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Why Do They Even Bother?
Author's Name: Eike
Author's e-mail: [email protected]
Name of the Fanfiction: Why Do They Even Bother?
Link to Fanfiction:
*L-sama's Warnings* hetero; sarcastic couplings
*L-sama's Summery* None. This is just a few short stories that sarcastically pair up cannon couplings.
64 points total; ***
Grammar: VERY good! I found no errors that jumped out. 20.
Spelling: Again, good. It seems that at least some people can use that spellchecker. 20.
Readablity: It was a text file, so no problems there with formatting. There was a space between paragraphs, which made it easier to read, and there were no obvious errors. 20.
How plot handled: I am sorry, Eike. I cannot give you good points here. This parody is as inane as the original. 5.
Plot: See above. 5.
70 points
Three and 1/2 stars.
Grammar: None. 20/20Three stars
Unfortunately, this story has vital two flaws. One: like the original, it still has no plot, and two: it's funnier if you read the original first. (Which I don't recommend) Although the story does have some leeway, since it is a parody. However, the grammar and spelling was much better than the first and the Filia/Xellos joke at the end was funny.
50 points; 2 1/2 stars
*dies laughing* Now this is how it should be! *laughs harder* OK, ok....*deep breath and calms down* Sorry it took me so long to review this, I've been really busy and I haven't been able to too much of anything other than reading and answering some of my mail. Well, here is the review;
Grammar: Hmm....Well, the grammar seems OK. *taps chin* I'll give ya a 17/20
Spelling: *laughs* You're definitely a better speller than I am! (Thank L-sama for Spell Check!) Hmmm....17/20
Readability: This is where it gets tricky. I had to reread over a few parts, and it was a little complicated when you're half asleep (that's how I am when I read my mail), so I'm going to have to give you a 10/20.
Plot: I like how you did this. I agree with the plot. (I mean, Zel is at least 5 years older than Amelia...). I give this a 18/20.
How Plot was Handled: Like I said earlier, I like the idea (AKA The plot), but it is kinda busy/complicated when it comes to reading, so I'm going to average this one out. I'm giving you a 14/20.
And the grand total is.... *cues chibis for drum roll....only to be ignored* HEY! Don't make me torch you! *Chibis panic and start drum roll...* 76/100!!!! Not bad for a one shot! That's three and a half stars!