E-mail - FireSeraph05@hotmail.com
Webpage - None
Character Name - Egeria
Civilian Name - Nikita Siren Greer
'Unconquered Enchanter of the Vigilant' Nikita is a Russian name meaning 'Conquered', derived from the male greek name 'Aniketos'. Siren is an alternate form of the English name Sirena which forms from the Greek word for 'Enchanter'. Greer is a Gaelic name meaning 'Vigilant', it's original form is the boy's name, Gregor. I had a really hard time with the name but finally decided she masters over matters of the mind, and even the most vigilant person can't stop her.
Vessy: Okay. Good detail.
Nickname - Nik, Blue
Her 'Blue' nickname comes from the fact that she absolutely adores the color, and anyone who knows her, knows this. Oh, and anyone caught calling her Niki will have a hard time not being hunted down.
Birthday / Zodiac Sign - Nik was born on November 19, therefore she's a Scorpio. I've done a lot of reading on astronomy, and I wanted a character that ran deep. Since her power is so dark I guess, I wanted a dark enigma to follow along.
Age - 17
Physical Details -
Hair - Nik's hair is a rich brown, streaked with dark blue highlights. Cut to mid shoulder blade she usually keeps it up in a ponytail. She grew her bangs out long ago and two long thin streaks of dark blue highlight her facial features.
Eyes - Nikita's eyes are an intense blue. Full of knowledge and emotion, they betray her every sentiment. The eyes are called the window to the soul, and they certainly show hers.
Vessy: well we seem to have a blue theme happening here…
Build - Nik is built tall and angular, her hips broader then her shoulders, setting her only slightly out of proportion. She stands at about 5'8" and three quarters and weighs 132 lbs.
Vessy: and three quarters of what? Try 5’8.75” or 5’8”-ish
Skin - Nikita's skin is naturally fair do to her heritage, but through lots of free time and only 5spf suntan lotion, she's managed to develop a rich sandy hue. Nikita has two tattoos, one is an inch and half henna-colored scorpion appearing to crawl just above her right ankle. The other is a compass rose in navy about the size of a half- dollar, on the under-side of her left wrist.
Carriage - Watching Nik, she is somehow intoxicating, like driving by an accident, you can't help but look. With unbelievable charm and grace she manages to turn even a mundane task such as writing into a hypnotizing motion. Her walk is carefree and more of a saunter then a walk. But her most notable aspect is her smile. Mischievous and eye- catching, it's won her numerous dates in the past.
Voice - Nikita speaks with an accent so heavy you could cut it with a knife. A mix of Scottish and some British every now and then, it's fairly easy to guess she isn't a native. Pitch itself, she speaks somewhere between a soprano and alto, generally speaking at a normal volume.
Clothes - Nik is usually seen wearing a pair of form-fitting flared pants, anything from black leather, to faded jeans. As far as shirt's go, anything's fair play, so long as it's unconventional. A pair of leather boots are her best friend though when dressed up she'll go high-heeled. 7 slim silver bangles, a pair of silver hoop earrings, and a plain silver band on the right ring finger is the usual jewelry she wears. She almost never wears gold, and unless it's a small stud, she never wears jewels. Dresses and skirts dot her closet here and there, but for her to wear them, you've either got to be a real hottie, or do a lot of fast talking. Her make-up is never very heavy, but it always stands out, blue and silver dominating most of it.
Vessy: well good detail. Why’d she get the tattoos? Why doesn’t she where gold? What type of leather boots? What size and shape are her eyes? A bit more in build would be nice. Is she chunky? Big boned? What It’s hard to tell… Though overall fairly well done.
Bloodtype - AB
Gemstone - Lapis Lazuli was used by the ancient Egyptians to access sacred knowledge. It was said to cleanse the mind and spirit of toxins which clouded such knowledge. Nik has great faith in this stone, hoping to tap the 'sacred knowledge' when she gives advice.
Vessy: why does she put such great faith in the stone? Is she really new age-ish?
Likes - Nikita's foremost passion is being the center of attention. Not that she needs to try hard but she enjoys it all the same. When she goes to a party, she makes the biggest entrance she can to make sure she's noticed. She also loves people, she really doesn't have any close friends, so she surrounds herself with as many people as she can. She's the kind of person to go hug a complete stranger because they look a little down. If someone steals her thunder, they are instantly on her black list. Nik's last love is her strangest. She adores Christmas. The whole season makes her absolutely giddy. From the first of December she's seen in either a red santa hat or a pair of plush reindeer antlers, and Christmas Eve? What else but one of those fabulous short santa dresses. The one time she will willingly wear a dress.
Vessy: so she likes christmas and being the center of attention. That’s it? Doesn’t like small furry animals? Or advice columns? Or chocolate bars? Or ouijia boards? Nothing else? More please.
Dislikes - Nikita's biggest fear is being alone and forgotten, which is why she strives so hard to make sure people notice her. Her most prominent hate however is people who are judgmental. She can't stand being judged upon first encounter, or being thought of as just another goal and those who do, are her worst enemy. Vessy: being alone, judgmental people. More please. And umm… doesn’t everybody begin to judge people by their first impressions? It’s sort of the point of first impressions…
Hobbies - Nik's hobbies are few in number, but occupy most of her time. Her first is solving problems. Other peoples, or her own, the daily crossword puzzle, a murder on the other side of the world. Doesn't matter, if it's a problem and needs solving, she's on it. Her only other hobby is helping to run The Bonnie. She's the floor show every night for their guests, performing anything from a pop-song to a soliloquy. And unless you count avid party-going as a hobby, that's about it.
Vessy: Hey! I know you could put she likes solving puzzles in her “Likes” and since when did bed and breakfasts start serving dinner? Being as their “BED” and “BREAKFAST” They don’t usually have floor shows and have gourmet chefs. B+B’s are small and run from peoples own homes…
Personality/Alter Ego - In one word, Nikita is magnetic. Her personality, her very mannerisms draw you like a spider with flies. Without a hint of effort, she draws a crowd, making her a highly noted persona. But she's someone to be handled with care. Highly volatile, her spoiled ways of life are not to be disregarded. She will have it her way or no way, and anyone who steps in the path of what she wants is easily tossed aside. Some people are able to guess her darker intentions, but with a light-hearted laugh and a friendly joke they're easily persuaded back to her side. With unimaginable intuition she knows just what you want to hear, know, and what makes you tick. With impeccable charm she'd make you believe the earth was shaped like a doughnut if she had the mind too. But she can't always keep her serenity, and when the eye of the storm breaks, you're in for one hell of a ride. She's obsessive and resentful and can hold one mean grudge. With the jealousy of Othello and and the obstinacy of a m
Vessy: well actually flies just sort fly in and get stuck… or at least that’s what I though happened. And then the spider eats the people… er… flies… That analogy doesn’t realy make a huge amount of sense… but okay… So she’s magnetic, volatile, spoiled, Goal oriented, deceptive, persuasive, intuitive, Revengeful, obbsessive resentful passionate and fragile? Kinda confusing. Actually some of your analogy’s don’t make a whole lot of sense. The eye of the storm is calm. Very… confusing. And a volatile revengeful person doesn’t really seem like someone I’d go to for advice… especially one that’s really persuasive, Doesn’t seem really advice-ey to me… more spoiled brat princess super popular stereo-type-ish…
History - Nikita was born on a cold November night in Nairnside, a small town not far from Inverness, Scotland. Her father, Caden Greer, was a painter from Edinburgh, her mother, Anya, the youngest daughter of a small Russian family from St. Petersburg. Caden was an art teacher at a college in St. Petersburg, and Anya one of his students. The seven year age gap posed little problem for the couple, and without their parents blessings, they were married. Moving to Nairnside the couple opened a small bed+breakfast, while Caden continued on with his paintings. A year later Nikita was born. From the very start she was one of those children who demand attention. With adorable looks, childhood innocence, and her father wrapped around her little finger, Nik had it easy. A fast learner, Anya started teaching Nikita at the age of four. But even the fact that Nikita was home schooled didn't stop her rising fame in town. The brightest star of Nairnside, Nikita had the whole town watching her. Every free moment
Vessy: * sigh * another ruddy foreigner. STOP IT! No more foreigners! Or British people! Not that I have anything against them just… stop. I mean if you HAVE to be a foreigner what about Spain? Or Switzerland? Or Israel? Or even Yemen! WHATS WRONG WITH YEMEN!!
So if she was a teacher and he was a painter how could she be his student? And wouldn’t their relationship be a little… er… frowned upon. Seeing their student teacher relationship? And if he was in edinborough how did they come to meet in st. petersburg? 7 year age gap isn’t that big a difference. It just seems so when your younger. Why did their parents oppose the marriage? What did her mom start teaching her? Home schooling? Why’d they home school her? How could an artist / b+B owner buy a pony? Those things are bloody expensive (feed and boarding aside) ! How did she rise in fame? What’d she do? Was she in like ballet or something? She was home schooled that kind of isolates kids. How did she rock the school? And so she was snobby-ish too?
What was her moms illness? Anything serious enough to warrant moving to warmer clients that can’t be cured by modern medicine isn’t probably something you get over quickly. And again a bed and breakfast is run out of your own home not an empty building. I think your really thinking more along the lines of small hotel.
As for the car. NO! No, no, no, no no. The legal driving age in Italy is 18 therefor there would be NO point in her getting a car she can’t even legally drive yet. And how can a B+B owner buy such an expensive-ish car? A Saab is a luxury car and upper end-ish.
What happened to make Egeria take over? Why’d she pick her? How much colder? Like “I’m going to shoot a poor defensless little girls puppy right in front of her for no reason” “No your ugly go away” or something else?
A little confusing and not very well thought out…
NPC's - Caden Greer- Nik's 52 year old father. The owner of The Bonnie Bed And Breakfast(The Bonnie for short), and an amateur painter, from Edinburgh Scotland. Of middle height, Caden has a thick build, and deep girth. With a sort of foppy bowl hair cut, Caden's black curls are fading to salt and pepper. But his evergreen eyes are forever young, his scruffy shave telling of a roughish young man, lost many years ago. Keeping to his homelands climate Caden wears long pants, brown leather loafers, a button-down shirt, and a woolen vest no matter what the weather. With a pair of light-weight spectacles perched on his nose and an empty pipe in his mouth, which he never smokes because of Anya. Nikita and her father are not exactly close, but she's the apple of his eye, and can manage anything out of him with the slightest pouty face.
Anya Greer - Nikita's 45 year old mother lived in St. Petersburg Russia her whole life. She hoped to be a sculptor but all that changed when she met Caden. She was young and impressionable when she fell in love, and left her quiet Russian life to find a quiet Scottish one. Slim and tall, she shares her daughters depthless blue eyes. Shoulder length auburn waves and a thick Russian accent set her apart. She's usually seen wearing a pair of khaki jeans, and a turtle neck. She and Nik have a sort of rocky relationship. Anya wants Nik to be a reliable woman and pushes Nikita to make something of herself. Nikita thinks she has time.
Donate de Douleur 'Dante' - The Bonnie's 23 year old chef, all the way from France this pompous and cocky cook always has a complaint. Short, and slender, his pretty-boy features, unkempt ash-blonde hair, and baby blue eyes don't exactly give him cause to be unhappy. He usually wears a pair of jeans, a white t-shirt, white apron, and sneakers. He's always receiving attention from the female guests, and Nikita jokingly flirts with him all the time. If he isn't found in the back of the kitchen, yelling and cursing over some delightful dish that went 'horribly wrong', he's outside having a smoke.
Vessy: since when does a bed and breakfast need a gourmet chef? See hotel.
Special Skills - Attracting attention is Nikita's greatest skill. Unwittingly she catches everyone's eye and retains it. She also has amazing intuition. Almost a form of empathy, she's able to tell what you need. With this ability to almost read your emotions, she's has the ability to persuade you to or from these wants. Quite powerful you need to be either really confused or quite strong-willed to block against her ability.
Color - Graphite Grey
Symbol - Egeria's symbol is a circle resting over a semi-circle connected to a sort of cross. As Pluto is her Zodiacs ruling planet, the alternate symbol for the planet fits with her personality.
Fuku/Costume - Egeria's fuku is fairly simple and far from her civilian look. A pair of graphite grey pants, ride low on her hips, the boot cut legs, giving a long straight look. The wrap shirt she wears is made from numerous layers of sheer graphite colored material. It cuts a little higher then most shirts, exposing 3 inches of her stomach, and cuts a deep v neck. Long sheer sleeves reach to her knuckles, belling at the cuffs. From a silver chain around her neck hangs a black pearl charm. Black stack-heeled boots gain her a half inch in height, and silver nail polish highlights her fingers. The two most notable features that have changed however are her eyes and hair. Her eyes are a pale grey, and her hair has grown out just past her shoulder blades, the brown and blue of her civilian form turned a dazzling white.
Power/Attack -
Eyes of a Stranger - For this attack Egeria needs to have direct physical contact with the 'victim'. Once she has this, she's able to form a mental link with them, and from their perspective can see anything they have seen and manipulate it. Whether it be a memory or dream, she's able to watch along with them and distort it into something else. This thoroughly convinces them that whatever she changed really happened. A person needs to be conscious and mentally strong to break her link, and force her from their mind, and to make their memories correct they either need a physical reminder or Egeria has to change it again.
Swell of Influence - Egeria shuts her eyes as she says this, a quiet pulse, almost like a heart-beat sounding. Rings of grey energy begin to arc from her, slowly dissipating as they broaden and wash over the area. This continues, each ring disappearing as it reaches a ten foot radius from where she stands. These pulses give her a reading of who these people are and how bright their life force is. These waves also turn each person into a potential victim. She pin-points on the person with the brightest life force and because of the wave now has established a remote connection with their mind. She can control their decisions to an extent. Not life altering ones, but such things as motor skills
Vessy: Motor skills… hmm… That doesn’t really seem like “advice” it’s seems like “mwahaha I am the puppet master”
Weapons - None
Why me - I've been roleplaying for five years, and in my own opinion, I think I'm pretty good at it. I've belonged to numerous RPG's, far to many to count, and have made an army of characters. I know I'm not the best, but I hope to be an asset to this RPG.
Miscellaneous - I know there may be a lot to this application that doesn't have to do with Egeria's mythical history, but that's because I was unable to find anything about her. I tried the Encyclopedia Mythica link but was always unable to reach it. I'm going to keep trying to find more on Egeria herself, and any help would be appreciated.
Writing Sample -
"Rockin' around the Christmas tree at the Christmas Holly Hop...WHACK!" Nik rubbed her hand, she hadn't meant to hit the off button on her clock to hard. She sighed, staring at the neon blue numbers of her clock, they seemed to glare back at her defiantly. Sort of like a stern mother, telling her it was time to get up for school. It was telling her it was time to get up for school. Sliding from the warm covers she winced as her feet came in contact with the cold wood floor.
Taking a deep breath, Nikita stood, bearing the cold as she made her bed. Stretching she turned and hopped across the floor to her closet. Grabbing a pair of faded flared jeans as she passed her dresser, she grabbed an fuzzy oatmeal sweater from the top shelf of her closet. She tossed them onto the bed along with her brown lug-soled boots and a braided-leather belt, before slipping into her bathroom for a shower.
Twenty minutes later Nik was adding the last touch of bronze lip-stick. She smiled adjusting the silver ring on her finger before grabbing her backpack and heading downstairs. Slipping quietly down the back stairs, Nik stepped into the bright kitchen.
"Good morning Dante!" She was unable to help chuckling as the Frenchmen turned, a look of scorn on his face, talking fast in a heavy French accent.
"How can you call it a bon morning? The eggs are not cooking, the bacon has gone black, and I cannot make my funny shaped pancakes!"
"Oh Dante really, the eggs are fine and so is the bacon. And as for your pancakes. I really don't think people care. Pancakes are pancakes."
"WHAT?! How can you say that! Out of my kitchen, OUT!" Nik chuckled as she was shooed from the kitchen, managing to grab a strip of bacon as she went.
"Morning Honey." Nik smiled and kissed her mother on the cheek.
"Morning Mom, say Hi to Dad for me. I have to scram, otherwise I'll be late."
"Alright, have a good day."
Ducking away from the reception desk Nik hurried out the side door to the garage.
Sauntering down the hall toward her locker, Nik laughed along at some meaningless joke with her friends. So what if it was immature and not humorous in the least. If it made them happy, laugh along. Working her locker combination Nik listened to the banter of her 'clic'. Pulling her locker open, she grabbed her Trig book and notes.
"So Blue, what about you?" She blinked realizing she'd lost the thread of the conversation.
"What about me?"
"What do you want to be in life?"
"Drama Queen." She heard someone say from the back of the group.
"No, I want to be a Private Investigator, that or a Homicide Investigator." She watched as everyone blinked in confusion and surprise. She sighed, wishing for once she could be serious about that and didn't have to laugh it off, as it was she pasted a smile on her face.
"Just kidding. I want to be a super model." There we go, that's what they all thought she would say. Turning she dropped the smile with a slight growl.
"Hey Nik wait up." Nik sighed, it had been a long school day and she really didn't want to deal with anything else. As she turned she blinked, the sudden cares of school forgotten. Gorgeous hazel eyes, tall, strong, and rakish blonde hair. She was a sucker for a blonde. She's seen him but his name...what was his name? Joe-Joey-John-Joel? Yeah that was it, Joel.
"Oh, hey Joel. What's up?"
"Hey, I was just wondering if you wanted to go see a movie tonight or something." She smiled lightly, watching him shove his hands in his pockets and rock back and forth on his heels nervously. Glancing beyond his shoulder she saw a small pack of guys, snickering. She blinked as she noted the money that passed between their hands. So she was the object of their bet? Not in this life time. Her eyes darkened slightly as she looked back to Joel.
"In the words of many other great people. When hell freezes over." Punching him hard across the jaw, she turned with a growl and headed for her car.
Vessy: Overall: Well aside from several spelling mistakes (Could you people just learn to run it through a spell checker Please? I mean even Hotmail spell checks use it!) It was Really quite confusing and not really very dynamic.
I just didn’t really like the dynamics or basics of it. If you want to revise it it REALLY needs some more thought put into it. WHY does she like Christmas so much? And the whole B+B thing has to be worked over. I don’t think your really getting the concept of a bed and breakfast. It just sort of needs more thought and I didn’t like the personality a whole lot… It just seemed so one dimensional.
[ BIG RUBBER STAMP : ~PRINCESS~ ]
Verdict: REJECT
Dissy: while I have not been vocal at all in this app, I pretty much agree with Vessy on all counts. A lot of it was just confusing and you left out a lot of things we need to see, plus, you followed the ugly trend and were a foreigner. I know Vessy doesn't like foreigner characters and I sure as heck don't. Also, a warning, 17 is the "perfect age" the age everyone wants to be, no clue why, but it's true. This is why I agree and why we've chose to reject your application. You're welcome to take the tips we've given you and try for another character though.
Verdict: Reject