| State of the Union address? What the Hell! [This has nothing to do with your paper] With television as prevalent as it is today, many people think that it is the responsibility of programmers to include some sort of diversity within their broadcasts.[needs development] And you needs to be gettin off my ass... Though the politically correct movement is on its way out [is it?], some still cling to the belief that characters should exhibit the cultural variety that is supposed to be so ubiquitous in the "real world." This theory is fallacious [why? support]; it is the sole duty of the television industry to supply shows that the intended audience would find most appealing in content, rather than in the aesthetic sense.[rationale?] This assignment, like all others, is gay, so I don't take it seriously. How's that? Those in favor of more advanced integration of minority characters into television claim that stereotypes are inherently iniquitous, and that is how these characters would indubitably be portrayed.[Passive voice] God Dammit! I know what passive voice is,and that is not it! Fucking drop it! The fact is that, in general, stereotypes are correct over the majority of a population. It is only a few individual case studies that may dispel these preconceived notions. For example, my friend James is from Iowa, but at the same time he is articulate and cultured in areas other than corn and soy production, as per the generally accepted theories about Iowan society. In contrast, and in support of my assertion, two roommates down the hall from me, Steve Cheng and Adley Chan (both Asian), look remarkably alike. Their appearances are so similar that they may, and do, regularly exchange USCard when necessary. [How does appearance support your argument?] Besides being hilarious, it's a stereotype that all Asians look alike. I didn't think I had to say it so explicitly, but hey, some people are dumb. To say that the television industry regularly represents a certain group according to a set mold or standard is indefensibly incorrect. For every example in favor of such a predetermined form, there are several more in opposition. While "COPS" may unfairly depict African-Americans, putting aside the fact that those individuals are criminals on a reality show, [is it that easy to put aside? what about the other races that are criminals on COPS?] Oh come on, the only time a white guy gets arrested on COPS, it's because he was beating on his wife. That's not really a crime... there exist several shows promoting quite the opposite; that African-Americans are talented, funny, and family-oriented. This set includes, but is not limited to: "Showtime at the Apollo," "The Bernie Mac Show," and "Cedric the Entertainer Presents." "Showtime" is itself a reality show exhibiting urban youths' proclivity for song and dance, but "Bernie Mac" and "Cedric" are scripted with slight basis on reality, and yet all three contain very few Caucasian characters.[So?] So...pissed off...right now...you guys... Though no one clamors for more white people on them, none of these shows should be pulled, [who is trying to pull them] The Man... if only for their entertainment value, and also the revenue created for their respective networks. To deny these companies well-earned profit in a capitalist system is nearly treason, and I dare not suggest my reader's socialist sympathies. [We've talked about this] Sure have, and since you draw attention to it so much, it's going in every paper now. Returning more to the topic, the media, and television in particular, has [have] no real cause, right, or obligation to modify their broadcasts in order to cater to those bellowing for equality/accuracy in the presentation of minority characters.[Why not?] Oh, the answer is in the bottom of this piranha tank. Just reach in there... Because of the pre-existing variety, these "wannabe" activists [who?] Do I really have to say it again? can easily placate themselves and change the channel to watch reruns of "Family Matters". Without the last season, that may just have been the greatest live-action television show ever.[Prove this - give evidence to show why it is important] Now that's totally unnecessary--Come on, it's Family Matters for chrissake... On its own accord, the industry has come a long way from its inception, with almost no minority characters, or very clich�d representations thereof, especially for blacks and women. Neither "The Flintstones" nor "The Jetsons" contained minority characters, and the wives in both cases were no more than child-rearing, homemaking drones with shrill, infuriating voices. [Develop this] Ok, women are inherently subordinate. They should cook and clean and shut the hell up. Happy? If what Americans see on television has such an effect on them, the fault lies with no one in particular, but within each and every person who allows him/herself to be so impressionable. If a developing child has ingrained in him these deceptive characterizations, those responsible for his physical and mental upbringing should be admonished [Passive voice] Not even close. Take a look at a grammar book... for not instructing the child to the contrary, rather than targeting the media.[Support this] Is it worse to teach a child incorrectly, or to sit knowingly and complacently without resistance? Do I need to continue with this? [Yes - prove it w/ support] Does the word 'rhetorical' mean anything to you? |
| This one was about TV and shit. I hated writing it, I think that's obvious. It robbed me of two hours of my life and I want them back! I think I'm really starting to get to the teacher; this time she wrote comments on the back of EVERY page. |
| Random Comment at the bottom of the 1st page: [explain what stereotypes have to do w/ TV in the first place.] |
| [This para-graph has two main points] Yeah, ain't it great? |
| On the back of the 2nd page: [Was Family Matters live action? I don't think it was - wasn't it the "black Full House?"] Appalling...she later crossed this out and wrote [forget this. I get it now.] |