Meaningless Modifiers and Empty Phrases
**American industrial productivity depends more on psychology than on technology.
In my opinion, we should file the appropriate papers in
the
event that we are unable to meet the deadline.
**We should file the appropriate paper if we are unable to meet the deadline.
**More universities are offering adult education courses because
more adults are seeking additional education (even better: "because
of an increase in demand")
Academese/Jargon
For years the indigenous body politic of South Africa
attempted to negotiate legal enfranchisement without
result.
**For years the native population of South Africa negotiated in vain
for the right to vote.
When our progenitors reach their silver-haired and golden
years, we frequently ensepulcher them in homes for
senescent
beings as if they were already among the deceased.
**When our parents become old, we frequently bury them in
old-age homes as if they were already dead.