Soldier Part I: Player Information
Your Name: Lauren
Email Address:
[email protected]Web Page:
Nope, sorry, geocities is mean to me and won't let
me access it.
Part II: Character Information
Character Position: Sailor Proserpina
Character Name: Neola Vitalis
Name Meaning: Neola: Origin= Greek Meaning= New
The name of Neola creates an easy-going, good-natured personality,
meeting and mixing easily. You appreciate the company of others, to the point
that you do not like to be by yourself for very long. You are gifted with
natural expression, both verbal and musical, but you would find it tedious to
study music and practice theory. Anything that involves concentration or just
plain hard work, you prefer to avoid as best you can. Although you have many
creative, original ideas, procrastination is your worst enemy because you can
seldom make decisions and carry them out. In your desire to gain the favour of
others and to keep peace, because you abhor friction, you change your opinion to
agree with those at hand. It is easy for you to express love and affection, but
you would have to watch that your emotional nature does not get the better of
you and lead you to indiscretions which you would later regret. A desire for
sweet, rich foods could create skin problems, overweight, or you could suffer
weakness across the back, or possibly a liver ailment.
Vitalis: Origin=Greek Meaning=Life
Your name of Vitalis gives you the ability to be creative along practical
lines of endeavour. Your ideas can be very original and inventive. You enjoy
being with people in a social environment. Your personal appearance is important
to you, for you desire to make a good impression on others. Your pleasant manner
attracts people to you with their problems and you are capable of offering
practical advice, though you would probably not follow such advice yourself.
This name causes you to be somewhat too concerned with the personalities,
problems, and activities of other people. You seem positive and decisive and can
be outspoken in the expression of your opinions, but you lack the
self-confidence needed to follow through with your ideas and plans.
Procrastination is your downfall. You frequently choose the path of least
resistance to avoid your responsibilities. It is not easy for you to overcome
obstacles or face issues. This name does you an injustice in that it restricts
your success in business and personal pursuits through a lack of ambition. There
is a weakness in the fluid functions and in the region of the head resulting in
sinus problems, headaches, eye, ear, or throat conditions and related ailments.
Hair loss could also be a problem.
(I chose this name because Spring is the season of New Life. I dunno,
I thought it was a good idea. Hehehe)
Birthdate and Age / Zodiacal Sign: Neola is an Aries and was born on March
21st, which fits well with her Sailor identity, and she is 17 years old.
Physical Details:
Hair: Neola has hair like the color of chocolate ice cream. It is a
very light brown. (Pardon my description of the color! J) She has hair that is
straight and goes down to her lower back. The top is pulled back by a
brown clip to keep it out of her face. If she is at school, it is pulled
back by a blue clip.
Vessy: thats a pretty weird color for hair. what color
of choco ice cream? dark? light? swirly?
Height:5'6"
Eyes: They are a midnight blue with a tiny almost unrecognizable ring of
light blue around her pupil. Her eyes are oval shaped with long brown
lashes. Her eyebrows are thin with only a small arch.
Face: Neola has a small slope nose that only turns up a tiny bit at the
end. She has lips that form a thin heart, bigger on the bottom than the
top.
Skin: She has lightly bronzed skin with some freckles across her shoulders
and upper arms. She does not have a problem with acne but she does have a
tattoo of a butterfly on her lower back. She has a few scars here and there from
tripping or banging into something. Her skin is semi dry so she uses
moisturizer every day.
Voice: She has a calm and collected mezzo soprano voice. She is
a good singer but she doesn't take lessons or anything.
Strength: She does have some strength from being in gymnastics so
long, but she couldn't last very long in anything totally physical.
Hand: Left J
Stature: Neola was always taught to keep her face forward and her
back straight so she looks poised all the time. She will look into
someone's eyes when she is talking to them, but her look is not
penetrating.
Build: She has wider hips that shoulders, but is slender and a little
curvy. In gymnastics, you slow your growth some so it will stay like that
for a while. She weighs around 107 pounds.
Dissy: EEPS! Let's check that weight. 107 is REALLY
underweight for someone who is 5'6" to give you an idea, a person who is 5'2"
is, on average, 125 lbs. Also since she's athletic, she would weight more than
average because muscles weighs more than fat.
Clothes: Neola generally wears tight clothes, usually in pastelly
(Another of my weird words! So sorry!) colors with a pair of
sandals. If she has gymnastics, you will see her in loose sweatpants or
shorts and a pastel sports tank top with white sneakers. When it is
cooler, she will wear a zipper up sweatshirt or sweater over a tank top or
halter. Her style is very trendy. She loves the way movie stars
dress so she tries to dress like the people she sees in fashion magazines.
Gemstone: Amethyst, it is just like her favorite color, lavender.
Likes: Baby Animals: They are so cute and even when you are sad or mad,
you can't help smiling at them!
Dissy: This one seems to be a growing
trend.....
Flowers: They are very pretty and make you feel good! Plus they
always look so happy!
Books: They are wonderful for their stories that can take you places where
you may never go.
Rain: It's cold and fun to walk through.
Gnocchis: They are so good and easy to make!
Dissy: Explain what Gnocchis, I don't know what it
is.
Dislikes: Physics: It's only cold hard facts, there is no
imagination behind it.
Vessy: Personally I disagree with this its the ability
to understand why things move like they do. Very useful in pool. There are ways
to bend the facts at times...
Spiders: They are creepy and crawl around and eat bugs. She will not
kill them though, but she will just scream a lot.
Dissy: Spiders are very cliché for rpg characters for
some reason, and it seems out of sync with the fact that her sphere is
springtime.
Too much perfume: Ok most perfumes are very strong already, you don't
need to double dose on it.
Hobbies: Gymnastics: It is fun and she is good at it, so where can you go
wrong?
Singing: It's wonderful to listen to and even better to hear
yourself.
Writing: Neola can express herself and no one even has to hear it.
She especially loves to write short mysteries.
Playing Twister: No one will ever play with her though, because they
know she is so good.
Dissy: Well over all, with the dislikes/likes/hobbies,
you told us her reasons for liking it, but the reasons we want is why does she
actually like it. So, how is playing twister related to her sphere or zodiac or
her up bringing. For instance, I love to sing because it makes me feel good and
I love music. The real reason is because my family is very musical and I've
grown up with it so it's a sort of comfort blanket for me. We need to see the
REAL reasons, not her personal reasons.
Personality: To strangers, Neola is usually very quiet and won't be the
first to say something. Usually it takes a pretty long time to know her
because she is quiet and does not easily open up to people. Once you have
her trust, it is not that hard to keep it. As long as you don't do
something horrible, she will trust you, or at least to a certain point.
When she first meets someone, if she feels she can trust them right away, than
she will. If she feels the opposite, then she won't, it's as simple as
that. In groups she will participate in conversations, but she's not one
to want to start arguments. She still will be quiet and her voice soft,
but she'll open up more if she feels comfortable. She is different around
friends than other people. With friends, she will almost be completely
talkative with, but she will still seem quiet by other people's standards.
Around other people, she isn't very talkative, but sometimes there are
exceptions. Some people just have an affect on her that makes her want to
tell them anything, so she will. In the areas of being outgoing, she might
be overly courageous and adventurous, which is surprising because you would
think she would be very timid. Because she is concerned with the way she
presents herself, she will try her best to make good impressions with people and
try to learn more about them so she can trust them. On the negative side,
she can get very impatient. Family wise, she totally loves them, but she
can be overprotective from losing some important people in her life(See
History). She only acts a little differently at home, she is a little
crazier and also a little more stubborn. Around other family members she
just acts like they are family, so she is completely herself. She really
doesn't fight with people in her family because she is so worried about pleasing
everyone, but sometimes her parents act weird in front of friends so she doesn't
think she is related to them.
When
Neola is alone, she usually is very sarcastic in her thinking and acts even
crazier because she doesn't have to impress anyone. To occupy herself, she
usually just thinks about stuff or sings because no one is listening. She
also dances around while doing her chores and plays air guitar, which she would
never do in public. If people ever found out what she did when she was
alone she would probably become even quieter and just try to deny it. Her
biggest dream is to become an Olympic gymnast and then to become a famous writer
of mystery novels. To make her dreams come true, she goes to a gymnastics
academy almost every day and packs her school schedule with writing and
literature classes. She is most afraid of disappointing people. When
she does she will keep everything inside until she is alone, and then she cries
and stays in her room. One thing she will never, ever do is do something
that will shame her parents. If forced to do this, she would try to find a
way, any way to prevent doing it until there was nothing else to do, and then
try again. It takes only a little to get her angry, and once angry, she
will go off by herself on a walk and vent. Her strengths are usually
anything to do with endurance and agility. She is also courageous,
adventurous, optimistic, and energetic. Her weaknesses are that she can be
selfish, impulsive, impatient, and foolhardy. She also has a tendency to
procrastinate.
Dissy: Bubbly but angry, talkative but shy, hates
friction, easily angered, and you seem very intent on her being an extrovert
rather than shy, though you insist she is. All in all, the personality seems
like one giant contradiction. You have the characteristics of both a fire sign
and a water sign, and obviously those two just don't go hand in
hand.
History: Neola was born in Rome, Italy but
her parents, Jocelyn and Michael, have grandparents from Ayios Nikolaos,
Greece. Her parents were both writers so it was not like she was one of
the richest people in the world. She spent her childhood usually playing
in a park or at the gymnastics academy she got a scholarship to. She loved
to talk and laugh, especially with her grandparents, who had lived next
door. She started school at the neighborhood elementary school and
everything was fine.
One day
though, her life changed. Blood cancer was a genetic thing that had killed
many people in the Vitalis family. It was her turn to witness loosing
someone to this horrible disease. For her, it was even worse, because she
lost two people. She had just gotten home from school and no one was
home. She looked around for a note but found none. A few minutes
later her mother came back to pick Neola up. Her eyes were bloodshot and
her face was blotchy. Neola didn't know what was going on. She was
brought to the St. Tarcisius Hospital and immediately she began crying.
She was led to a room and only her grandfather was there. He told her that
her grandmother had just died and he just wanted to tell her what he was giving
her. He gave her the money to go to St. Tarcisius Private Academy for the
rest of her school career.
After
this huge loss, Neola slowly became the way she is today, very quiet.
School was like a haven to her because it seemed so much better than her old
schools. She now spent her days helping around the house, going to school
and gymnastics, and just thinking. Her social status is that of a person
who has popular friends, but isn't popular, and she likes it that way. She
does have one best friend, her guardian robin Persephone. She met
Persephone the first few weeks of her senior year of high school. After
her awakening, she spent more time hanging out with new friends and worrying
about when she would have to become Sailor Proserpina again for some
reason.
NPCs: Jocelyn Vitalis: Jocelyn is Neola's lovely mother. Even though
she cares deeply for her mother and always wants to please her, they do bump
heads about certain things. Jocelyn is very deeply tanned, tall, and has
the same chocolate ice cream colored hair as Neola. Jocelyn does have
different eyes than Neola. Her eyes are a pine tree green with a ring of
yellow around the pupil. Jocelyn is very nice and lets Neola do almost
whatever she wants, but when it comes to school, she is very stern because she
will not forget that her parents gave Neola the chance to go to St. Tarcisius
Private Academy.
Michael Vitalis: Michael Vitalis is Neola's father. He is the rule
maker of the house. He makes sure Neola follows and obeys his rules and
makes sure she is in by her curfew. Internally, he is mad at himself
because he couldn't get enough money to send Neola to her current school by
himself. He has short, messy dark brown hair and bronzed skin. He
has the same midnight blue eyes as Neola and looks the most Italian out of the
whole family.
Part III: Senshi Information
Special Skills: Neola just has a thing about being able to care for just
about anything newborn. She has taken in baby birds, rabbits, anything
around Rome. Her parents think she can sense exactly what something wants
and it's sort of true. She also is very good at growing things from
seeds. She has a small garden outside her bottom level apartment.
Dissy: so then she's an Animal Empath?
Henshin Item: A fist sized pale amethyst in silver casing with her symbol
inscribed onto the front and her transformation phrase on the back. To
carry it, she attaches it to a silver chain and hooks it to her bag.
Transformation: "Proserpina Deus Power Make-Up!" First she stands with her
arms out and her legs together. Snow surrounds her, temporarily blocking
her from view.(snow? For spring? Don't worry, I have a crazy idea, so just read
on.) Then the sun appears and quickly melts the snow but some sticks to
her legs and turn lavender to form her boots. Soon birds come and wrap
lavender ribbon around her to form her skirt and bodice. It starts
to rain and the rain forms her armor and gloves and armbands. Finally
grape vines come down to her skirt and form the leather pieces and then to her
boots to form the ring on the top of them. Finally her transformation gem
shines and she opens her eyes and the sign on her forehead appears. She
stands with her back towards whomever, her head turned to face whoever, and her
hands on her hips.(Wasn't that a crazy idea!?!)
Color: Lavender because it is so light and springy.( Is springy a word? Oh
well.)
Symbol: This sign means spring. It was most commonly used
by alchemists.
Dissy: What sign? Describe please.
Fuku/Costume: Choker: Lavender Collar: Lavender Broach:
Silver casting with a pale amethyst. Her symbol is engraved into the
amethyst. Bodice: White( Because she is a Lucidus) Armor: Just
regular old gray Wristband: Brown leather but on her hands she has lavender
gardening type gloves. Skirt: Lavender with brown leather straps hanging
over it. The straps have dark green vines going down them. Shoes:
Knee length lavender boots with a dark green vine going around the top.
Powers/Attacks: "Spring Shower!" After yelling this she throws up the
Sorgente da Stare and catches it with the spout facing forward. She shakes
it around so the enemy can hear there is water in it. She smiles
innocently and immediately afterwards, a dark green grape vine shoots out of the
spout, wrapping around the enemy, keeping it from moving. This gives other
people a chance to attack or it gives Sailor Proserpina a chance to call for
another senshi or knights to help.
This attack can be performed more than once, and it can hit more than one
target. It can be dodged, but the enemy would have to be pretty fast, and
it can be redirected by herself and maybe others. The more powerful Sailor
Proserpina becomes, the stronger the vine is and it eventually could even
suffocate a person.
Dissy: Lets hope she gets stronger really fast. There
are way too many binding attacks in this rpg and not enough finishing attacks.
you will want to revise this more.
Weapons: The Sorgente da Stare, which means "Source of Life" in Italian, is
a silver watering can. Grape vines are engraved around it. The
handle is made of pale amethyst flowers.
Guardian: Persephone is a female robin that Neola met when she found her
injured in her front garden. Persephone is almost like a child. She
is stubborn and always wants to have fun. She can give good advice once
she stops fooling around. Her bright black eyes always show if she's bored
or whatever she's feeling. The first time she spoke to Neola was when she was
leaving for school and Persephone said something like, "Hey! I don't wanna
sit in this cage all day! I wanna have some fun! Get back
here!". Ever since it has been like Neola has a younger sister.
Neola always has to bail Persephone out of trouble from cats or cars, but she
doesn't care, she would do the same for any animals she has helped. When
Persephone does act serious, it's usually when something is wrong, and she is
freaking out, or when Neola is taking care of something, then she will be
quiet. She can sense the feelings of other senshi and knights but it's her
decision whether she confronts that person or tells someone else.
Dissy: Guardians are supposed to have powers, what's
Persephone's power? (ex: Eris has second sight and Zeus has bobble
production.)
Part IV: Miscellaneous Information
Why you: Why me? I think you should pick me because I think I am a
great writer and just love the idea of this RPG! I've been in RPG's since
the year 2000 and have grown to love them. Creating characters is also
just so fun!
Why this character? Well, spring is my favorite season and I have
always loved Roman and Greek mythology, so I already knew the story behind
Proserpina. Plus I just suddenly had some crazy ideas that worked with her
element, like my henshin. (hehehe)
Why this game? Like I said before, I love mythology and anime, so
this was perfect. Plus, all you people sound so nice and everyone's
characters are so cool!
Miscellaneous: I already know two people have tried for this character and
failed, but I will still try. And about the writing sample, watch out,
it's my worst part of an application because I can never think of an amazing
thing to write.
Part V: The Writing Sample
*BEEEEEEEEEEP!!!* The pink alarm clock screamed after having its snooze
button hit one too many times. Stubbornly, Neola put the pillow over her
head and squeezed her eyes shut. In the process of that she had knocked
half of the stuff on her nightstand off, including the alarm clock.
Two minutes later, her mother Jocelyn walked into the room and turned off
the alarm clock, put it back on the nightstand, and pulled the blanket and
pillow off of her daughter. "Come on Neola, get up, you're going to be
late!" she said sternly as she left the room. Neola groggily opened her
eyes and tried to focus on the illuminated face of her alarm clock, where the
numbers 745 were flashing. **745.7:45! School starts at 8:15!** she
thought frantically.
She jumped out of bed and ran to the bathroom. She took off her
pajamas and got into her shower, which was lukewarm. After about ten
minutes, she got out of the shower and dried herself off. As always, her
mother had fixed her bed and laid out her school uniform and a blue
barrette. She threw these on and skipped through the hall to the
kitchen. She stopped long enough to look at the word of the day on her
calendar. **Hmm, ribald, characteristic of vulgar humor, oh, that's nice** she
thought.
Grabbing a piece of toast and a cold coffee, she went to the front hall and
grabbed her black messenger bag and stepped into her shoes. Her parents
were outside, reading, so while she was eating, she gave her mom and dad a hug
and started jogging down the huge hill toward St. Tarcisius Private
Academy. As the bell rang she sprinted into her homeroom to begin a day
just as normal as any other day.
(There ya go, all done! Well, I just hope you like it and I also hope
to hear from you soon!)
Dissy: Okay, generally I like this application and it
has possiblities, but at this point the problems are very glaring and numerous.
I would love to see you revise this and resubmit it, but I'm still going to give
it a reject revise. My reasons are listed throughout the
application.
Vessy: I agree with Dissy while I feel like you had the
idea of spring time down pat you we're missing large areas of relevance and
detail and thusly contradicting yourself. You wrote well and I loved your sample
story it was very imaginative! But the **'s got kinda annoying. Thoughts can be
represented in regular ""
s singular ' 's or Italics because its all third person
omniscient to us! I'd suggest sitting down and going through the app carefully
yourself and thinking everything through. The reasoning and all.
Verdict: Revise or Die!
Final Verdict: Revise or DIE!