Example: Dramer quickly rose up and looked around, sensing evil. He saw an enemy coming, so he quickly pulled his sword and held it up. "Come no closer, Molgard." He spoke quickly, wanting Molgard to leave his presence.
Example of (a) Correct Way: Dramer shot to his feet and looked around, sensing evil. He saw an enemy coming, so he pulled his sword and held it up. "Come no closer, Molgard." The words tripped over themselves in their eagerness to be said.
Simply by changing a few words (a thesaurus is a handy device), or being a little more descriptive...You make the rp post much more enjoyable to read, and also succeed in looking more experienced and/or polished.