| The Seven Deadly Sins |
| by Zuke |
| I was so excited when Zuke sent this short PWP? to me for review that I couldn't wait to begin. This particular piece, if I remember correctly, was the fruits of a bardic challenge at a certain list. But don't hold me to it <g>. I was quite befuddled when I opened the document and began to read. For I was left to ask myself, "Self? What the hell am I going to do with this one?" You see, I believe I have probably, for the first time--I might add, read a sex scene that was as tastefully and eloquently done as only Zuke can write. For the lack of euphemisms and smut content, this will be the first ever rating of "the beautiful, loving experience." Are you ready? Sex scenes: This is a very short, tried and true PWP? The entire story is a sex scene, only broken down into the Seven Deadly Sins. Moist/Moisture: only 1. I was almost disappointed......well, almost... Climaxes: This was hard to tell. Several are alluded to, but no major earth shattering, wave crashing, sloppy, sticky, "let's finger paint on the sheets" kind of explosiveness. Unless you put, "She reached down to me and held me tight. She brought me up beside her with a sure grip. And we stood together among the eagles" into that category. But as I said, this was tastfully written. Kink factor?: None. Not needed in this one. I'm sorry to let you down. No whips, chains, hand cuffs, nipple clamps, strap-ons dubbed "The Conqueror", or power tools make their way into the lack of plot. Zuke shows us how to commit the Seven Deadly Sins all within the span of a few hours AND still find your way to Heaven, in bed. As for Zuke's lack of euphemisms and strange anatomical pet names such as: snatch, pleasure hole, sopping apex, swollen buds and nubs, smoldering hole (that is an interesting mental visual at best), or sultry depths; She makes due with the run of the mill, everyday breasts, nipples, soft curls, moistened folds, and sex is the word of choice here come to fill in for the "snatch". She cuts the sleaze factor down to nil by leaving so much more to the imagination than by showing us every dirty little detail. *Lust - the inordinate craving for the pleasures of the body* It is time for a wake-up call! Tingles are racing wildly through our narrator's sex. Her lover's breast becomes exposed, and look at that! They have morphed into throbs! So quickly they grow up. ---""You smell sleepy," I said, and continued to nuzzle." --What olfactory senses this one has! Can she go outside and smell a storm a brewin'? Then we have our first moan of the story. *Envy - the desire for other's traits, status, abilities, or situation* Here is where we have the first inkling that there was atleast one climax: ---""That was a nice way to wake up," she said, after a few minutes of lying boneless beside me." -- Or it would be terrible if all of the previous play was just a prelude to a nice cup of coffee in bed. But then the next line puts you back into place. I won't give it away <g>. ---"Her smile was innocence and experience, virgin and whore." -- No explination needed here, I just thought it was a great line. Now in so many words, our narrator is delivered to her plateau and is now with her love and the eagles--or was brought to a climax. *Sloth - the avoidance of spiritual or physical work* Now we get to the begging... --- "Let's call in sick," I begged for the third time. "No," she said, but she didn't move. "Please?" But the tables are soon to be turned and an agreement is reached when an errant, pesky hand does the downstroke. *Wrath - strong vengeful anger or indignation* Zuke starts to get a little more descriptive and more in depth with this particular sin. Tongue teasing, quivering muscles, panting, bucking hips, and yes, this is where "moist" makes its grand appearance during a finger dipping exercise. Wrath is quickly turned to bliss. Should I leave you to your imagination? Well you DO have to read the story. I can't give it all away, now can I? *Gluttony - an inordinate desire to consume more than that which one requires* Breakfast in bed. Need I say more? *Pride - excessive belief in one's own abilities* Taking place a short while later, the joyful couple wake after an exhaustive encounter. There are dares placed, and no, no one was double dog dared. And there are challenges to be accepted. *Greed - a rapacious desire for more than one needs or deserves* The final installment of the Seven Deadly Sins. Zuke brings this great piece to an end with a short, but sweet conversation between the couple in question. So you too can achieve zen after commiting the Seven Deadly Sins... in bed! Geez, that sounded too much like a damn fortune cookie. All in all, this was a great read. Zuke has once again come through and conquered a challenge. She had dragged me through the ringer with this review. I hope this Moist Review does the story justice. Poor Xenafan was on the recieving end of an IM while I was writing this, yes, I damned Zuke to hell, threatened bodily harm, and prayed to the gods that she be struck down by their throbbing members. But I think I'm over that now. Now only if she'll let me get my hands on a few of her other stories..... And now kiddies, it is time for the official poll from the Amazon Sweat Hut. Zuke's "The Seven Deadly Sins" slips into the ratings at a whopping |
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