Um...okay. Sure. Yeah, that could happen. [/sarcasm]rnrn You need to stop watching porn, little girl. Honestly. Margaret is not Jenna Jameson. Hawkeye is not Mike Carrie. They would not call each other "baby", they would not fuck each other every chance given, she'd never give him a handjob norwould she suck his cock. You are a sick little girl. How old are you? 14? 15? Well, no matter how old you are, we all know you're a virgin because...well, SEX DOES NOT HAPPEN LIKE THAT! MARGARET IS NOT A SCREAMER. THEY WOULD NOT BE KINKY. YOU ARE DISTURBED. SEEK PROFESSIONAL HELP. GET YOUR HANDS OUT OF YOUR PANTS. TAKE THE PORN OUT OF THE VCR. YOU ARE AN IDIOT. STOP WRITING NOW. I BEG OF YOU. STOP
Well now...this was a...a different story, to say the least...NOT! I believe I've read this story before, or at least one like it...but at least that one was origonal! Only thing original about this was the names! Hawkeye would NEVER pick names like that for his kids! Not only that, but with so many kids going around I couldn't keep track of them and their freak names!! I pity any kid you ever have, they're gonna have a name like Fruitpie or something. And people in real life are NOT that MUSHY! It's like a damn soap opera! Everything is clouds and lollipops and sunshine! Life ISN'T like that! Get over it! Hawkeye isn't like that either! You have to learn how to write your story to the characters since they have already been around! You can't change characters like Hawkeye!! They were all so out of character it was a damn shame and embarassing to M*A*S*H!! Please, put away your pen and your keyboard and for the sake of hummanity, stop writing this shit! And don' t butter everyone up and suck up to people, acting all perfect. You're far from it.
Promise me that you never ever plan to have children of your own. Or if you do,let someone else name them. This whole thing is like a bad romance novel.Seriously, where do you get these names? Dorby?...the hell? Kamilia Chiara? what were you THINKING?!?!?!
how incredibly and disturbingly Mary Sue. i liked the part where you mention the bad spelling and grammar. at least, i liked it after i had the bad spelling and grammar translated into actual english. use a spellchecker and a beta reader.better yet, stop writing. you're embarrassing yourself.