. We have been instructed to perform a field exercise over the next week. One of us will act as prey and be hunted down by the rest. Each of the hunters will take a turn at tracking down the chosen one over the course of a day and night. To make things interesting the one who loses owes the winner a forfeit of his choice." |
MISH:
| Ha! A plot! Don�t authors know that PWP stands for "Plot, What Plot?" and not "Pretty Wicked Plot!"? That to have a PWP, there must be shagging for no apparent reason? I mean, can I explain it any better? Must we demonstrate this point? Mako�? =)~ |
MAKO:
| If you insist? *brakes out the toys* |
[Activities censored by, eh, Geocities. ^^]
MISH:
| *Ahem* Back to more important matters. The first thing that struck me while reading this story was its use of exclamation marks. I love it when exclamation marks are used in third person. It�s like the narrator has a personality. Unfortunately, that�s all I found positive about the writing. The rest of the story is full of poor grammar. |
MAKO:
|
Nope! I won't say it, I'll be good. Besides, I was too
interested in all the
different shag scenes to notice the grammar. It was
like being in a daze.
=)~~
excerpt: Duo watched as an array of emotions flew across Wufei's face, but finally he nodded. Duo reached down and offered his teammate a hand and pulled him up. Duo was on him before he had a chance to react. |
MISH:
| Mish read the story. Mish wished she didn�t have to, but it was all Mako�s doing. Mish was on her before she had a chance to react. |
MAKO:
| Says the person who wanted Pilot Shag. |
MISH:
|
=p =)
The story itself is unique. It�s both smutty and a character study. Not only do the Fly Boys get to kertang, but they each learn something about themselves, too. |
MAKO:
| Smut.......... |
MISH:
| I equate this to being introspective while smoking the after-shag cigarette. But this became a pattern in each part. I really wasn�t in suspense while reading this story, especially when I was told the ending, the steps to the ending, and the ending again. This happened in every part, and I got bored with its repetitiveness. |
MAKO:
| *lights up a smoke and rereads it just for the smut.* |
MISH:
| 4/10. Despite the many climaxes in the story; the story itself didn�t have one. |
MAKO:
|
7/10. The grammar does indeed need work, but the plot
was sure as hell
original!
Fic reviewed on November 12, 2000 |