| Steve Cummins Example |
| ?Original: Described in excess, to minute detail, these metphors crop up multiple times and provide memorable comparisons that allow the reader to connect with the characters and actions even though the reader may not have any expericane with the original object or action.With this example the writer basically explained in excessively wordy language how an extended metaphor is used and does not even talk about who or where the metaphors are used. Revised: King utilizes effective extended metaphors in "Misery" that connect the story to objects or situations that the reader may have experienced." |
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