How to Get a Band 9 in IELTS Writing Task 2 (Proven System)

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this is the most reliable and quick way to pass your IELTS Writing Task 2 essay I've tested it  
這是我測試過的，最可靠且快速通過雅思寫作第二部分的方法

**00:00:08**  
on 30,000 course students and many of them join my courses after they failed their Writing  
在30,000名學員中，許多在寫作失利後加入我的課程

**00:00:15**  
and in their next test their score jumps from a 6 to a 7 or from 6.5 to 7.5  
他們的成績在下一次考試中從6分升到7分或從6.5升到7.5

**00:00:23**  
and they don't learn complex words or grammar  
他們並不學習複雜的單詞或文法

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they don't try dozens of practice essays or study for months  
他們也不嘗試做數十篇練習文章或長時間學習

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it actually takes them just 8 hours to learn my Writing system  
其實只需8小時，他們就能掌握我的寫作系統

**00:00:38**  
add some targeted practice and the right answers that get a band 7 or an even higher score  
加入一些針對性的練習和正確的答案，就能得到7分甚至更高的成績

**00:00:45**  
so today I'll show you how to write a full essay using this system  
所以今天我會示範如何用這個系統寫完整篇文章

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and there is a PDF with five essays of different types for you to download  
還有一份包含五種不同範例文章的PDF供你下載

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you voted for two direct questions task and have chosen quite a tricky task from recent exams in many countries  
你投票選了兩個直接問題的題目，也選了一個來自許多國家近期考試中的相當棘手的題目

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shopping is becoming a free time activity that replaces traditional hobbies such as reading and sport  
購物正成為一項取代傳統愛好的休閒活動，例如閱讀和運動

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what are the reasons for this do you think  
你認為這個現象的原因是什麼？

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this is a positive or negative development  
你認為這是積極還是消極的發展？

**00:01:23**  
this is a great topic to practice because the first question sounds like in a problem solutions essay  
這是一個很好的練習題目，因為第一個問題聽起來像是問題解決型的文章

**00:01:23**  
but the second one is all about your opinion and sometimes we write a whole essay just answering the second question  
但第二個問題則完全是關於你的觀點，有時我們會只寫一篇文章來回答第二個問題

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so how to combine the two without missing anything  
那麼如何結合兩者而不遺漏任何內容？

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normally here with stop and plan the essay but today I want you to concentrate on the essay and not planning  
平時我們會停下來規劃文章，但今天我希望你專注於寫作本身，而不是規劃

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so let's get straight into the introduction  
那麼我們直接進入引言部分

**00:01:53**  
the goal is to show The Examiner from the very start that you're going for a high score  
目標是從一開始就讓考官知道你追求高分

**00:02:01**  
so first introduce the task in many countries people are spending more and more of their Leisure Time shopping  
首先介紹題目：在許多國家，人們越來越多的閒暇時間用在購物上

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we also need to mention the traditional hobbies and now do that in a second  
我們還需要提及傳統愛好，接著在第二段說明

**00:02:15**  
in a two question essay we need to express our position towards both questions  
在雙題文章中，我們需要表達對兩個問題的立場

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this essay will examine why it is taking the place of more traditional past times  
這篇文章將探討為什麼它取代了更傳統的娛樂活動

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so don't waste your time listing all the reasons why it happens just give an outline for the second question  
所以不要浪費時間列出所有原因，只要對第二個問題做個大致說明

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give your opinion directly and argue that despite a few potential benefits this is predominantly a negative development  
直接表達你的觀點，並論證儘管有一些潛在好處，但這主要是一個負面現象

**00:02:43**  
whenever you need to give your opinion just give it straight in the introduction  
每次表達意見時，只需在引言中直截了當

**00:02:49**  
if you're taking my courses you've learned a more advanced structure for your introduction  
如果你在我課程中，你已經學會了更進階的引言結構

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but this one is the easiest  
但這個是最簡單的

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finish your introduction quickly to spend more time on your body paragraphs and I'll show you how to get a high score there in just a second  
快速完成引言，讓你有更多時間寫正文段，我會在一秒鐘內示範如何取得高分

**00:03:08**  
I just want to show you two things first a common question I get asked is if you're allowed to use personal pronouns in your essay  
我想先跟你說兩件事，一個常被問到的問題是：在文章中是否可以使用人稱代名詞

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I my absolutely we can say in this essay I will discuss or I think this is a positive development  
我當然可以說：「在這篇文章中，我將討論」或「我認為這是一個正面的發展」

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or you can keep it slightly more formal like we did this essay will examine and argue  
或者你可以用更正式的說法，比如：這篇文章將探討並論證

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also use some paraphrasing not to repeat the phrases from the task  
也可以用一些換句話說，避免重複題目中的詞句

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free time is leisure time a hobby is also a pursuit and very  
閒暇時間是休閒時間，愛好也是一種追求，而且非常

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the grammar too so instead of shopping is becoming we have people are spending more time shopping  
文法也是如此，所以不用「購物正成為」，我們可以說「人們花更多時間購物」


當然！以下是接續的短語拆分與中文翻譯：

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**00:03:52**  
the two sentences sound different  
這兩句句子聽起來不同

**00:03:59**  
how to get a B7 for your body paragraph or in our case more like 8.5  
如何讓你的正文段得到7分，或者在我們的情況下更像8.5分

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there are several simple rules so the first body paragraph should answer the first question  
有幾個簡單的規則，第一段正文應回答第一個問題

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try to find several simple but relevant ideas so here are mine  
嘗試找幾個簡單但相關的想法，這是我的一些例子

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people spend more time on shopping because they have more money to spend than in the past  
人們花更多時間購物，因為他們比過去有更多的錢可花

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also because of all the influence of social media and advertising  
還有受社交媒體和廣告的影響

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and people can shop online from home it's so easy that they shop instead of baking or kneading  
人們可以在家網上購物，非常方便，以至於取代了烘焙或揉麵

**00:04:45**  
at least my grandma definitely does so  
至少我奶奶是的

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so one key thing for a high score is a sentence that tells the examiner what this paragraph is about  
所以取得高分的關鍵是寫一句告訴考官這段內容的句子

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we call it a topic sentence  
我們稱之為主題句

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it's important because there is a Band 7 requirement that each paragraph should have one central topic  
這很重要，因為7分的要求是每段應有一個核心主題

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and if you want a Band 7 you must meet every Band 7 requirement  
如果想拿7分，你就必須符合每個7分的要求

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the key reasons behind and the rise in popularity of shopping are the increase in disposable income and changing habits  
購物日益流行的主要原因是可支配收入的增加和習慣的改變

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the opening of the sentence is very close to the question to make it clear what we're writing about  
句子的開頭與問題非常接近，讓人清楚我們在寫什麼

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you can keep it very simple uh there are several key reasons why people are spending more free time shopping  
你可以保持簡單，就是：人們花更多時間購物的幾個主要原因

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now the first idea as people earn more they feel more comfortable spending on goods they may not necessarily need  
第一個想法是：隨著收入增加，人們更願意在不一定需要的商品上花錢

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the second idea under the constant influence of social media and television people develop a desire for trendy items they see on their screens  
第二個想法是在社交媒體和電視的持續影響下，人們渴望看到的流行商品

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whether it is a new laptop or an item of clothing  
無論是新筆記本電腦還是衣服

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and in terms of linking words I'm not saying first second third in front of each sentence  
至於連接詞，我不是說一定要用「第一」、「第二」、「第三」放在每個句子前面

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we use linkers when we need them for example here furthermore the convenience of online shopping makes it easy to browse and order products from home  
我們在需要時會用連接詞，例如這裡的「此外」，網上購物的便利讓人可以輕鬆瀏覽和訂購商品

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replacing traditional at home pastimes such as baking kneading and reading  
取代傳統的居家娛樂，例如烘焙、揉麵和閱讀

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this example was inspired by my grandma but it didn't right my grandmother shops on her tablet all the time  
這個例子來自我奶奶，但句子寫得不好，我奶奶一直用平板購物

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so try to keep it more general and formal  
所以要保持更一般化和正式

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and the next paragraph is TR to get it right we really need to think about the ideas and our opinion  
下一段是為了做好這件事，我們真的需要先思考想法和意見

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first do you think this is a positive or negative development  
首先，你認為這是正面還是負面的發展？

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so we have just one paragraph to answer so choose one side positive or negative  
所以我們只有一段來回答，選擇正面或負面其中之一

**00:07:06**  
don't go into both positive and negative if we had a clear agree or disagree  
不要同時討論正反面，如果我們明確贊成或反對

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we could choose a balanced opinion because we have more space to play with  
我們可以選擇平衡的立場，因為有更多空間

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and in my courses will learn all three agree disagree and balanced opinion  
在我的課程中，你會學到三種立場：贊成、反對和平衡

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because you never know which one you have to use in your exam  
因為你不知道考試中會用到哪一種

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and generally we look into each question type and learn advanced techniques for planning and writing each paragraph  
一般來說，我們會研究每種題型，學習進階的寫作技巧

**00:07:37**  
I'll link the courses in the description if you'd like to check them out  
我會在描述中附上課程連結，如果你想看看

**00:07:44**  
and now let's get back to our question positive or negative  
現在回到我們的問題：正面還是負面

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you already know I've chosen negative but I still want to find ideas for both both and I'll show you why in just a second  
你已經知道我選擇了負面，但我仍想找兩方面的想法，我會在一秒內告訴你為什麼

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so the positive aspects which I think are not very strong are shopping is enjoyable and it's good for the economy  
所以我覺得正面方面並不太強烈：購物很享受，對經濟也有好處

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more shopping supports local businesses and creates jobs  
更多的購物支持本地企業並創造就業

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now the negative aspects or first of all over consumption people buy things they don't need  
現在的負面方面，首先是過度消費：人們購買自己不需要的東西

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and buying more is bad for the environment  
而過度購買對環境有害

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and also traditional hobbies are better for people I mean sport is healthy and eating is more creative  
傳統愛好對人更有益，我指運動健康，飲食更有創意

**00:08:43**  
reading leads to self-improvement so why do we need the positive aspects at all  
閱讀能促進自我提升，那我們為何還需要正面方面？

**00:08:50**  
I want to mention them very briefly to show I've covered them but then I spend 95% of the time on the negative aspects  
我會簡短提及它們，證明我提過，但大部分時間都在討論負面

**00:09:02**  
here is how we could do this although this trend may benefit the economy and offer short-term enjoyment  
我們可以這樣寫：儘管這個趨勢可能有助於經濟，也帶來短期快樂

**00:09:11**  
I firmly believe this is predominantly harmful  
我堅信這主要是有害的

**00:09:19**  
so the first half of the sentence mentions the positive ideas and that's the only mention  
所以句子前半提到正面觀點，這也是唯一提及的部分

**00:09:26**  
now I want to try something new I've prepared two versions of the paragraph  
現在我想試點新東西，我準備了兩個版本

**00:09:36**  
the first is simpler and you could get a Band 8 with it but if you're curious about Band 9 I'll show you a more advanced version too  
第一個較簡單，能拿到8分，但如果你想知道9分的版本，我也會示範

**00:09:44**  
let's read them sentence by sentence just remember simple incorrect is better than complex and wrong  
我們逐句讀，記住：簡單但錯誤比複雜但錯誤來得好

**00:09:52**  
so the first drawback the most significant drawback is that it encourages people to buy more than they need which can lead to debt and excessive waste  
第一個缺點，最重要的缺點是：它促使人們購買超出需求，可能導致債務和過度浪費

**00:10:00**  
and now compare it to the Band 9 version the most significant drawback is that it promotes over consumption often resulting not only in necessary debt but also in excessive waste  
比較一下9分版本，最重要的缺點是：它促進過度消費，常導致必要的債務和過度浪費

**00:10:08**  
so the vocabulary is more precise it encourages people to buy more is it promotes over consumption and from the grammar standpoint in the BN version we have a participle resulting and the structure not only but also  
因此詞彙更精確，"encourages" 改為 "promotes over consumption"，文法上用分詞 "resulting" 和 "not only... but also" 結構

**00:10:17**  
now the next idea moreover constantly purchasing and throwing away items consumes natural resources and worsens pollution  
接著下一個想法：此外，不斷購買和丟棄物品消耗自然資源，並加劇污染

**00:10:26**  
and in the BN version we have some really interesting verbs furthermore well moreover it doesn't matter the unending cycle of purchasing and discarding goods depletes natural resources and exacerbates pollution  
在9分版本中用到一些很有趣的動詞，例如 "furthermore"、"well"、"moreover"；不斷購買與丟棄的循環會耗盡自然資源並惡化污染

**00:10:35**  
so we have a number of more formal words uh the unending cycle discarding instead of throwing away depletes instead of consumes and exacerbates instead of worsens  
因此，我們用一些較正式的詞彙：unending cycle（無盡的循環）、discarding（丟棄）代替 "throw away"、depletes（耗盡）代替 "consumes"、exacerbates（惡化）代替 "worsens"

**00:10:43**  
I just want to be clear that it's better to use words you know well and can use accurately then to go for big words and create more mistakes  
我想強調：用自己熟悉且正確的詞比用大詞、反而犯錯要好

**00:10:51**  
because if you do that your score will actually go down and not up  
因為這樣會讓你的分數反而降低，不會提高

**00:10:58**  
okay let's have a look at the last idea another concern is that people who spend most of their spare time shopping may neglect healthier hobbies such as sport creative projects or social events that support personal growth and wellbeing  
好，我們來看最後一個想法：另一個擔憂是，花大部分閒暇時間購物的人可能會忽視健康的愛好，如運動、創意項目或社交活動，這些有助於個人成長與福祉

**00:11:17**  
and let's compare it to the Band 9 version which has a really interesting beginning equally concerning is that individuals who devote their leisure time to shopping may neglect how their pursuits such as sport creative endeavors and communal events that foster genuine personal growth and well-being  
與9分版本相比，它用更複雜的語法和更精確的詞：e.g. "foster genuine personal growth"（促進真正的個人成長）

**00:11:41**  
again more complex grammar and more precise vocabulary all you need now is to write a conclusion but don't get relaxed  
同樣，較複雜的語法和更精確的詞彙，接下來你只需要寫結論，但不要放鬆

**00:11:49**  
but I noticed that my students sometimes get the introduction and body paragraphs right and then the conclusion goes off-topic and they won't get the score it could get  
但我注意到，有時學生引言和正文都寫得不錯，但結論偏離主題，導致得不到該有的分數

**00:11:56**  
again I have two versions but this time there is a simpler version you can write quickly definitely good enough for 7.5 and a more advanced version  
我也準備了兩個版本，這次有個較簡單的，快速寫完就可以拿到7.5分；還有一個較進階的版本

**00:12:04**  
in conclusion shopping as a hobby is becoming more common however its downsides can lead to serious problems  
總結：購物作為一種愛好越來越普遍，但其負面可能帶來嚴重問題

**00:12:20**  
so this summarizes the ideas we could give more details like in our Band 9 version  
這總結了主要觀點，我們還可以像9分版本一樣加入更多細節

**00:12:37**  
in conclusion while shopping as a hobby is becoming increasingly common its downsides including overconsumption environmental harm and the neglect of more fulfilling activities have far-reaching consequences  
總結：雖然購物成為越來越普遍的愛好，但其負面影響如過度消費、環境破壞和忽視更有意義的活動，會產生深遠的後果

**00:12:54**  
and now I want to restate my opinion and link it back to our task so this sentence is the same in both versions  
我現在想重申我的觀點，並將其與題目連結，這句話在兩個版本中都一樣

**00:13:01**  
I believe that by replacing healthier hobbies with an often wasteful pursuit this trend ultimately has a negative impact on both individuals and society  
我相信，以較健康的愛好取代這種常常浪費的追求，最終會對個人和社會產生負面影響

**00:13:09**  
of course this is just one way to write an essay on one topic and for your exam you should learn how to answer each type of task  
當然，這只是寫作某一主題的一種方式，在考試中，你應該學會如何應對每種類型的題目

**00:13:16**  
in task one and task two how to write each paragraph and meet every Band 7 requirement  
在Task 1和Task 2中，如何寫每個段落，並符合每個7分的要求

**00:13:22**  
if you need a Band 7 score you could learn all this in my courses and I'll link them below  
如果你想拿到7分，可以在我的課程中學到這些，我會在下面附上連結

**00:13:30**  
you can also download this essay and answers for each type of task as PDF again below  
你也可以在下面下載這篇文章和每種類型題目的範例PDF

**00:13:37**  
and to dive deeper into writing task 2 you can watch a video on how to write perfect introductions for your writing task 2 essays using my more advanced formula  
想深入了解Task 2的寫作，可以觀看我用更進階公式示範如何寫完美引言的影片

**00:13:45**  
I mentioned earlier this is the video and thank you so much for watching me today good luck with your preparation and your exam bye  
我之前提到的影片就是這個，非常感謝你今天觀看，祝你準備順利，考試加油，再見！

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