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4 January 2005: I did have a mild criticism of some of Richard Kostelanetz's circular statements. Not really a criticism, I guess, but an observation about why some strike me as better, technically, than others. The better ones are those that have no stops in them. Both his "THE POETRY OF LIFE COPIES" and "ART CREATES WORLDS MADE ETERNALLY FROM" stop, the first after "LIFE" (the second time it gets to it), the second after "ART" (also the second time it gets to it). My "EVERYTHING I DO MAKES ME WANT TO ANALYZE" has the same problem, for it stops at "DO." My improved version of it is therefore: "EVERYTHING I DO MAKES ME WANT TO ANALYZE WHY." Making a participial phrase of each of Richard's removes their stops but also de-sentences them--i.e., makes them no longer sentences. I think it ought to be easy to "correct" Richard's in a way that allows them to remain sentences but haven't figured out how.
Maybe they're better with the little jump of rails left in them: one sentence improperly changing into another. . . . More witty, that way (and Richard has said wit is a main aim of his as an artist).
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