Part II: Character Information
Character Position:
Sailorproserpina
Character Name: Mae Cerise Mignon
Name Meaning:
-Mae is French and its meaning is May. In Roman
mythology Maia: (source of the month May) was goddess of spring
growth.
-Cerise is French and it means "cherry"
-Mignon is French and it
means "darling"
Dissy: Actually it
means cute, but I suppose it could mean darling also, I’m only a second year
French student ^^;;
Vessy: eh *shrugs* Garage, Car Hole
Same differance X3
Birthdate and Age / Zodiacal Sign: Mae
was born on May 26th, which was during the time of the festival for Diana with
the Secular Games to Proserpina beginning as well. Being born on that day makes
her a fun- loving and talkative Gemini and she is 20 years old.
Physical Details: Mae has long dark curly brown hair that ends an inch
above her chest and covers one of her eyes. She has bright green eyes that are
the color of fresh spring grass and seem to sparkle whenever she’s happy.
Because she is from France,
Dissy: Oh no…a
foreigner? not again…
Vessy: *cries* No! That recurring dream is back!
she has a pale and creamy complexion
that resembles fresh milk with nary a flaw, except for on her stomach. On her
stomach, wrapping around her waist, she has a long tattoo of a vine branch, with
thorns and leaves that isn’t visible when she is in Senshi mode. She carries
herself with an air of grace about her and her warm smile on angel-rose lips is
something to be noticed. Mae has a natural grace about her, standing at 5’7" in
height, and can often be found wearing hip-hugging pants and a pale yellow
midriff-baring top with no sleeves and a turtle neck and black boots. She is
into fashion, and believes in dressing nice and looks beautiful when she cleans
up for special occasions. When it’s colder, she’ll wear longer- sleeved shirt,
long pants, mostly black velvet, and a warm fur-lined leather coat with
fur-lined boots.
Bloodtype: Mae has an O-type blood and it reflects on her when it comes
to her sometimes jealous streaks and her ability to excel at track and field,
along with swimming.
Gemstone: Aquamarine, which represents the need for communication,
which is perfect for the sign of the twins.
Dissy: Quick
question, how is that perfect? please explain.
Vessy: Gemini are the most natural communicators within the zodiac
circle. . .
Likes:
Clothes: because they allow
her to express herself no matter what mood she’s in and since she wants to be a
model, she loves to wear them well. Also, they feel good to her and she loves
them.
Mythology (Roman and Greek): Mae loves to read Greek and Roman
mythology because she can relate to some of the gods and goddesses in the
stories and since they hold such romance for her, she thinks they’re
great.
Dissy: it is
understandable that because she will be Proserpina’s avatar, she would be
interested in mythology, but is seems like this is a very common interest, and
becoming rather cliché for that matter. I’m going to ask that we erase
this.
Art: she knows art and she knows what
she likes. People who are able to make beautiful works of art are respectable by
her standards. She loves to discuss art and what the artist felt when they made
it.
Vessy: What
types of art? There are many types of art and each can equally be consider crap
by another group. ie: Impressionist vs. Realists. Found art vs. Greco
sculpture... crayon scribbles by a five year old vs, Modern art (well not really
a huge differance there. . .but. . . Just wondering...
Animals: Mae loves animals, and she
especially loves her dog, Percy. Percy is short for Persephone and she is a
golden retriever. Mae will spend lots of time with her dog, who is also her
guardian, talking or playing. She loves all sorts of animals, but dogs and
wolves will always be her favorites.
Dislikes:
Poachers: even though there are none in Paris that she
knew of, or in Rome where she is now living and currently going to school, she
hates them because they harm animals and she loves animals.
Vessy: Couldn't you just more specifically state "hunters" in general
because a poacher is anyone who takes or kills animals or produce off of private
property (ie: Pheasant poaching on someone elses hunting reserve. Or harvesting
Apples from someones orchard)
Hunting: you will never get Mae to hunt, not ever. She doesn’t like
deer hunting or hunting of any kind and whenever someone brags about it, she
leaves the room. If she sees a deer that has been killed hanging upside down,
she runs away and would most likely throw up.
Vessy: Or
combine these two categories into one "Hunting and hunters" with maybe a
seperate category of "Stealing"
Laziness: Mae has a thing against lazy
people. She thinks that they are people that don’t deserve to get the benefits
that the hard-working people also get and won’t tolerate it.
Fish: She hates
the taste, hates the smell, and hates all of the little bones that come with it.
She won’t go fishing and you wouldn’t be caught cleaning fish or watching fish
cleaning.
Vessy: So
is she going vegetarian? She doesn't like fish or killing animals... so is she
just one of those "i don't like the killing but I'll still eat meat"
people...
Hobbies:
Swimming: Mae loves to swim. She will often go out on her
own at night, if the night is warm and swim in a nearby lake. Percy often tails
her and keeps an eye on her so that she doesn’t get hurt. Mae loves the feeling
of water caressing her skin and it makes her perfectly relaxed.
Vessy: Why
swimming at night? Couldn't she swim in the daytime too? and wouldn't swimming
at night be more than a little dangerous?
Gardening: she loves to plant things. Ever since she was young, she has
had her own flower bed. She has the touch that the goddess Proserpine had, for
when the goddess walked, flowers would spring up behind her and it seems that no
matter what Mae plants, it grows.
Singing: singing is one of Mae’s favorite
pastimes. She is always either singing or humming something, whether it is when
she’s gardening, or working on her homework she’ll sing springtime songs, ones
with lyrics that she writes herself, because she loves to write
songs.
Dancing: Mae is an accomplished ballet dancer and went to the best
ballet classes that her father and mother could afford for her. She’s been the
leading role in several ballets, including "Swan Lake" and "The Sleeping Beauty"
in her time. That’s where she gets her grace.
Running: when the sun is
thinking about coming up, Mae is already running outside, enjoying the fresh
cool air and she only runs in the springtime. Running allows her to organize her
thoughts and stay in shape.
Dissy: for most of
these I don’t see the relevance. Do they have any foundation in anything you
read about Proserpina/Persephone? If so, state this. After all, the gods and
goddesses chose people who are like them, not people who happen to like animals
but besides that are completely different.
Personality: Mae is someone that is sophisticated, but with an air of
playfulness about her. Like her sign of Gemini, she has two very different sides
to her. Her stronger side is that of a young woman with an air of maturity about
her. The side that she doesn’t show very often is the scared and unsure little
girl that needs protection from others that she loves.
Her greatest attribute
is her ability to mask her feelings. Mae is able to cover her true emotions well
and has only never cried in front of her guardian Percy. She doesn’t ever show
her true colors to her parents, because they expect her to be made of stone and
never show emotion. Mae has learned to not rely on anyone but herself and not
letting her defenses down unless she truly feels as though she can trust someone
with all her heart.
Vessy: Um... why would anyone expect someone to have or show no emotions?
I mean not only is that extremely unreasonable on the parents account (or her
beleif of what her parents want) but its extremely unhealthy on her part. and it
doesn't mesh with the Geminiac sign as they are one of the most expressive signs
emotionally. And it doesn't mesh with her wanting to be protected and nurtured
you mentioned above. That type of person would be more over the top with their
emotions or do things that would cause people to be more protective of her (ie:
fake being sick, cry etc.) although you said she doesn't show that side very
often so... and stony doesn't really complement "playful and
sophistocated"
However,
buried deep within her is an unsure and emotional little girl. She’s a complete
contrast to her stony exterior. On the inside, Mae is as warm and welcoming as a
warm spring day or breeze. The only one that has seen her smile in a loving or
affectionate way is Percy. Something that Mae has very little of is friends, but
she doesn’t mind that. (V That doesn't mesh with Gemini or
the "sophisticated" side either)
Once a person finds their way past
her stony façade, inside, they’ll never find a warmer person. Because Mae loves
to sing and you can feel the warmth she has to radiate when you hear her. She
can literally brighten your day just by singing and that’s a special gift she
developed herself. Percy has heard her sing and can safely say it’s wonderful
and heart- warming to hear Mae.
But Mae is also snotty at times and looks
down on people that she doesn’t think are good enough to acknowledge her
presence. You’d have to be able to endure lots of slinging insults and comments
before you win your way into her heart and realize it was only because she hates
being hurt. If you get on her bad side, you will be snubbed and made fun of and
publicly humiliated if she’s really mad at you, except if you’re one of her
friends.
Dissy: Okay, there seems to be a lot of levels to this
girl, but no real depth. Here’s an example of what we’re looking for in an
application, especially once you get down to the personality. Remember, this is
quick and dirty, not at all the length we look for, but hopefully the
quality;
So and so is very classy and more often than not, acts
as if she rules the world. She’s pretty snotty most of the time and unless
you’re considered a friend, don’t expect her to really even acknowledge you. In
mythology, Proserpina was kidnapped by Pluto and taken to the underworld to be
his queen. The queen part of that is why so and so is always so stuck on her
high horse. She also has a problem with mood swings, one minute she’s being warm
and friendly, or at least her version of that, and the next she’s flaming mad,
ready to snap off the head of anyone who would cross her. In mythology
Proserpina returned to the earth’s surface in spring, bringing with her all the
glory of springtime, but when fall hit she returned to the underworld, leaving
the earth barren and dry. Because of the changing of the seasons, there is such
a thing as seasonal depression, and the extremes between the different moods is
just like So and so’s mood swings….etc./paraindent>
That is just a quick
example of what we look for throughout the entire application, relevance, it
doesn’t necessarily have to be relevance to your mythological being, but it
should be completely relevant to the archetype you’re using, which should have
at least a visible relationship to your mythological being.
Vessy:
I'm missing the relevancy and the relation to Gemini in this
character. Overall its a good start but the lack of showing emotions is really
not something I would view/recomend for a character of the spring. Besides
if she doesn't show/express her emotions how does she express herself? Some
people express themselves through dance or work out their negative energy
through meditation or physical work out. Or does she draw or write or paint? Or
in much more negative harmful ways such as cutting or anorexia? What makes her
think she needs to be emotionless?
History: Eugene met Regina through a
mutual friend in Paris, France and they have been together ever since. They both
went to school, and got married, but soon, Regina became nothing more than a
trophy wife. Eugene became a major business man and has been working in his
company of N.I.T.E., or Needed International Trades of Economics. Regina began
to become more social and took to the wine that she had grown up with all her
life. They didn’t ever want to have children, but one day, something
happened.
Vessy: NO
FOREIGNERS!!! *Flying attack with a foam baseball bat*
NO!
Mae Cerise Mignon was born a few months later and immediately was
treated like a burden. She grew up with many a nurse or nanny at her side to
raise her when her parents couldn’t. Mae thought of her nannies and nurses as
her friends. However, when she became old enough to go to school, her mother
sent them all away and she stayed in her room and didn’t come out for two
days.
Vessy: When
you say old enough to go to school do you mean like ecs? or lower elementary? or
when she got old enough that she could amuse herself without need to worry about
her getting in trouble. Or *reads on* when she was sent off to boarding
schools?
Mae was then sent to boarding and finishing schools in Paris and stayed
there all year, never seeing her parents, but she didn’t mind it. She had made
some friends, young Adele Florence and Camilla Fitzgerald. Mae went to boarding
and finishing school until she was thirteen and that’s when her parents
announced that they were moving to Rome. Mae had to say good-bye to the friends
that she had known all her life and it was a heart-breaking time for
her.
That was the time that Mae decided not to show her feelings to anyone
unless she thought that they truly deserved to be her friends and wouldn’t leave
her again. At the time she hit puberty she was so lost and had to go to the
school nurse at Romulous Public Jr. High School and was so embarrassed she ran
right out of the school and didn’t go back for three days. Mae has always been
determined not to let anyone see her cry, and no one ever did, not even when she
ran out of the school the day she went and saw the nurse.
Vessy: I'm
sorry but the whole hitting puberty thing gave me deranged flash backs to
"Carrie" screwed up horror movie >.<
Mae was afraid of turning into a woman
because she thought that she would turn out like her mother. She loved her
mother with all of her heart and the few times that her mother had held her
close or wanted her to come home always reminded her that her mother was a good
person deep down. She knew that her mother could be warm, but kept it hidden and
that’s what made her strong, so Mae decided to be that way too.
When she was
15, she found a golden retriever in the streets with no collar but with a
pomegranate hanging from around its neck. She knew that was the symbol of
Proserpine and since she loved the tales of that goddess so, she took the dog
in. She needed a friend and the two of them became fast friends, with Mae
constantly playing with Percy. It wasn’t until she took the pomegranate that was
hanging around the dog’s neck and joked about eating one of the seeds and
actually tasted one that the dog revealed she could speak.
Mae didn’t know
what to think at first, but the dog explained her name was Persephone and that
she was looking for someone. Mae said that she didn’t know who she meant, but
Persephone or Percy as Mae called her, decided that she would stay with Mae
until she found her. The two became the best of friends and Percy was upset that
she still wasn’t able to find the person she was looking for.
When Mae
graduated from high school, she was immediately enrolled in Università degli
Studi di Roma by her parents. She took Percy with her because she refused to be
alone at college without her only friend. She was a nervous freshman at college
but soon met up with her old friends, Adele Florence and Camilla Fitzgerald at
the same University! They were instantly reunited and caught up on things and
the two girls made Mae try out in the choir and she became famous around the
school for her warm and comforting voice.
She confessed to them everything
that had happened over her life, but after they caught up on things, they were
girls in grade-school again and Mae brightened her outlook and smiled and
laughed for the first time in ages with genuine affection and caring. Now, Mae
is a sophomore in college and is just diving into her major of music and
English.
Dissy: Sorry, but
again, this lacks depth. Also there’s not a lot of coherency, she hates her mom,
but she loves her, and stuff like that. Also, it seems as if you really want her
to have this sad dramatic life, sort of like a soap opera. Honestly, rich
families do not all have this problem, in fact, a lot of the kids act just like
their parents, if not worse. They’re usually stuck on themselves because of all
the upper class schools they’ve attended, and are too busy bragging about
themselves to worry about their parents not wanting them, they simply think
that’s the way everything is. And one last little pet peeve, I’m pretty sure
this was on the application somewhere, but we are not accepting any foreigners,
so you’d have to change that.
Vessy: Okay
overall not truly horrible as far as family histories go. But I would really
strongly suggest that you base her history on the myth. The myth of this
character (persephone) is great cus it gives us sort of an insight into the
family life. I would say build strongly upon the part were she's close to her
mother. Because from what I can remember Persephone and her mum (whats her
name... in charge or crops and stuff *shrugs*) we're quite close. Now
conceivably you could twist the story so that she could say have had her father
say... commit adultery resulting in a divorce. Then a long custody battle in
which They decided that she would spend half the year with her father and half
with her mom... something along those lines >.< This is perhaps one
character where a Sob story would be plausible... and it would maybe allow for
the lack of emotions or SED that Dissy mentioned.
NPCs:
Eugene Mignon (Father): Eugene
is an old man at the age of 50 and is short, fat, and balding. He’s got
silvery-gray hair and green eyes that were once young and vibrant, now are dull
with age. He stands at about 5’4" in height and has a belly that anyone would
notice. Eugene thinks of Mae as a mistake, but has decided to leave his entire
fortune to the man that she marries. He doesn’t ever spend time with her and
will space himself as far from her and her "deadbeat friends" as possible.
Eugene is bitter from being the head of a multi-billion dollar corporation for
so long and is bitter towards everyone, even his wife.
Regina Mignon (Mother): Regina is Mae’s mother and she was the one that
gave her daughter her natural beauty and grace with her brown hair and long legs
and defined cheekbones. Regina fell in love with Eugene because he promised her
things that he never kept and has ever since dove into the world of galas and
elegant affairs but still found the time to treat her daughter to a shopping
spree or an affectionate hug whenever Eugene wasn’t around. Regina stands at
5’7" in height and has defined cheekbones, but has lost some of her youthful
vigor and beauty over the years because of being a mother and having to deal
with Eugene. She at first thought of Mae as an accident but has since embraced
her as her daughter.
Adele Florence (Friend): Adele is Mae’s best friend and her complete
opposite. Where Mae is self-reserved, Adele is crazy. Where Mae is practical,
Adele is unpredictable and always ready for a challenge. Adele is someone that
brings out the best in Mae, and this red-headed, brown- eyed 20-year-old college
student is someone that is friendly towards her best friends, but get on her bad
side or challenge her to a verbal duel and you’ll get more insults slung at you
than ever before. She stands at 5’9" in height and has a willowy figure, almost
fragile, but she’s strong and has a great right hook that can break any
jaw.
Camilla Fitzgerald (Friend): Cam, as she’s called by Adele and Mae, is
the intelligent one in the group. When I say intelligent, I mean that she
doesn’t let either one of them do things that will get them into trouble and is
very smart and has the highest GPA among them. This black- haired and amber-eyed
beauty is someone that you would notice if you saw the curvy 5’6" frame. She has
a soft voice and doesn’t speak that often, but when she does, she’s giggly and
always has a smile on her face and knows instantly when there’s something wrong
with Mae. She is very close to Mae and knows what it’s like to have parents that
don’t care about her because she had parents that abandoned her and she was
adopted.
Vessy: err... From the history these characters we're mentioned as being
friends from France and now she lives in Italy so how much of a relevance are
they going to have on the story if they're that far away?
Victor Cunningham (Bodyguard/Chauffer): He is Mae’s chauffer. He has
served the family for a long time, but when Victor became attracted to Mae, as
in personality, not in looks, he was allowed to be her chauffer. Victor is a
29-year-old former Navy Seal with a black belt in judo and also has an extensive
knowledge of being a chauffer because he served the family for years. He cares
very much for Mae and would do anything to protect her.
Vessy: Very... odd... o.O *cough cough -Childs toy(kodoma no omcha)-
cough cough*
Part III: Senshi Information
Special Skills: Mae has the ability to
dance more gracefully and move with more agility than anyone else she knows.
Adele once compared her to the fleet-footed Artemis and Hermes, but Mae just
laughed.
Dissy: relevance?
Proserpina wasn’t a dancer of any sort I don’t think, let alone a good
one.
Henshin Item: Mae’s henshin item is a
pale yellow jewel with her symbol in the center. She wears it as a belt buckle
and it’s always on her pants and everyone thinks that it’s just something she
got because she’s rich.
Transformation: "Proserpina Deus Power Make-Up!"
-Mae calls out her
transformation phrase and the jewel on her belt buckle releases raindrops for
the spring rain and pomegranates for Proserpina and they combine by swirling
around her in a cyclone-like affect and encase her within. A bright yellow light
flashes and she emerges, clad in her fuku, her henshin item moved from her waist
to her chest and her vine tattoo around her stomach is gone. She extends her
right hand and an orb appears in her hand. This is her weapon, the Orb of
Forbidden Fruit and she holds it to her chest and performs a turn so that her
back is facing you and the orb is floating above her palm, her left arm at her
side, ending her transformation.
Color: Pale Yellow
Symbol: ((see attached picture)) and means "the
season of spring"
Dissy: you should
describe it all the same, even if you think it’ll be hard.
Vessy: *hunts around* I can't find the "attached image"
*sighs*
Fuku/Costume: Proserpina’s fuku from
head to toe, starts with her symbol in pale yellow in the center of her
forehead. Moving down, she has red earrings in the shape of pomegranate seeds,
then her pale-yellow choker with her orb as the pendent hanging from it around
her neck. Proserpina’s collar is pale yellow and her henshin brooch is on her
right shoulder, connecting her armor around her bodice. The jewel is pale yellow
with silver casing, her bodice is white, bares the midriff, and has long sleeves
that cling to her skin with bell-sleeves at the ends. Her breast and shoulder
plates are silver, and her wrist bands are black leather underneath her sleeve.
Proserpina’s skirt is yellow with black strips of leather as the skirt straps.
Dissy: And her
shoes…..?
Powers/Attacks: "Forbidden Orb
Bane!"
-The attack begins when Proserpina holds her orb out in front of her
in between her hands and her hair floats behind her as her eyes are closed. The
orb glows with yellow light and her voice is soft and sorrowful as the orb
begins to spin and flies towards the enemy, hitting them hard.
-This attack
can be blocked if the enemy is strong enough or if they can catch the orb before
it hits them. Also, this attack can not be used against certain types of
monsters, like water or fire monsters. Included is the fact that if Proserpina
is weak already, the attack isn’t very powerful.
Dissy: what does the
attack do? just knock them off their feet? Also, what does the attack do to her?
for every action there is an equal and opposite reaction.
Weapons: Orb of Forbidden Fruit: This is
a clear orb with a pomegranate inside it. It’s smaller than the size of a
crystal ball that fortune-tellers use and can fit in the palm of Proserpina’s
hand. The pomegranate inside has a section exposing the seeds and fleshy part
within, as if it has been eaten. When it isn’t being used, it is a small
necklace around her neck, the orb as the pendent.
Guardian:
Name: Persephone (Percy)
Age: 1 year (In human
years)
Species and Physical Appearance: Percy is a golden retriever with
amber eyes and a golden and silky coat. Since Mae has her groomed and taken to
the vet regularly, Percy is in good health and has trimmed toenails and a toned
body from running and swimming with Mae.
Gender: Percy is female.
Personality: Like a golden retriever, Percy is very playful and hasn’t
really matured into a true dog yet. She loves to play, run, and swim with Mae
and is always ready to hear a song or a story from her. Also, she is caring and
sensitive and knows when something is bothering Mae. But, she can at times be
stern when Mae doesn’t listen to her or doesn’t heed her advice. But, most of
all, she’s fun-loving and easy-going, except when it comes to people that hurt
Mae, then she’ll become aggressive, unless they’re friends. But, she can be
withdrawn herself at times and often needs Mae to bring her out of her
slump.
History: When Proserpine had been in her human form, she had decided
that she would become a guardian and placed her soul in the body of a golden
retriever, and began to search for the one that inherited her powers. She wore a
collar with a pomegranate around her neck so that whoever had her powers would
be the only one that could eat the seeds and help her recover her ability to
talk. When she was in France, lost and away from Rome, she ran into Mae, who
took her in and eventually ate one of the seeds. The rest, as they say, is
history.
Relationship with Mae: The two have a mutual friendship and they are
the best of friends. Even though Percy can seem so serious and stuffy at times
when she has to be, Mae knows that she only does it because she cares about her.
The two are partners in what they do, and they like it. All in all, they are
friends and they respect each other, no matter what.
Power: Percy can
communicate telepathically with Mae.
Part IV: Miscellaneous Information
-Weapon: I chose the name "Orb of
Forbidden Fruit" because the pomegranates that Proserpine ate were forbidden
because they would bind her to the Underworld forever. Also, it holds relevance
to her Senshi name, with the clear orb and the pomegranate in the middle. It
also holds relevance to her mundane self, because she is in a way "forbidden"
because she isn’t that warm to others o.o;;
-Personality: I made her more
like the cold Queen of the Underworld and bride to Pluto because that is how she
spends most of her life, in the darkness below, and so I placed some darkness in
Mae. But also, sometimes, just like the 1/3 of the year Proserpine spent with
her mother, I made her bright and happy.
Dissy: See all of
this should’ve been put up in those sections. unless people read the whole
profile, which they usually don’t, they’re going to wonder why?
Vessy: I
thought it was 1/2 of the year...
-Why Me? Well, I am in many RP’s and
have much experience. I also chose this char because I have personally read the
versions of the story of Persephone and Hades/Proserpine and Pluto and love that
story very much.
Part V: The Writing Sample
Mae Mignon walked through the halls of
her house, her boots clicking nicely on the tiles that formed her immaculate
hallway. Green eyes looked out from under a russet-hued curtain that was over
her right eye, her curly brown hair bouncing on her shoulders as her haughty
attitude reflected in her stride. Reaching the end of the hallway, she placed
her hand on the cold knob of the door and twisted it, walking into her
bedroom.
"Percy, where are you?" she called, her rich voice echoing through
her room as she closed the heavy oak door behind her.
A golden retriever came
out from underneath her oak canopy bed and shook herself off. Looking up at the
young woman with bright amber eyes, the dog bounded over to her and knocked her
down in her tackle. Mae laughed as she felt her face being licked over and
over.
"All right, Percy, that’s enough," Mae said and pushed the playful dog
off of her. "How are you doing?"
"I’m fine, Mae, and how was school?"
Mae
groaned and threw her books against the far wall and flopped down onto her bed,
the soft comforter a welcome change from being in the cold building that was her
home only minutes before. The golden-haired dog jumped onto her bed and lay down
next to her. Mae smiled softly and stroked her friend absently. Percy rolled
onto her stomach and Mae scratched her there, smiling softly. The 20-year-old
seemed weary from her day and sighed heavily, rolling onto her side, tucking her
legs beneath her and closed her eyes.
"Get some rest, Mae, you need it,"
Percy said.
She smiled and yawned slightly as her dog snuggled against her
and kept her warm without a blanket.
Dissy: Alright, you have a good foundation for a
character here, but I think that you need to do some more research, point out
relevant things and cut out irrelevant things to both her archetype and her
mythic figure, and also put some more depth into her personality and history.
Lastly, cut out the drama, I guaruntee, someone more run of the mill is easier
and a lot more fun to play. If you’d like some help fixing up your application,
a good person to talk to is Sailor Freak/Furiku. you can find her over at {
HYPERLINK "http://www.otakusekai.com/board/" }RPG
Crossroads. Hope to here from you again.
Dissy’s Verdict = Reject,
revise
Vessy: Overall not bad... I think that the character of spring could have
alot more of the relevancy from her myths worked into the character. Yeah other
than that she's entering Mary sue territory with a bit of an avengance... she
could use a good dose of normalcy. NO FOREIGNERS!!!!
Vessy's Verdict = Reject
Revise
Final Verdict = Reject,
Revise