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Reflection

          When I was trying to make corrections to the paragraph, I tried to focus on getting the paragraph organized and make sure the mechanics and grammar were corrected. The original paragraph that I wrote was really long and was not organized at all even though it had some good ideas within it. Instead of having just one large paragraph I decided to break the paragraph up, so that it could be more organized. In the first and second paragraph I mainly focused on the rules of the NCAA, and in the third paragraph I focused on arguing against the NCAA rules. Also in a few of my sentences in the original paragraph I had some problems with noun pronoun disagreement. I went back through the paragraph to correct that. Also, in the paragraph I had a few grammatical, spelling, and mechanics errors that I had to correct. I read over the paragraph again to correct the grammar, spelling, and mechanical errors.