Reflection on "Two Screens Are Truly Better Than One"
This paper was evident of the Effective Communicator ESLR because I had to take information from magazines and the Internet to manipulate and produce the report and my biased tone throughout the paper was used appropriately to try to persuade my reader. This essay had its flaws in grammar and the information dictated in the argument. In my sentences, punctuation was the main problem with stray commas, non-italicized words, and forgotten words looming around the paper. Within the internal technology section, some of the features of the two systems were incorrectly stated; these errors are the DS microphone jack (it actually was built in) and the name of the PSP’s ultra mini discs (the actual name is universal media disc). This use of misinformation has made me set the goal of double-checking my data before submitting it.
As for what had gone well for my essay, more than adequate information was presented, thus giving me the full amount of points for the criteria. The thesis was okay as it clearly stated my opinion on the topic, but when one reads the statement, it seems likes there is something missing. Finally, I think that with the facts stated in my testimony, this essay would serve as a great source from someone to argue from (of course, with the needed changes).