Review #1 by Jenime Again, I am soooooo sorry that the review process has been slow. Let's rectify: *hands over a basket of plastic fruit* There, all better. Now, to take care of this ruddy Graikos, da bastards. Gwyn: Like there isn't enough of them? I'll give a dollar to the next new Romanus, I swear. Basics: Looks all good to me! *thumbs up* Gwyn: Senshi of Pride? The Graikos have no Pride! Just look at Perdix and Jace. On second thought, get some protective lenses (like a blindfold) first. OMG, a Graikos with an actual boyfriend! I am so proud of you Meg. Gwyn: Ten bucks he's gay.... or into being whipped. Or that I could get him to cheat on her. He sounds nice. But oh! I spoke to soon! There's a boy-toy here too! Gwyn: All Graikos girls are SLUTS. Ha, this is cool. I like the fact that she dominates her roomate too. Gwyn: Ha, dominate. Did I hear threesome? Skills: *nod* Interesting. Gwyn: Makeovers and puppets? Did anyone see that movie MAY? Likes/dislikes: It makes sense, you'd have to be drunk to love designing women. Gwyn: That show SUUUUUUUUUUUUCKS. But I bet you could make a decent drinking game out of it. Like, drink everytime an ugly woman comes on screen! You'd be drunk in the first five minutes, no problem. Hahahaa, and she's got lesbian hating issues. This chick cracks me up. Gwyn: I'm gonna climb in her window at night and lick her. As far as the food goes, I'm suprised and impressed. Gwyn: She likes her fries greasier the better, but not greasy doughnuts? Well yeah, double standards. I need a little explaining on how dance class is her favorite and hated subject. Color: EXCELLENT COLOR. Gwyn: A cheap one too. She matches my bedfame, which also peels in places. Aspirations: She doesn't know, THANK YOU. That's realistic, I love it. History: Gwyn: YAY for whoever tried to beat her ass in the cafeteria! *Jen makes a really confused face* Clogging team? And this girl is seen as cool by her peers? *gag* Wait, HAHA, it didn't get you into college either! Gwyn: Now you're being mean. Though I shouldn't stop you. She's a bitch. For shame. Great so far! I like her history. Persona: Word. Excellent. I can't wait to see her clash with the other vapid ego maniacs in the Graikos clan. Gwyn: I'd bet on her in a fight against Leta. I also would bet that she gives Zach an STD. And I just wanna throw in that Tyche should die. Cuz he should. *points at him* You and your stupid hat!!!!! Appearance: Cool, I love the feet detail. Gwyn: Yup, nasty toed slut. Fuku: Cool she gets a sword. I hope she'll use it! Gwyn: Haha, scrunchies of doom. Powers: *giggles uncontrollably* Oh I love this power of awe bit. That's chuckles. And the other power is good too. Sufficient to even out the sword having. Final Verdict: ACCEPT WORD! _______________ Review #2 by Jen Crikey... *Stretches her hands back and hears joints crack* I haven't reviewed in a long time. Hope I haven't lost my touch. My apologies to keep you waiting Ms. Deanna. So we've got an Achilles here - senshi of Pride? This should definitely be interesting. Not an overtly significant name but significant noneoftheless. Good stats - I would have been surprised to have seen her not a Leo. Ahem. As for Megan's family, her parents are well described as far as background go but they could do more with personality. How do they behave around their peers? Are they active in the community? How do other family members view them? I understand that they don't serve an active role in Megan's life currently but some personality to them would flesh them out. Same with Daniel, Vince and Bobbi. I get a good idea of their roles but a few more sentences on personality would flesh them out nicely. Another Hollins Girl. Just because I'm nosy about this, might Megan have any interest - near future or far future - of taking up dance classes just for the heck of it? I know she gave it up after not getting into great dance academies worldwide. I would just think that being proud would mean that she wouldn't give up on something that she enjoys. Anyhoo, not a huge deal - just a little question from my curious mind. Her preferences make me crack up, even if I can't personally stand rats. Another question: for favourite class you put down "Any dance class. Anatomy." Under hated class you put down "Any dance class. British literature... (etc..)." Where does dance class fall then? Does she like it or hate it? That confused the heck outa me. History and personality go along fine for the most part. How did Megan do in school? In personality you mention that she is neither overtly intelligent or overtly stupid. Has she always been moderately smart? What subjects did she struggle in, if any at all? Was it just a certain aspect of the classes - tests, participation or exams? Or something else related to classwork that I'm completely forgetting? I'm surprised her parents didn't push her to take more care of her feet, considering they're both podiatrists. Her bully attitude makes sense, matching it up to many of her preferences. Having to be the best, disliking those who don't strive to be their best. All makes sense. Congratulations! Going on down to appearance. You got all the important bits but, aside from the bras for formality-sake, what else did she wear? Seeing as she likes diamonds and treats herself to tanning salons and manicures I would take it that she dresses nicely. But still, an idea of what styles she wears would be great. Good functional fuku; I don't think swords are overly used in this game so I have no issues. Henshin - it's got to be "Achilles Divinitas Power, Make Up!" Exceptions are for when you elevate or if you're a guy senshi. Sorry hun. But the henshin itself is good, efficient and yet cool. Panache cracks me up, good effects, good drawbacks. And damnit! - I want to see a senshi of cynicism! XD Be a Hero... I'm a little confused. I can see how the effects of the weakened spell would be, "like a big hug and a jolt of caffeine." What would be a comparison to the regular-energy spell? I think two minutes for said attack would be okay, maybe cut it down to a minute or a minute and a half. Let the Powers-That-Be decide on that. Hmm, over all I am impressed. I don't recall having reviewed your first submission of Megan but I do find anything that needs a whole lot of fixing up for the resubmission. So I hereby proclaim Accept with Revision! There are a few minor things that need to be fixed up but aside from that you're good to go! Hope to see you in the game! ___________________ Review #3 by Lege *Legend slips on her reviewing gloves* All right. Slacking time for me is -over-. Really. I promise. Or something. Name is a nice, normal name, which I like. ^_^ Of course, I'm also partial to the name Megan, so maybe that's a factor. General stuff checks out just fine with me..except don't we already have a ton of eighteen-year-olds? I may be wrong. It wouldn't be the first time. Family is usually one of the sections where I'm picky...mum could use a bit more fleshing out, you don't say much about her on her own, only her relationship with her daughter, which is important, but still. You also don't say what she looks like other than short and round, which isn't particularly descriptive and gives me no idea why Megan doesn't want to look like her. o.O Dad's about the same as mum- needs a bit more fleshing out, some physical description, just so we can get an idea of him. Parents are people too ^_^ Although since they're not living with her, I suppose we can let it slide mostly. I won't take off points for it! Boyfriend is lovely and I adore the poor dear. I'd be very very happy if we could change the boytoy's name merely because he's freakishly similar to Vincenzo over in Rome and that gives me the chills. Also, you left in an Antonio or two in the description. Same with the roommate and "Bobbi." Likes check out, dislikes...well, -I- like Insurrection. XD. I just don't like the newest one. But they all check out nicely and make me happy, so it's all good. Hobbies are just fine, though one or two more wouldn't hurt. Still, you fill them out nicely so it's okay ^_^. History is very detailed, although all the information on the dance classes is slightly worrisome when it doesn't seem to play an important part in her life anymore...Although it is important enough to have effected her life. There's just a bit too much detail about it for the smallish role it seems to play. Personality is -lovely- and perfect and I adore it. ^_^ I can't punch any holes there. So is appearance. Fuku is nice, althought if I remember correctly swords are overused, but that may be somewhere besides Roanoke o.O...but we can forgive it, because you mentioned it and you're right, Achilles does need a sword. Abby: Just so you know, I like her. Like really. I think we'll get on very nicely. Only because you think the rest of the Graikos are pansies and hey, this one might actually fight. Abby: ...well yes. What other reason is there? And now we know why she gets on so well with Percy. Continuing-- you can't change the transformation sequence, but other people have harped on that so I won't. Be a hero reminds me of a Garou trait, but I'm a loser, so that doesn't matter ^_^ I like it. Overall-- pretty bloody good! ^_ ^ My verdict-- Accept with minor revisions Abby: *thoughtfully* I wonder if we can set up Graikos training sessions? Together Megan and I could actually whip these losers into shape! ...you should've stopped talking while you were ahead.