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Aristotle
~Jackie is not your average run-of-the-mill critter. She has the magical abiltiy to glance at a poem and see its possibilities. She is generous with suggestions and will even rewrite a couple of lines to get you back on track. Rhyme and rhythm are Jackie's middle names - she's a natural-born poet with bucket loads of talent. A critique from Jackie is a gift and I recommend her highly~
Jill McDougall - (author of over 90 children's books including Anna the Goanna and other poems - a CBCA Notable Book)
~We all have one - a rhyming poem/story that has sucked the life from us; one that we refuse to give up on because of the time and effort invested in it, the same one that we cannot bear to look at again for fear we will throw up!
Don't waste another wrinkle on it - do what I did, send it to Jackie! She'll have its flabby guts trim, taut and rhyming in no time and you remembering why you wrote it in the first place.
Jackie's manuscript assessment is not only the answer to your all your rhyming poems - it's an anti-ageing remedy no author can be without. It worked for me!
Seriously Jackie, thank you.~
Stacey McCleary - (author of 'When it is Time' & 'What Makes me me')
~You have a knack of being able to put 'life into a poem'. You have certainly done that to mine. I feel that you have helped me enormously and I have taken on board all of your suggestions. I really do like your ideas.
I can now see the vast difference and really do appreciate all your advice. I can really see the benefit of having someone, like yourself, look at it from all perspectives.
I have no hesitation in recommending your to other poets and will definitely call on you for your advice in the near future. Thanks again~
Helen
~Excellent Jackie. I can hear the tighter rhythm and the simplification works well. Thank you.~
Beverley George (Editor Yellow Moon - a literary magazine for writers of haiku and other verse)
~Jackie - thanks so much for your feedback re my poem. I can see exactly what you mean regarding the language and the rhythm. Sometimes one gets hung up on using a word or phrase that one loves but is to the detriment of the poem and the lines become convoluted. I can see when your objective eye points out what could be changed or presents other options that work nicely. I look forward to being in touch again when I get a bit further into my editing process. Thanks again.~
Andrea
~Hey Jackie,
Just love it!! You are so clever.
It has a lovely rhythm to it now. Thank you so much, Can't believe it, I really love what you have done,
Many cheers to you~
Michele
~Thanks so much for your help.
I'm glad you found my story sort of ok - I was initially reluctant to get your advice because
a) it could have been very embarrassing and
b) I thought it wouldn't really be my work afterwards but I guess it's no different to what editors do.
In the end I couldn't seem to get it any better and you have made a big difference.
You are so right about it being hard to give others your work to read. I am still a student so have a particularly fragile ego.
You were kind so thank-you. ~
Sue
~Thanks Jackie - I love the suggestions you've made!
I was stuck with the ending and I think it sounds so much better now. I can't thank you enough. ~
Lindee
~Just read it............I love what you have done! Thank you !
It has made all the difference!~
Doreen
~Thanks for the feedback it was extremely useful.~
Jade
~Thank you Jackie
What a turn around. It's a fantastic change around.
Thanks again. ~
Carmel
~Many thanks for your edit. I am so appreciative of your time and help and love the changes you made!
Best wishes ~
Leonie
~Hi Jackie,
Thank you so much.
This has been very helpful and I do think it reads reads better. Less bumpy that's for sure.
Thanks again. ~
Neridah
~Thanks so much for you revisions and for your fast turnaround. I like what you�ve done with the text and will spend some time going over it and trying to improve it based on your suggestions.
Kind regards ~
Aleesah
~Thanks so much for your assessment of my poem. This poem has been stuck in a rut for about three years, (I've been ignoring it). In one brief assessment, you've shown me the way forward. I think I've nearly sorted the thing out. You were very kind, and very thorough, so many thanks.~
Aleesah