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19 January 2005: I started fiddling with my poem about metricality, etc., again. Can't seem to get it right. Here's the latest version:

The blissed high surge a metrical design
can April into almost any line,
when used with skill, is surely well-worth praise.
So, too, the multitude of other ways
that sound effects can make a poet's words
woods scatteredly lit up with hidden birds.

But poems at their best
need little or no mellifluousness
from received reality
to make a poet's words
worlds multiplying
far deeper into the blood
that any woods, however lit,
can penetrate.
Okay, the second stanza was kinda thrown together. I think the first stanza may work. My big problem is finding a climax for the poem that will clearly outshine the first stanza's climax.


















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