COMMENTS on ISSUE ONE
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Here are comments on the comic before the guestbook got up and running. Evidently, I like the idea they're kinda like letters to a published comic, so here they are for all to read (with my replies when appropriate.)
��� Like Dave ���
ei, tobie.�
i saw the first three pages of diliman before my connection cut off.
very impressive. :) (your work, not my connection being cut. :D ) �
the first page is utterly weird and surreal. the "what the fuck am i?" line even makes it more intriguing. cool. me likes it. �
the inks are great, not too polished. i hate to use the term, but it gives the art a bit of edge. actually, some of drawings remind me of�dave mckean's slightly-leaning-to-the-left ink drawings. from i've seen so far, the breakdowns are tight and dynamic (page 3.) i'd suggest improve the lettering, though, and how they fill the word balloons. make them more consistent, and approximate speech volume - whether a character is mumbling, speaking, or shouting.�
i have a problem with the dialogues on page three. the way you presented it, it's like the characters are saying it audibly. i imagine they might be, at most, just mumbling. i would, if i were waiting for a cab. and i think "kailangan siyang mamatay" shouldn't be there. (i haven't seen page 4), but i'd say it's better that the guy in black shirt (neat transformation, by the way) should just attack the other guy after confirming that other guy is indeed a salamangkero. i think "kailangan siyang mamatay" is just stating what will be obvious to the readers. �
will read the rest later. good work, this is. �
JD
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Thanks for the kind words! I never thought I would see the day my art would even be slightly compared to Dave McKean! Thank you very much! You probably also have noticed that I have taken note of your suggestion and redid almost all lettering with a computer now. Nicely, it added more space, giving me more dialogue and words to slide into the work. Hope you like it even more so now.
��� Gory rules! ���
Ey, Tobie!
Wow, pretty gory and graphic for me! I like the storyteling a lot!
-Wilson
Again, thank you for the words! I was hoping to be able to show "gore" in the book without it looking unnecessarily slasher-flick-sh. I do hope I accomplished it.
��� Catchy firsts ���
it's good actually, and the first page is very catchy.
jen
You are all too kind. :-) THANK YOU AGAIN!
��� Come a long way ���
I saw your pages. Not bad at all dude! You've certainly come a long way
from the first book I read from you - Tale Weaver(or was it? m not sure
of the title) It's Dark and gloomy with a Frank miller kinda touch.
Although I think the pinoy alamats(tikbalangs and the like) are kinda
over used na.
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Okay, now I really am smiling. FRANK MILLER! I was compared with Frank Miller! Yahoo! :-) I remember you to be that artist who drew very good stuff way back in Highschool too. Jim Lee-ish and all that, if I recall correctly. Have you made anything new lately? Would love to see your progression in art. Oh and the book was ZoneWeaver. It had three tomes (over 200 pages) of full colored work and three story arcs. Even had fold-out pages, 3D coloring in certain portions (use 3D glasses and things pop out) and pin-ups and trading cards done by friends! Who knows, maybe I'll try scanning them and posting them online someday. Thanks again for your comments dude! ��� Disturbing and Dark read ���
disturbing, dark, a wonderful read. how often do u update? and curiously, enough the lead character is named gabe.
matthias uy
Well, I try to update at least once a month. I know, I know, for a simple comic like this, one would expect sooner updates... but what can I say? Real life has its priorities. As to the name Gabe (which is featured prominently in my other work, the fan-fiction "The Engima Grows" which adds to the Peter Millgian-Duncan Fedrego Vertigo min-series, "Enigma" I must admit, I am a sucker for the name. Its taken from my middle name, Gabriel. Thanks for liking the book! And by now you should note issue two is up. ��� At a net cafe ���
So... DILIMAN... Sadly, the cafe I was couldn't download your pages fast enough. But I've seen the first few pages and it's really clean. Very indie. An improvement from that piece you showed me before -- the mother and child thing. Your style is developing and going somewhere. Though there are some panels that aren't too clear, like the one showing the silhouette of the horsehead, or panels meant to be establishing shots.
Slow download, so I can't get through issue one. But from what I've read so far? Well... iffy pa rin ako. Kase I remember reading great stuff from you. Eto, parang minadali. I dunno. Let's talk about it when we meet! :-)
Take care, Tobie! HUGS
Carl
Thanks for the comments Carl. I'll take note of your words. After all, you have successfully self-published a few comics of your own already! (Readers, check them out: One Night in Purgatory and his contribution to ATBP.]
As to the art being rushed, I have to admit I was still adjusting to drawing again when I made the first issue. The next few should be getting better.
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