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e john e  unModerator Posts: 1879 (5/8/06 8:02 pm) Reply | Edit | Del All 
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one moon'sone moon's phases pull me to you and when you're not around i dance inside and under not even moving moonlight in your eyes a few miles away your colors are perfect pastel against the real the chill is in the air all is metaphor spanish in the park cold coffee and cream embrace me once more by share of night i touch you soft fingertips bright ~ 5 8 06 Edited by: e john e at: 5/10/06 11:53 am | |
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Nicholas J Junkheer Posts: 621 (5/9/06 11:57 am) Reply | Edit | Del 
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Re: one moon's ah... john sneaks out and then slips away unseen noi siamo commossi fino alle lacrime... Edited by: Nicholas J at: 5/9/06 12:00 pm | |
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LetaJo Mod Posts: 981 (5/9/06 12:14 pm) Reply | Edit | Del |
hmmm... something is really erotic here about cold coffee with cream...is that weird? Enjoyed this, John | |
pjsnights  Mod Posts: 837 (5/9/06 2:32 pm) Reply | Edit | Del 
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Re: one moon's this is a beautiful love song. a person getting this would be all tingles when she reads it. pj Edited by: pjsnights at: 5/9/06 2:32 pm | |
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nativedancer Dot Posts: 190 (5/9/06 5:01 pm) Reply | Edit | Del |
Re: one moon's exhilirating, john! the hallmark people are all hiding their heads in shame! how about dropping "the next moon" and just pull that last stuff together? | |
Tasha1  little suzy sunshine Posts: 25883 (5/9/06 5:33 pm) Reply | Edit | Del 
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Re: one moon's LOL christine! it kinda made me feel like playing brown eyed girl by van morrison  | |
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e john e unModerator Posts: 1888 (5/10/06 11:51 am) Reply | Edit | Del
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thanks all jim, i dunno what i was doing there, something got twisted in quick rewriting and stuff, will fix temporarily, at least, thanks a lot dunno if i like the word HALLMARK on a thread of mine, unless it is used in a non-corporate sense, heh tasha her eyes are green "i have abosolutely no idea what's going on..." Towlie johnlie | |
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Nicholas J Junkheer Posts: 624 (5/10/06 12:31 pm) Reply | Edit | Del
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Re: thanks all all is metaphor.... remind me of neruda.... in il postino when the postman asks: then is the whole world a metaphor for something else? | |
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e john e unModerator Posts: 1890 (5/10/06 12:44 pm) Reply | Edit | Del
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that's where it comes from, yes j. | |
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Dorothy D Mienko Dorothy D Mienko Posts: 368 (5/10/06 12:49 pm) Reply | Edit | Del |
Re: that's where I never give up on poems with moons in them. I think I am a moon junky- this is soft touch lovely dorothy | |
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Nicholas J Junkheer Posts: 628 (5/10/06 12:55 pm) Reply | Edit | Del
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Re: that's where serendipity son... I just finished watching il postino before signing in. | |
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pjsnights Mod Posts: 839 (5/10/06 1:55 pm) Reply | Edit | Del
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Re: that's where i bought il postino at the thrift store a year or so ago and FINALLY got to watch it (my family doesn't do subtitles). i love that movie. pj | |
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Nicholas J Junkheer Posts: 630 (5/10/06 2:09 pm) Reply | Edit | Del
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Re: that's where I always do subtitles. In fact to make sure that I get it all... After the first viewing, the next are all done with the sound turned down and the closed captioning on. | |
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e john e unModerator Posts: 1893 (5/10/06 2:18 pm) Reply | Edit | Del
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* everything is metaphor is a powerful thing to say and think it's like the opposite of writing a poem, almost it's a tremendous interaction between "out there" and "in here" vivifying and creative, instructing and delighting johning | |
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Nicholas J Junkheer Posts: 632 (5/10/06 2:22 pm) Reply | Edit | Del
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Re: * yeah... its like one vast poem out there... and you just gently pluck or raggedly tear out sections as the mood strikes. | |
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raysweat Moderator Posts: 2276 (5/10/06 3:11 pm) Reply | Edit | Del 
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Re: * wonderful! | |
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annaswirls Jennifer V Posts: 497 (5/11/06 2:06 am) Reply | Edit | Del |
lovvely under the red clay dust these hand scratched words of a love note that fell from a hole in his coat pocket | |
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Nicholas J Junkheer Posts: 640 (5/11/06 11:42 am) Reply | Edit | Del
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Re: lovvely hmmm, you would have a rhyming couplet if you switched the last two words somehow. | |
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NEILringsmith enil Posts: 699 (5/11/06 4:20 pm) Reply | Edit | Del 
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Re: tasty the chili is in the air hah! food fight! i'm sorrynotsorry. why are you makingnotmaking the President unhappyhappy? We're All Bozos On This Bus The Firesign Theatre | |
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