Latest Review - Tenchi Muyo: Washu's Pain

I don't know WHAT to think about this fic in all honesty...It's not really a god awful fic...But it's not the greatest either. So, look at my review and then read it...o_O and feel free to email me with your opinion (PLEASE only do this if you're an avid Tenchi Muyo! fanatic).

Layout: +45 (I count how many paragraphs you have and then multiply it by the 5 because you usually if you don't know how to paragraph correctly, you won't get a lot of points because you won't have a lot of paragraphs)
At least she knows the meaning of the word PARAGRAPH. When she wanted to talk about something different, she got a new paragraph *applaudes*

Characters: +3
Seems to me that Washu's too happy/carefree/fun for this to have happened to her. It's just kind of bizarre for WASHU to have killed her brother and feel such deep remorse and agony...And then go and try and get semen from Tenchi.

Grammar: +5
I didn't see any spelling errors, or puncuation errors. The only thing I would say is try and explain things better ^^ I know it's meant to be eerie and creepy but it's sort of confusing too, for me anyway. And I won't take any points off for it, because frankly, everyone does it XD But NEVER call yourself "Chan" or "Sama" or "San" or "Kun". It's not grammatically correct...in JAPAN ;p~

Spelling: +5
Like I said, she spelled everything correctly, obviously finding how keen that spell check is! *salute*

Extra Points?: +5
I took some out because I just find it all a little hard to swallow ^^ I mean...How can a doll-girl be a goddess? ^^;; I know that the author must've gotten this idea from Washu's talking dolls A and B but it's little iffy ^^ But she wrote it well, so I didn't take off the full 10 points.

Overall: 163
It's actually a pretty good fic but I wish that she'd explain things clearer. Still, it was well written and if you use your imagination and pretended it REALLY happened, you can see how Washu would feel that way ^__^ Maybe make it a tad longer ;D Add some things. Then maybe you'll get a 200 you over achiever you!