| In addition to the points already made, it may also be maintained that certain aspects of our culture are not ready to deal with others. When my own father, a hard-line "old timer" happened upon "Will & Grace" for the first time, he nearly fell into cardiac arrest. He is by no means sheltered, but to see homosexuality so flamboyantly expressed [passive voice] OK, finally she gets one right... was a shock to his antediluvian ideals toward socially acceptable behavior as well as those of many other people of similar age. He's 52. In this way, television reflects the general American ideal of progressive thought to an extreme degree. Sometimes we just aren't ready to deal with certain things.[explain] Gays freak soem people out, what more do you need? Damn... [Transition] Nah, I think I won't... As a lazy person, I don't attempt to do much, but I consider myself an interesting person. It would be in the best interests of the television industry to do the same; when it tries to institute politically correct programming, the effect is usually drab, uninteresting prattle, i.e., "the View." [support] No one likes to listen to women talk... On the other hand, attempts at appealing shows usually result in feelings of "what the hell is happening to this country?" or "fifty bucks a month for this?" and hours of pensive introspection. [example?] Sure, when I mentioned Joe Millionaire in my rough draft, she made me take it out... The television industry is certainly not responsible for acting affirmatively in increasing or altering the minority roles in its productions. [why not?] Hence the following fucking paragraph... Political correctness is an intangible quality, and for the sake of creativity, it should remain so. [huh?] i.e. don't be politically correct... Charles Osgood, whom I shall try never to quote again, once said "Being politically correct means always having to say you're sorry." [cite] Cite random quotes now? Never! Is this right? [You tell me] Again, the rhetorical nature of the question is lost... Is it no longer permissible to show things how they are? Must we lie to ourselves by means of our televisions? The most racially diverse and culturally innovative channel must be the one that is always static...the intermingling of white and black is so natural but yet it masterfully avoids cluttering its majestic vision of communal utopia with an overt political agenda. [What is your point here?] That I know big words and I can string em together easily if I were so inclined... As the Beatles sang: "Let it be. Let it be. Let it be. Let it be. There will be an answer, let it be." Can't believe she said nothing about that... I can watch "Friends" at whatever time it comes on to get my fill of "white-people laughs" (not that I would ever laugh at that show), and then "Comicview" immediately afterwards, or during the commercials for some karmic/comedic balance. It is my choice to voluntarily vary what I watch, not the industry's duty to regulate it. [redundant - choice/voluntary] Didn't know if you'd be able to make the connection as that seems especially difficult... Too bad the televisions in the Radisson don't get BET. It's just the Man keeping me down. Fight the Power. As Chris Tucker said, "Boy, you never touch a ... man's radio," [cite] OK, maybe I should have there.. and the same certainly applies to his television. [Out of context quote] And that's why it's great. to quote Kevin Spacey in American Beauty, "I rule." [This does not strengthen, nor advance your paper, and as a conclusion it does nothing to conclude your paper.] Did someone say something about redundancy? Modest Grade suggestion: A- What I think I deserve: A+ [For a paper that didn't even meet the page requirement] I almost did...I was halfway down the fifth page, and the quote at the bottom here made it five pages. I put this at the very bottom in size 9 font, in a sort of protest of her grading tyranny: People do not deserve good writing, they are so pleased with bad. - Ralph Waldo Emerson [I'm going to ignore this...] |
| Lucas, While your paper does address the topic, and while it does take a position. you fail to adequately support that position. You keep saying that TV/media has no responsibility but you never show why, but instead you go on to other points. Other times you make other points w/ no examples or support/evidence. Other times, as on page 5, you seem to give support, but neglect to make any point w/ it. I know your antipathy for the academic d. c. (discourse community), but again, you are being needlessly offensive in your writing style to such an audience. D |