| Revisions: |
| The most important part of my argument that I wanted to revise was the structure of the argument itself. The develpement of my argument needed to be more detailed and full. A link was highlighted from my "Defending Womens Rights" page that described some of the inequities I am addressing in my argument. Also new pages were made to address the issues brought up by my partner. The major flaw with my partners arguement is that womens sports are improving but slowly, this is not what i wanted to address. I agree with this fact that things are changing but it does not mean that equality is improving everywhere, only in certain areas. I am not talking about hiring women coaches in the N.B.A or N.F.L., I am talking about women young and old across the country who simply do not have access to the same types of opportunities as men do in sports. Also some of my already existing links were highlighted to make them more visible.Certain pages and links were easy to overlook because theier color blended in with the rest of the text. Along with changing the color of the links i changed the titles and headings to get the readers attention. |