Trojan Times Review #2
Written by 'Cyrpt
As usual, The Trojan Times had its errors, but it seems to be getting better. Some may disagree with my methods of capitalization, but The Trojan Times needs to pick one way and stick with it. The inconsistency is annoying.
“Students riled up…”
Yay!! Only two run-ons! Even though it pained me to re-live Prairie Pig week, I'm sure some students found this article informative. I realize it might be challenging to find quotes, but it would be nice, especially for the front page article, to have a quote other than, “I’m a funny guy.” More quotes from more people probably could have made the article a little bit better.
“Post Falls wins the pig back”
Nice article. There wasn’t really anything to mess up in an informative piece like this. It was nice to find out how the points were distributed.
“Key Club…”
It is nice to recognize the Key Club, but reading about something that happened over a month ago is just a little too out of date for a newspaper. Other than that it was a nice article.
“School allows students to makeup absences”
Interesting and well written. Kudos.
“Students
unite in Breaking Down the Walls”
This wasn’t really an article containing any news. Seeing as
how it was placed in the “News” section, there should
have been some actual information. This article best belonged on
the opinion page, if it belonged anywhere at all.
“Snowball dance disappoints students”
So is it the Snowball Dance or the Winter Ball? Consistency seems to be a problem at The Trojan Times! One minor detail—if “Snowball” was the name of the dance, ‘dance’ should be capitalized in the title.
Overall, it was *cough* okay.
“NHS helps…”
The article is pretty good. But doesn’t everyone know that the first word of a quote is always capitalized? (“ ‘why on earth…’”)
“Basketball teams assist in bringing the pig home”
The author of the article has a talent for writing sports recap articles, but they really need to work on proof reading. The article was loaded with errors. Here are my favorites:
“After half time, the Lady Trojans came out determined after half coming out and reading for action.”
Without the much-needed punctuation and grammatical fix-up, I had to read this a time or two. Speaking of two…
“…moving Post Falls up in IEL standings to number too just under Coeur d’Alene.”
Oh, and there is plenty more. I encourage you to read the article!
“Junior Brandon Haas Scores Spotlight”
Maybe the author should stick to sport re-cap articles, because this one is really choppy and doesn’t read well at all. Having part of a column missing doesn’t really help either.
“Wrestler excited…”
Nice article.
“JV Basketball playing for the love”
The title of the article has absolutely nothing to do with the article except for the “JV Basketball playing…” It seems like the last sentence of the article “All the boys on the team are very committed and have a love for the game,” was just slipped in at the end in an attempt to justify the title. The article just wasn’t well written.
“Winter Roads leads…”
Well, the article was going nicely until I get to the part about 16 year old Mrs. Gilstrap. Not only was it unnecessary, but it came out of nowhere, and it ruined the article.
“I had a dream…”
This was a well written article, and it was interesting to read.
“Student of the Month”
Good article. It's so nice to know that honors kids at Post Falls High School judge their classes on how much fun they have. Who cares about academics anyways? *cough*
“Teacher Feature”
Interesting article. I have her 18 month old in my classroom at work. She’s quite cute.
“Junker of the Month…”
Just like last time, I think this article is a waste of printing space, and it is pointless. At least this time it was written a little better.
“Manners…”
I do realize this article was on the opinion page, but the article could have been written in a somewhat professional manner. The thought behind the article was nice. It’s never going to happen, but it is a pleasant thought.
“Lonely?”
First off, this article is supposed to be about acceptance and prejudice. Yet the second sentence of the article is “…prejudice against obese kids, slow kids, and ugly kids.” Does anyone see the irony? And I highly doubt that “the girl who sits all alone at the back of class…wishes that she could be that skinny.” The basis of the article was a good one, but the ideas weren’t portrayed in the most advantageous way.
“Alcohol Stories…”
The beginning of the article was nice. It stated a valid point. After the statement, “I know that his article is not going to change the way you feel about alcohol usage,” the article started to lose its initial validity. An opinion article has many functions, and one of those functions is to persuade or inspire your audience. That phrase didn’t exactly help.
“Everyone You Don’t Know Are Still People”
Well, let’s take a trip to Mr. Johnson’s English class. The subject (everyone) is singular, so the verb has to agree. “Are” is not singular, so the verb needs to be “is.” Thank you Mr. Johnson! Moving on, the whole “your friend Jake” example had me thoroughly perplexed. Overall, the article was well done, and the idea was nice. I guess I just don’t do well with the whole lovey-dovey scene.
“The play heads…”
Nice little article about the play! I can already tell it is going to be good. How could it not with such a talented student director?
“King Kong impresses…”
Good article. I don’t think I’ll be playing the game any time soon, but interesting nonetheless. Note: Battlefront is sooo much better.
"Music Review"
It is nice to have a section for music reviews, but it will soon prove to be pointless if hard rock/metal is the only genre reviewed.
“King Kong”
Pretty good review, but it doesn't make me want to go see the movie.
“East…”
I love books. I love book reviews. This one was written well except toward the end when the author suggests renting the movie instead!
“Two generations, two legends, one day”
This article was interesting and very informative. I really enjoyed it.