Hm.Yes. Well. This is a very odd style, I realize. Different from my usual writing, well, at least my usual writing that actually gets presented to the public. To understand this style, first you must know a little background information. Firstly, emordain has this terrible tendency to get ideas at two in the morning, be so bugged by them that she is unable to sleep, get up around three, and write them. The exhaustion results in an odd little style that's impossible to describe, really, but has usually has some characteristics that may include, but are not limited to, the following: rarely using the same words twice, except to make a point or emphasize something. Really weird metaphors that even I usually don't understand in the morning. Emphasis on sounds and action rather than words. Dreamlike qualities, which make a lot of sense considering when it was written.
Hm, interesting... Well, I can't very well analyze my own writing, and the only feedback I've gotten so far is "the ending is just the same as that other one" (referring to an old, old original fic that as far as I know only three other people have read, and it will forever be limited to those three), and indeed, it was! Wow, but that tells me nothing about my writing itself. Ah well. Perhaps you would like to comment?...