This I think qualifies as my first serious foray into the world of narrative poetry, although I still refuse to abandon form and structure. That mostly comes from the source of this poem, which namely is the comments I received on my final poem submission (Daniela) to my creative writing workshop which I couldn't stand. It read
"Julian, you continue to write as if the 20th C. pretty much never happened, as if you could be some reincarnation, perhaps, of Edgar Allen Poe. It's frustrating, because apparently the class made no impression on you - also because you're not unskilled, you have a sense of how to manipulate language and meter. You just don't seem to show any desire to speak as a contemporary man, or to break through to more challenging and complicated subject matter. Oh well. Maybe in time..."