Soldier Part I: Player Information
 
Your Name: Lauren
Email Address: [email protected]
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me access it.
 
Part II: Character Information
 
Character Position: Sailor Proserpina
Character Name: Neola Vitalis
Name Meaning: Neola: Origin= Greek Meaning= New
 
 The name of Neola creates an easy-going, good-natured personality, meeting and mixing easily. You appreciate the company of others, to the point that you do not like to be by yourself for very long. You are gifted with natural expression, both verbal and musical, but you would find it tedious to study music and practice theory. Anything that involves concentration or just plain hard work, you prefer to avoid as best you can. Although you have many creative, original ideas, procrastination is your worst enemy because you can seldom make decisions and carry them out. In your desire to gain the favour of others and to keep peace, because you abhor friction, you change your opinion to agree with those at hand. It is easy for you to express love and affection, but you would have to watch that your emotional nature does not get the better of you and lead you to indiscretions which you would later regret. A desire for sweet, rich foods could create skin problems, overweight, or you could suffer weakness across the back, or possibly a liver ailment.
 
Vitalis: Origin=Greek Meaning=Life
 
Your name of Vitalis gives you the ability to be creative along practical lines of endeavour. Your ideas can be very original and inventive. You enjoy being with people in a social environment. Your personal appearance is important to you, for you desire to make a good impression on others. Your pleasant manner attracts people to you with their problems and you are capable of offering practical advice, though you would probably not follow such advice yourself. This name causes you to be somewhat too concerned with the personalities, problems, and activities of other people. You seem positive and decisive and can be outspoken in the expression of your opinions, but you lack the self-confidence needed to follow through with your ideas and plans. Procrastination is your downfall. You frequently choose the path of least resistance to avoid your responsibilities. It is not easy for you to overcome obstacles or face issues. This name does you an injustice in that it restricts your success in business and personal pursuits through a lack of ambition. There is a weakness in the fluid functions and in the region of the head resulting in sinus problems, headaches, eye, ear, or throat conditions and related ailments. Hair loss could also be a problem.
 
(I chose this name because Spring is the season of New Life.  I dunno, I thought it was a good idea. Hehehe)
 
Birthdate and Age / Zodiacal Sign: Neola is an Aries and was born on March 21st, which fits well with her Sailor identity, and she is 17 years old.
 

Physical Details:
 
Hair: Neola has hair like the color of chocolate ice cream.  It is a very light brown. (Pardon my description of the color! J) She has hair that is straight and goes down to her lower back.  The top is pulled back by a brown clip to keep it out of her face.  If she is at school, it is pulled back by a blue clip.
 
Vessy: thats a pretty weird color for hair. what color of choco ice cream? dark? light? swirly?
 
Height:5'6"
 
Eyes: They are a midnight blue with a tiny almost unrecognizable ring of light blue around her pupil.  Her eyes are oval shaped with long brown lashes.  Her eyebrows are thin with only a small arch.
 
Face: Neola has a small slope nose that only turns up a tiny bit at the end.  She has lips that form a thin heart, bigger on the bottom than the top.
 
Skin: She has lightly bronzed skin with some freckles across her shoulders and upper arms.  She does not have a problem with acne but she does have a tattoo of a butterfly on her lower back. She has a few scars here and there from tripping or banging into something.   Her skin is semi dry so she uses moisturizer every day.
 
Voice:  She has a calm and collected mezzo soprano voice.  She is a good singer but she doesn't take lessons or anything.
 
Strength:  She does have some strength from being in gymnastics so long, but she couldn't last very long in anything totally physical.
 
Hand: Left J
 
Stature:  Neola was always taught to keep her face forward and her back straight so she looks poised all the time.  She will look into someone's eyes when she is talking to them, but her look is not penetrating. 
 
Build:  She has wider hips that shoulders, but is slender and a little curvy.  In gymnastics, you slow your growth some so it will stay like that for a while.  She weighs around 107 pounds.
 
Dissy: EEPS! Let's check that weight. 107 is REALLY underweight for someone who is 5'6" to give you an idea, a person who is 5'2" is, on average, 125 lbs. Also since she's athletic, she would weight more than average because muscles weighs more than fat.
Vessy: *whips out handy dandy height weight chart* http://healthfullife.umdnj.edu/editor/METROLIFE_table.htm Yeahs she's pretty sickly thin.
 
Clothes:  Neola generally wears tight clothes, usually in pastelly (Another of my weird words!  So sorry!) colors with a pair of sandals.  If she has gymnastics, you will see her in loose sweatpants or shorts and a pastel sports tank top with white sneakers.  When it is cooler, she will wear a zipper up sweatshirt or sweater over a tank top or halter.  Her style is very trendy.  She loves the way movie stars dress so she tries to dress like the people she sees in fashion magazines.
 
Gemstone: Amethyst, it is just like her favorite color, lavender.
 

Likes: Baby Animals: They are so cute and even when you are sad or mad, you can't help smiling at them!
 
Dissy: This one seems to be a growing trend.....
 
Flowers: They are very pretty and make you feel good!  Plus they always look so happy!
 
Books: They are wonderful for their stories that can take you places where you may never go.
 
Rain: It's cold and fun to walk through.
 
Gnocchis: They are so good and easy to make!
 
Dissy: Explain what Gnocchis, I don't know what it is.
Vessy: Its a type of pasta http://www.beyond.fr/food/d_mourelec02.html
 

Dislikes:  Physics:  It's only cold hard facts, there is no imagination behind it.
Vessy: Personally I disagree with this its the ability to understand why things move like they do. Very useful in pool. There are ways to bend the facts at times...
 
Spiders: They are creepy and crawl around and eat bugs.  She will not kill them though, but she will just scream a lot.
 
Dissy: Spiders are very cliché for rpg characters for some reason, and it seems out of sync with the fact that her sphere is springtime.
 
Too much perfume:  Ok most perfumes are very strong already, you don't need to double dose on it.
 
 
Hobbies: Gymnastics: It is fun and she is good at it, so where can you go wrong?
 
Singing: It's wonderful to listen to and even better to hear yourself.
 
Writing: Neola can express herself and no one even has to hear it.  She especially loves to write short mysteries.
 
Playing Twister:  No one will ever play with her though, because they know she is so good.
 
Dissy: Well over all, with the dislikes/likes/hobbies, you told us her reasons for liking it, but the reasons we want is why does she actually like it. So, how is playing twister related to her sphere or zodiac or her up bringing. For instance, I love to sing because it makes me feel good and I love music. The real reason is because my family is very musical and I've grown up with it so it's a sort of comfort blanket for me. We need to see the REAL reasons, not her personal reasons.
 
Personality: To strangers, Neola is usually very quiet and won't be the first to say something.  Usually it takes a pretty long time to know her because she is quiet and does not easily open up to people.  Once you have her trust, it is not that hard to keep it.  As long as you don't do something horrible, she will trust you, or at least to a certain point.  When she first meets someone, if she feels she can trust them right away, than she will.  If she feels the opposite, then she won't, it's as simple as that.  In groups she will participate in conversations, but she's not one to want to start arguments.  She still will be quiet and her voice soft, but she'll open up more if she feels comfortable.  She is different around friends than other people.  With friends, she will almost be completely talkative with, but she will still seem quiet by other people's standards.  Around other people, she isn't very talkative, but sometimes there are exceptions.  Some people just have an affect on her that makes her want to tell them anything, so she will.  In the areas of being outgoing, she might be overly courageous and adventurous, which is surprising because you would think she would be very timid.  Because she is concerned with the way she presents herself, she will try her best to make good impressions with people and try to learn more about them so she can trust them.  On the negative side, she can get very impatient.  Family wise, she totally loves them, but she can be overprotective from losing some important people in her life(See History).  She only acts a little differently at home, she is a little crazier and also a little more stubborn.  Around other family members she just acts like they are family, so she is completely herself.  She really doesn't fight with people in her family because she is so worried about pleasing everyone, but sometimes her parents act weird in front of friends so she doesn't think she is related to them.
 
            When Neola is alone, she usually is very sarcastic in her thinking and acts even crazier because she doesn't have to impress anyone.  To occupy herself, she usually just thinks about stuff or sings because no one is listening.  She also dances around while doing her chores and plays air guitar, which she would never do in public.  If people ever found out what she did when she was alone she would probably become even quieter and just try to deny it.  Her biggest dream is to become an Olympic gymnast and then to become a famous writer of mystery novels.  To make her dreams come true, she goes to a gymnastics academy almost every day and packs her school schedule with writing and literature classes.  She is most afraid of disappointing people.  When she does she will keep everything inside until she is alone, and then she cries and stays in her room. One thing she will never, ever do is do something that will shame her parents.  If forced to do this, she would try to find a way, any way to prevent doing it until there was nothing else to do, and then try again.  It takes only a little to get her angry, and once angry, she will go off by herself on a walk and vent.  Her strengths are usually anything to do with endurance and agility.  She is also courageous, adventurous, optimistic, and energetic. Her weaknesses are that she can be selfish, impulsive, impatient, and foolhardy.  She also has a tendency to procrastinate.   
 
Dissy: Bubbly but angry, talkative but shy, hates friction, easily angered, and you seem very intent on her being an extrovert rather than shy, though you insist she is. All in all, the personality seems like one giant contradiction. You have the characteristics of both a fire sign and a water sign, and obviously those two just don't go hand in hand.
 
     History:  Neola was born in Rome, Italy but her parents, Jocelyn and Michael, have grandparents from Ayios Nikolaos, Greece.  Her parents were both writers so it was not like she was one of the richest people in the world.  She spent her childhood usually playing in a park or at the gymnastics academy she got a scholarship to.  She loved to talk and laugh, especially with her grandparents, who had lived next door.  She started school at the neighborhood elementary school and everything was fine.
 
            One day though, her life changed.  Blood cancer was a genetic thing that had killed many people in the Vitalis family.  It was her turn to witness loosing someone to this horrible disease.  For her, it was even worse, because she lost two people.  She had just gotten home from school and no one was home.  She looked around for a note but found none.  A few minutes later her mother came back to pick Neola up.  Her eyes were bloodshot and her face was blotchy.  Neola didn't know what was going on.  She was brought to the St. Tarcisius Hospital and immediately she began crying.  She was led to a room and only her grandfather was there.  He told her that her grandmother had just died and he just wanted to tell her what he was giving her.  He gave her the money to go to St. Tarcisius Private Academy for the rest of her school career. 
 
            After this huge loss, Neola slowly became the way she is today, very quiet.  School was like a haven to her because it seemed so much better than her old schools.  She now spent her days helping around the house, going to school and gymnastics, and just thinking.  Her social status is that of a person who has popular friends, but isn't popular, and she likes it that way.  She does have one best friend, her guardian robin Persephone.  She met Persephone the first few weeks of her senior year of high school.  After her awakening, she spent more time hanging out with new friends and worrying about when she would have to become Sailor Proserpina again for some reason.
 
NPCs: Jocelyn Vitalis: Jocelyn is Neola's lovely mother.  Even though she cares deeply for her mother and always wants to please her, they do bump heads about certain things.  Jocelyn is very deeply tanned, tall, and has the same chocolate ice cream colored hair as Neola.  Jocelyn does have different eyes than Neola.  Her eyes are a pine tree green with a ring of yellow around the pupil.  Jocelyn is very nice and lets Neola do almost whatever she wants, but when it comes to school, she is very stern because she will not forget that her parents gave Neola the chance to go to St. Tarcisius Private Academy.
 
Michael Vitalis: Michael Vitalis is Neola's father.  He is the rule maker of the house.  He makes sure Neola follows and obeys his rules and makes sure she is in by her curfew.  Internally, he is mad at himself because he couldn't get enough money to send Neola to her current school by himself.  He has short, messy dark brown hair and bronzed skin.  He has the same midnight blue eyes as Neola and looks the most Italian out of the whole family.
 
Part III: Senshi Information
 
Special Skills: Neola just has a thing about being able to care for just about anything newborn.  She has taken in baby birds, rabbits, anything around Rome.  Her parents think she can sense exactly what something wants and it's sort of true.  She also is very good at growing things from seeds.  She has a small garden outside her bottom level apartment.
 
Dissy: so then she's an Animal Empath?
 
Henshin Item: A fist sized pale amethyst in silver casing with her symbol inscribed onto the front and her transformation phrase on the back.  To carry it, she attaches it to a silver chain and hooks it to her bag.
 
Transformation: "Proserpina Deus Power Make-Up!" First she stands with her arms out and her legs together.  Snow surrounds her, temporarily blocking her from view.(snow? For spring? Don't worry, I have a crazy idea, so just read on.)  Then the sun appears and quickly melts the snow but some sticks to her legs and turn lavender to form her boots.  Soon birds come and wrap lavender ribbon around her to form her skirt and bodice.   It starts to rain and the rain forms her armor and gloves and armbands.  Finally grape vines come down to her skirt and form the leather pieces and then to her boots to form the ring on the top of them.  Finally her transformation gem shines and she opens her eyes and the sign on her forehead appears.  She stands with her back towards whomever, her head turned to face whoever, and her hands on her hips.(Wasn't that a crazy idea!?!)
 
Color: Lavender because it is so light and springy.( Is springy a word? Oh well.)
 
Symbol:   This sign means spring.  It was most commonly used by alchemists.
 
Dissy: What sign? Describe please.
 
Fuku/Costume: Choker: Lavender  Collar: Lavender  Broach:  Silver casting with a pale amethyst.  Her symbol is engraved into the amethyst.  Bodice: White( Because she is a Lucidus) Armor:  Just regular old gray Wristband: Brown leather but on her hands she has lavender gardening type gloves.  Skirt: Lavender with brown leather straps hanging over it.  The straps have dark green vines going down them.  Shoes: Knee length lavender boots with a dark green vine going around the top.
 
Powers/Attacks: "Spring Shower!"  After yelling this she throws up the Sorgente da Stare and catches it with the spout facing forward.  She shakes it around so the enemy can hear there is water in it.  She smiles innocently and immediately afterwards, a dark green grape vine shoots out of the spout, wrapping around the enemy, keeping it from moving.  This gives other people a chance to attack or it gives Sailor Proserpina a chance to call for another senshi or knights to help. 
 
This attack can be performed more than once, and it can hit more than one target.  It can be dodged, but the enemy would have to be pretty fast, and it can be redirected by herself and maybe others.  The more powerful Sailor Proserpina becomes, the stronger the vine is and it eventually could even suffocate a person.
 
Dissy: Lets hope she gets stronger really fast. There are way too many binding attacks in this rpg and not enough finishing attacks. you will want to revise this more.
 
Weapons: The Sorgente da Stare, which means "Source of Life" in Italian, is a silver watering can.  Grape vines are engraved around it.  The handle is made of pale amethyst flowers.
 
Guardian: Persephone is a female robin that Neola met when she found her injured in her front garden.  Persephone is almost like a child.  She is stubborn and always wants to have fun.  She can give good advice once she stops fooling around.  Her bright black eyes always show if she's bored or whatever she's feeling. The first time she spoke to Neola was when she was leaving for school and Persephone said something like, "Hey!  I don't wanna sit in this cage all day!  I wanna have some fun!  Get back here!".  Ever since it has been like Neola has a younger sister.  Neola always has to bail Persephone out of trouble from cats or cars, but she doesn't care, she would do the same for any animals she has helped.  When Persephone does act serious, it's usually when something is wrong, and she is freaking out, or when Neola is taking care of something, then she will be quiet.  She can sense the feelings of other senshi and knights but it's her decision whether she confronts that person or tells someone else.
 
Dissy: Guardians are supposed to have powers, what's Persephone's power? (ex: Eris has second sight and Zeus has bobble production.)
 
Part IV: Miscellaneous Information
 
Why you: Why me?  I think you should pick me because I think I am a great writer and just love the idea of this RPG!  I've been in RPG's since the year 2000 and have grown to love them.  Creating characters is also just so fun!
 
Why this character?  Well, spring is my favorite season and I have always loved Roman and Greek mythology, so I already knew the story behind Proserpina.  Plus I just suddenly had some crazy ideas that worked with her element, like my henshin. (hehehe)
 
Why this game?  Like I said before, I love mythology and anime, so this was perfect.  Plus, all you people sound so nice and everyone's characters are so cool!
 
Miscellaneous: I already know two people have tried for this character and failed, but I will still try.  And about the writing sample, watch out, it's my worst part of an application because I can never think of an amazing thing to write.
 
Part V: The Writing Sample
 
*BEEEEEEEEEEP!!!* The pink alarm clock screamed after having its snooze button hit one too many times.  Stubbornly, Neola put the pillow over her head and squeezed her eyes shut.  In the process of that she had knocked half of the stuff on her nightstand off, including the alarm clock.
 
Two minutes later, her mother Jocelyn walked into the room and turned off the alarm clock, put it back on the nightstand, and pulled the blanket and pillow off of her daughter.  "Come on Neola, get up, you're going to be late!" she said sternly as she left the room.  Neola groggily opened her eyes and tried to focus on the illuminated face of her alarm clock, where the numbers 745 were flashing.  **745.7:45!  School starts at 8:15!** she thought frantically.
 
She jumped out of bed and ran to the bathroom.  She took off her pajamas and got into her shower, which was lukewarm.  After about ten minutes, she got out of the shower and dried herself off.  As always, her mother had fixed her bed and laid out her school uniform and a blue barrette.  She threw these on and skipped through the hall to the kitchen.  She stopped long enough to look at the word of the day on her calendar. **Hmm, ribald, characteristic of vulgar humor, oh, that's nice** she thought.
 
Grabbing a piece of toast and a cold coffee, she went to the front hall and grabbed her black messenger bag and stepped into her shoes.  Her parents were outside, reading, so while she was eating, she gave her mom and dad a hug and started jogging down the huge hill toward St. Tarcisius Private Academy.  As the bell rang she sprinted into her homeroom to begin a day just as normal as any other day.
 
(There ya go, all done!  Well, I just hope you like it and I also hope to hear from you soon!)
 
Dissy: Okay, generally I like this application and it has possiblities, but at this point the problems are very glaring and numerous. I would love to see you revise this and resubmit it, but I'm still going to give it a reject revise. My reasons are listed throughout the application.
 
Vessy: I agree with Dissy while I feel like you had the idea of spring time down pat you we're missing large areas of relevance and detail and thusly contradicting yourself. You wrote well and I loved your sample story it was very imaginative! But the **'s got kinda annoying. Thoughts can be represented in regular ""
s singular ' 's or Italics because its all third person omniscient to us! I'd suggest sitting down and going through the app carefully yourself and thinking everything through. The reasoning and all.
Verdict: Revise or Die!
 
Final Verdict: Revise or DIE!

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