17 January 2005: My first conventional stand-alone haiku in quite some time occurred to me this morning. I was going to use it in a mathemaku but found something better to use there instead. It may be worth keeping, I dunno. Here it is:
laundromat window
on a treeless vacant lot's
resistance to the rain
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Washings, emptinesses, yes? You know what gave me the most trouble? Determining the preposition after "resistance." I'm still not sure I used the right one. I also had trouble deciding whether or not "the" should be in my last line; it adds an extra syllable that I don't like, but it makes the poem more now. So I kept it.
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